Deadly disease
Prevention is better than cure19 total reviews
Comment from Cynthia Tee
This is a good message to all out there. As you said, prevention is better than cure. Nice choice of words my friend. Warm regards, Cynthia.
P.S. I checked your portfolio. I see you are doing quite well. I am glad for you...keep it up. Warm regards, Cynthia.
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This is a good message to all out there. As you said, prevention is better than cure. Nice choice of words my friend. Warm regards, Cynthia.
P.S. I checked your portfolio. I see you are doing quite well. I am glad for you...keep it up. Warm regards, Cynthia.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
Comment from mr elis
I really don't know how true it is but I read in our city paper last week that cure for AIDS,is being discovered but it can't be used on human yet.That which means, there is still hopes for a long tomorrow.
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I really don't know how true it is but I read in our city paper last week that cure for AIDS,is being discovered but it can't be used on human yet.That which means, there is still hopes for a long tomorrow.
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Comment Written 09-Dec-2011
Comment from rjuselius
a thought-provoking piece of literary art.
the solution to aids is a question
every country with a high contamination
must think of. well, any country. prevention
is not necessarily possible, so fighting against
aids with meds is the next logical step. the
nightmare is that the countries with the highest
contamination, do not have a choice between life or death.
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a thought-provoking piece of literary art.
the solution to aids is a question
every country with a high contamination
must think of. well, any country. prevention
is not necessarily possible, so fighting against
aids with meds is the next logical step. the
nightmare is that the countries with the highest
contamination, do not have a choice between life or death.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2011
Comment from rchitwood
Very true and you would think now people would be smart.Your poem has good description of what happens when folks do not protect themselves.Good contest contender.Blessings Rita
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Very true and you would think now people would be smart.Your poem has good description of what happens when folks do not protect themselves.Good contest contender.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 09-Dec-2011
Comment from amarherig14
There is no cure for this decease. Precaution should be taken; babies are born with it if the mother is infected.It is well written with a good message in it.Good luck.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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There is no cure for this decease. Precaution should be taken; babies are born with it if the mother is infected.It is well written with a good message in it.Good luck.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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thanks for the great rating and review.
warm regards geetbhim
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You are welcome. It is something to write about, maybe lives are saved. Warm regards,amarherig.
Comment from KinaSalad
Hey there Geetihim, I like your haiku, but I deagree with the no cure for this disease. I am positive, the last two stories I put up on here can cure this, its a book and I havent finished it, just 2 chapters, go and read. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Hey there Geetihim, I like your haiku, but I deagree with the no cure for this disease. I am positive, the last two stories I put up on here can cure this, its a book and I havent finished it, just 2 chapters, go and read. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 03-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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thanks for the read, and i would like to read what you have suggested,where can i find your stories,should i go to your portfolio?
warm regards
geetbhim
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Comment from shirley31
WoW i salute this the colour brings added effect
it is a subject that i get very angry about because i know that in some countries Condoms are forbidden or are too costly i have my own views on this matter i only wish instead of making nuclear bombs all countries should use the money to find cures and do research for all desease! i really appreciate this write.xxxx
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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WoW i salute this the colour brings added effect
it is a subject that i get very angry about because i know that in some countries Condoms are forbidden or are too costly i have my own views on this matter i only wish instead of making nuclear bombs all countries should use the money to find cures and do research for all desease! i really appreciate this write.xxxx
Comment Written 03-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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thanks for the great review I appreciate your thinking and agree with you
warm regards
geetbhim
Comment from Ashley Scott
I appreciate your AIDS prevention message, and yes, it is a sad affair to see the effects on our little ones.
The reason I could not rate this higher was that I thought your third line was lacking in strength and diminishes the effect of your poem.
The difficulty with minimalistic pieces such as this, is that you need to present the reader with, not only the obvious, but also try to choose words that will leave a deeper impression or something beyond or beneath the words. Choice of wordage is critical in such a small poem, that every word should count. Just for an example, you only have 15 syllables to use and you write "AIDS" twice, when the first sentence is adequate.
Also, using "condoms" won't say "bye" to AIDS and your second line makes that clear, a.k.a. sharing needles, blood...and this creates a contradiction within the poem.
I think with the right final line on this piece, it could be stellar, but as it is, I feel it needs some revision. But in the end, I am just one reader. Please use what helps and disregard the rest.
Should you choose to revise this, please let me know and I'll gladly give it another look.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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I appreciate your AIDS prevention message, and yes, it is a sad affair to see the effects on our little ones.
The reason I could not rate this higher was that I thought your third line was lacking in strength and diminishes the effect of your poem.
The difficulty with minimalistic pieces such as this, is that you need to present the reader with, not only the obvious, but also try to choose words that will leave a deeper impression or something beyond or beneath the words. Choice of wordage is critical in such a small poem, that every word should count. Just for an example, you only have 15 syllables to use and you write "AIDS" twice, when the first sentence is adequate.
Also, using "condoms" won't say "bye" to AIDS and your second line makes that clear, a.k.a. sharing needles, blood...and this creates a contradiction within the poem.
I think with the right final line on this piece, it could be stellar, but as it is, I feel it needs some revision. But in the end, I am just one reader. Please use what helps and disregard the rest.
Should you choose to revise this, please let me know and I'll gladly give it another look.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Thanks Ashley for a detail review,while writing I did not realize that i am using the word AIDS twice,thanks for pointing out that.
last line what i said is bye to AIDS,as we all know that most common cause is sex other like sharing needle and blood we can atleast be careful to streilize the instruments but having sex with infected partner can lead the diesease.
warm regards
geetbhim
Comment from Alexander E Poet
Very well done, short and very much enjoyed awesome closing. inspirational look at aids. great words. There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Very well done, short and very much enjoyed awesome closing. inspirational look at aids. great words. There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one
Comment Written 29-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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thanks a lot New York Poet
warm regards
geetbhim
Comment from rheabug
This is an interesting 5-7=5 poem about a timely subject. It gives a great message for the reader. Thank you for sharing, Linda
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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This is an interesting 5-7=5 poem about a timely subject. It gives a great message for the reader. Thank you for sharing, Linda
Comment Written 29-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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thanks a lot Linda for a great review
warm regards
geetbhim
