Comment from Cooper Watt

Excellent

Hooray for the light in the distance, eh?

Sure! Why not?

Although, you paint such an ominous picture of the world today, it's tough to say hooray about anything....

Either way, I enjoyed your poem as always.

Sincerely,
Coop.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.

Comment from BigTomNY

Excellent

I enjoyed this piece!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! For me it flowed nicely!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I could really see what the authour was shooting for!!!!

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

This is a great piece to read on a topic that touches so many of us around the word....
Sure hope your last stanza is the beacon for the world.

Thanks for sharing a great and purposeful poem
Good luck in the contest.
Maureen

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend. And thanks for your well wishes, don't ever expect much-but have to try. Ine

reply by Maureen's Pen on 17-Sep-2011

Trying is the main thing..have a great weekend too.
hugs
Maureen

Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

A poem with a very current and relevant message. I hope you're right about the light up ahead. Sometimes it seems that we begin to see one and then it goes out again. Good rhymes, Ine. Nice one, my friend. Av

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.

Comment from Chris Tee

Excellent

This is an excellent poem splendidly playing with the world markets and economies here old sport.
Well done with this splendid poem.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.

Comment from Writingfundimension

Excellent

Hi, Ine. The whole world is struggling financially, and your poem offers up both a commentary on that and, I found, a chilling suggestion of what this could lead to in your line 'a third world war predispose'. Europeans are still living with the reminders of the two previous world wars fought on your continent and I think that is an interesting perception you have. Great job with the rhymes and flow. Good luck in the contest! Warm regards, Bev

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

Just like life it comes and goes.
there are ups and downs as your poem enclosed.
There is a message within your poem.
Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.

reply by misscookie on 17-Sep-2011

Your very welcome you and yours have a blessed week end also.

Comment from ephraim crud, COS.

Excellent

Hi Ine,
i sincerely mean this as a compliment when i say
i so delight in your naive approach to our language.
it's so refreshing and uplifting -it's just lovely!

i've a couple of prompts, mind, that you may or may
wish to try:

Recessions comes and goes
But now for years to stay
The house market's are froze
Stock market's down today

Some wise people propose
No bouquet nor sorbet
Don't buy new unused clothes
Wear old ones day by day

History it might disclose
Another deadly play
A third world-war predispose'
All we can do is pray

Some time this also goes
How does it go the say
A light in the distance glows
And all will say: Hooray

thank you me Dutchess for sharing. warmly, eph.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend. Thanks so much for the tips, but has to stay my own-do agree yours sound better.

Comment from Yvon

Average

Nice little piece, the rhyming is on but the read doesn't flow off the tip of the tongue. The first word 'Recessions' should be recession. House market and stock market sound repetitive. Maybe try 'House sales have froze' Perhaps a little tweeking would help the flow. Good luck!

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 Comment Written 17-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011

Thanks for your review, Ine. Have a great weekend.

Comment from Tom C. Adams

Excellent

This a great poem that takes a run at RECESSION,a scary message to be sure. No one wants one, yet it seems to always be just around the corner. You have carefully and gracefully brought all the "belt-tightening" thoughts to the fore.

Don't buy new clothes
Wear the old day by day

This one and several others helps to hammer home your point.

One teensy little thing: Unless I am reading it wrong, please review your word choice in the final stanza which now reads "how do the say".

Very nice...and Good luck in the contest!
Tom C. Adams

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2011

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend. Thanks for the tip and well wishes.