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Deadly disease

Prevention is better than cure

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Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is very well written, geetbthim, a great job writing this reminder about the way prevention is the best cure since one does not exist. i wish you the best of luck in the ontest

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2011

reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
    thanks sweetwoodjax
    Warm regards
    geetbhim
Comment from Piggies Grandma
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Your poem is cleverly written and very well thought out. You say so much with only a few well chosen words. It is very sad that children are born with it.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2011

reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
    thanks a lot piggies Gradma for your great review
    warm regards
    geetbhim
Comment from Trybuck
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It is a tragic waste for one so young, no matter the age to have to face the hardships of this or any other life-threatning disease.

Prevention is the best cure for this one..

Well done, Buck

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2011

reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
    thanks a lot for the great review trybuck
    warm regards
    geetbhim
Comment from alexisleech
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Well done for managing to get such a great message across within the confines of a 5/7/5 and in so few words. I don't think everyone appreciates how hard that can sometimes be!

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2011

reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
    yes very true alexisleech thanks for the review
    warm regards
    geetbhim
Comment from peggles
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This was so true and very moving
Those poor children born to die
In a terrible way all due to ignorance and lack of education in prevention
No cue as yet but they are always trying to find a cure
maybe one day they will

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2011

reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
    yes i do agree with you pegles thanks for the review.
    warm regards
    geetbhim
Comment from misscookie
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Onceagain your words were short to thepoint
with a strong message for everyone to folow

I love the last line Bye to AIDES
This is agood write

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2011

reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
    Thanks a lot for your kind review and generous rating.

    geetbhim
reply by misscookie on 09-Oct-2011
    My pleasure.
Comment from nlisah
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so very true and sad, yes prevention is far better than care just think about all the health factors alone and sick days of the affected,im sure they wished they would backtrack that day.and nice following rules on 5-7-5 poem

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2011

reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
    Thank you very much for the kind review.

    geetbhim
Comment from laren
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An excellent warning about health prevention methods.
Written in short, as a capsule to keep in mind always.
Congratulations!
Laren

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2011

reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
    Thank you Laren.
    i am rely glad to recieve your rating.
    Thanks for reading.
reply by laren on 15-Sep-2011
    Thank you for sharing,
    Laren,
Comment from Chris Tee
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Sorry I had to abandon the read because this is not in the required format. You will not shape in the contest. This is a three line poem required, but it must have 5 syllables not words in the first line, 7 syllables not words in the second and 5 syllables in the last line

Let me try to help you.
It is a 5-7-5, Haiku and senryu format, Ok:
Example:
I love you so much = 5 syllables
My love for you is extreme = 7 syllables
Much is love for you = 5 syllables
Three lines only you see
Every = 3 syllables e=1 ve=1 ry=1 total = 3
Now do not give up go and edit it. Once you have edited it reply to me and I shall re-review it for you. If you do not understand tell me in your reply Ok, I shall try to help you further
Never quit.


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 Comment Written 15-Sep-2011

reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
    Sir, can you explain me the syllbles in the poem which you have given as an example I love you so much.In that line how to count
    the syllables.
    Thanks for the help.
reply by Chris Tee on 15-Sep-2011
    I =1 love=1 you=1 so=1 much=1 Total = 5 syllables
    My=1 love=1 for=1 you=1 is=1 ex=1 treme=1 total = 7 syllables
    Much=1 is=1 love=1 for=1 you=1 Total= 5 syllables
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
    Thank you very much sir,
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
    Thank you very much sir,
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
    Thank you very much sir,
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
    Thank you very much sir.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2011
    Thank you very much sir.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2011
    sir, I have edited my 5-7-5 poetry .Kindly review it.
reply by Chris Tee on 16-Sep-2011
    Now that is spot-on and I will re-review it for you well done old sport.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2011
    thank you sir, the help you have done for me.