Experiences of Death
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Comment from Cheryl In Minnesota
What really comes through in this work is the honor you give your Grandmother and your appreciation of all the great things she accomplished while on Earth. There is a positive hopefulness in the afterlife. The reference of "another soul going to meet her king" is beautiful. The repetition of the word "death" in lines 8 and 9 is effective.
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What really comes through in this work is the honor you give your Grandmother and your appreciation of all the great things she accomplished while on Earth. There is a positive hopefulness in the afterlife. The reference of "another soul going to meet her king" is beautiful. The repetition of the word "death" in lines 8 and 9 is effective.
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Comment from Cheryl Daphine
This is a gorgeous tribute to your Grand mother. What better words and remembrance could be offered. For this reason her children shall rise up and call her blessed. Very well written.
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This is a gorgeous tribute to your Grand mother. What better words and remembrance could be offered. For this reason her children shall rise up and call her blessed. Very well written.
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Comment from butterfly31
This was beautifully written and especially moving since it was inspired by words from your grandmother's funeral. I love the use of repetition and the kind of "majestic" tone.I completely agree with the sentiments expressed.
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This was beautifully written and especially moving since it was inspired by words from your grandmother's funeral. I love the use of repetition and the kind of "majestic" tone.I completely agree with the sentiments expressed.
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Comment from poetstar
This is a loving, beautiful, spiritual, and uplifting poem. It is sad that she perished, but she will live on in
a better place. What a wonderful woman of Christ. What a wonderful Mother of Israel. Thanks for sharing this.
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This is a loving, beautiful, spiritual, and uplifting poem. It is sad that she perished, but she will live on in
a better place. What a wonderful woman of Christ. What a wonderful Mother of Israel. Thanks for sharing this.
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Comment from BigTomNY
Nicely done! (standing and clapping) You should do more more more! thank you for allowing me to read this!!!You are very good at your writing skill!! I have recently read some real garbage here but skip it instaed of trashing it I started feeling helpless and then your poem came up. thank you
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Nicely done! (standing and clapping) You should do more more more! thank you for allowing me to read this!!!You are very good at your writing skill!! I have recently read some real garbage here but skip it instaed of trashing it I started feeling helpless and then your poem came up. thank you
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Thank you Big T. There are some gems here dont worry.
Comment from jpafford
3rd line from the bottom..."...engraved on the Lords white stone..." should be Lord's - possessive
but the message is strong and your flow is getting so much better. Sorry, I'm such a stickler for grammar errrors.
good for you
joanne
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3rd line from the bottom..."...engraved on the Lords white stone..." should be Lord's - possessive
but the message is strong and your flow is getting so much better. Sorry, I'm such a stickler for grammar errrors.
good for you
joanne
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Thamks joanne...my apologies...Punctuation not one of my strong points.
