My Flip-flops
How I feel about my flip-flops3 total reviews
Comment from rumi <3
Your haiku is definitely very colorful, and I also think its cute.However it would have been much better if the last sentence rhymed with the first two as it would bring about a smoother flow to the poem.Otherwise its excellent.Well done!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2011
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Your haiku is definitely very colorful, and I also think its cute.However it would have been much better if the last sentence rhymed with the first two as it would bring about a smoother flow to the poem.Otherwise its excellent.Well done!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2011
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Thanks Rumi... but it's not a haiku :) It's a 5-7-5 and a response to a competition. But thanks for the rating!
Comment from Chris Tee
Absolutely funny and smartly sane.
The syllable count spot-on with three modifications,
The presentation is mediocre as you did not add a picture.
Nevertheless a excellent entry and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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Absolutely funny and smartly sane.
The syllable count spot-on with three modifications,
The presentation is mediocre as you did not add a picture.
Nevertheless a excellent entry and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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aaw! Thanks! I KNEW the picture thing was missing :( I had to enter on some ones else's pc... MORE TO COME :)
Comment from Justa Begina
Hiya, this is a very lighthearted piece, and fun to read. This is definitely one to read if you're an earthy person with a good sense of humour and of course, a dislike for heels. Hello, thats me! It has really cheered me up and the colour lime green is just perfect, it just screams soda pop and makes the flip flops sound yummy. Hope you know what i mean..Great stuff, good luck !X
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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Hiya, this is a very lighthearted piece, and fun to read. This is definitely one to read if you're an earthy person with a good sense of humour and of course, a dislike for heels. Hello, thats me! It has really cheered me up and the colour lime green is just perfect, it just screams soda pop and makes the flip flops sound yummy. Hope you know what i mean..Great stuff, good luck !X
Comment Written 16-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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Yes girl! I gotcha! Heels were worn for 13 years by these beach feet.. NO MORE! hehe! Thanks for liking ;) x
