Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Excellent recounting of the horrible murders at Bellingham Manor. Excellent transition to the paranormal team investigating the strange happenings decades later. Mia shows her extraordinary powers by taking care of the pain in Emma's ankle. The other members of the team, Mike and Luke, are overwhelmed by the paranormal activity in the house. Furniture moved into the library, etc. Excellent work with this. It's so interesting to read how the team goes about its investigation. A good thing they have a psychic among them. By all means, continue with this. There's so much suspense, it reminds me of some of the movies I've seen about such investigations. judi

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016

Hi, Judi

Thank you very much for this most encouraging review, Judi. I enjoy watching how the various paranormal groups approach dealing with poltergeist/ghostly activities. For some families, their help is truly a godsend. And I do appreciate, also, your mentioning the transition of the two eras. I took a chance on the way I wrote it, so it's good to know you felt it was effective..

So happy to see you in the SOM contest once again. It's quite a diverse field, and I'm really proud to be in it with all of you.

Have a great weekend,

Bev

reply by judiverse on 20-Feb-2016

You're very welcome. You really create and effective, spooky atmosphere and your characters really seem part of the paranormal experience. I was surprised to find myself in the SOM contest. Scripts usually don't play too well in the voting. It looks like your entry should do well, and best of luck. judi

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016

Thanks, Judi. I appreciate your encouraging words.

With Captain Jack and Humpie in the contest, and given the length of the list, I'm happy with whatever comes my way LoL.

reply by judiverse on 21-Feb-2016

I see you're at the top now. Good for you. Too often it's just the usual suspects who come out winners. judi

reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016

Thanks Judi, but one thing I've learned is never to count my chickens!

reply by judiverse on 21-Feb-2016

You're welcome. Glad you're up there on top. Not many days left. judi

reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016

That's very kind of you, Judi. But with Humpie and all his fans you never know :))

reply by judiverse on 21-Feb-2016

Things do get rather predictable. judi

reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016

Unfortunately, here on FanStory that is certainly the case. Though I'm glad they've started including scrips in the SOM, I think there should still be a separate category. You would, hands-down win that honor, Judi.

:) Bev

Comment from w.j.debi

Exceptional

Hi Bev,

This chapter gave me goosebumps. I am happy to see you have returned to your ghost hunters and their story. Oh, the poor spirits that inhabit this house. They need help. I am being good and not reading ahead, but hope for more soon.
You do the spiritual world so well.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016

Thank you so much, Debi. I really appreciate you sticking with the story despite the delays in posting. I'm working on the
next installment right now, so it won't take nearly as long!

I'm thrilled that you got what I was hoping for--a feeling for the victims of Charles' evil. So often, in real life, it's all about the murderer and what makes them snap. Families feel their loved one takes back seat in importance especially if the murders are gruesome.

I appreciate the lovely stars as well as your encouragement and support.

:) Bev

Comment from zarawest

Good

You write very cleanly and clearly. The action is particularly well-explained and presented in a logical way. The story of a group of paranormal investigators has tremendous possibilities as a novel. The reason that I gave it 4 stars instead of 5 is because of the disconnect between the two sections. The opening or maybe prologue is written in omniscient narration which makes the horrifying event of Catherine's murder seem dry. Consider writing it in the style of the modern section that follows. Also I could not figure out who Margarethe is and why Catherine was worried about her.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016

Thank you for your review.

This is the 13th chapter in the novel. If you had gone back and read the other chapters you would not be confused.
As to your opinion on the writing, I concede that you are entitled to that.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Wow, you've got my attention here. This is the first chapter I've read of this book and I am totally taken. Something is going on here. As a matter of fact , I do believe in ghosts. I've actually experienced one albeit a friendly one. Love your writing.
This reminds me of a British case of a Lord Lucan who in the seventies apparently murdered his wife and a maid they thought was his mistress. He disappeared into thin air and has never been heard of nor ever found. The murder case is still open. Are you by any chance basing it on this? Can't wait to read on. All the best. Ulla:)

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016

Hi, Ulla. I'm fascinated by your mention of that murder case. I did not know about the case when I began this novel. I do watch a lot of crime dramas, and will have to check out that particular one.

I appreciate your support and encouragement! Glad you're open to reading more.

:) Bev

reply by Ulla on 20-Feb-2016

Oh, I am, Bev. Can't wait. Ulla:))

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016

Thanks again, Ulla!

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

The artwork is just amazing and tdon't story you added is great as well. The topic of your write keeps each reader attentive because it is so well versed. Awesome.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016

Thanks so much, foxangie123. I appreciate very much you taking time to review and comment.

:) Bev

reply by foxangie123 on 20-Feb-2016

Welcome...

Comment from Adri7enne

Excellent

You almost make searching for ghosts into a science. I know some people believe in ghosts. Your premise is good - the background about Charles Bellingham and the murdered wife and her lover - it answers a lot of questions. But it would take a lot of convincing to convert a skeptic like me. It's good reading, though. Wish I knew more about Reiki. I have a bad knee these days. It was good reading you, Bev.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016

Hi, Adrienne. Thank you for your gracious review. I'm glad you felt the story was entertaining if a bit far-fetched.

These days, searching for ghosts is very much a science. There's new equipment coming out on a regular basis and most of it is highly computerized. Nothing takes the place of a good psychic, though.

Sorry about your knee. That's one area that can really put a damper on activities, not to mention throwing off the gait. I hope you're able to find some relief.

Have a good weekend!

:) Bev

Comment from BruceMiller

Excellent

I found this to be an interesting read. It held me right from the start. Also, it's refreshing to read something written by an author the has a good knowledge of punctuation. I'll look out for your next installment.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016

Thanks so much, Bruce. I appreciate you taking time to read my post.

A follow-up chapter should be along about mid-week next week depending on how the editing goes.

Much appreciated,
Bev

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

A quite lengthy and extensive piece your posted. Maybe it could've been split into further chapters since there was quite a bit of detail (at least in my opinion). Overall, well written. John

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016

Thanks very much for taking the time to read, John. I'll take your comment into consideration for my next post.

:) Bev

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

my PC or the author who utilizes name writing all this is well written with a great ajective content and semen imagery and based on that thought on the scale to from 12100 I would give it at 100 2

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016

Thanks for your review and insights.

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Exceptional

The opening paragraph give us a good insight into the expectations from ambitious parents for their marriageable age daughter.
After the bodies were removed - great paragraph, I could feel this investigators goose bumps and then you
The presence of the paranormal team - in this paragraph I get the feeling that Catherine isn't really happy either with the new presences.
Great read in this chapter.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016

Pearl, thanks so much for remaining loyal to this novel. I'm planning a follow-up post in about a week. It's hard for readers to keep up when so much time passes.

You are right on target about Catherine's reluctance to allow herself any hope. More on that in later chapters.

Your support and encouragement mean a lot to me, Pearl.

:) Bev