Psalms for the Journey
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Eyes"Talking to God over life's journey
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Comment from Gert sherwood
Rdfrdmom2
I like the theme of your well expressed sad poem and great work with the excellent lay out of each of your stanzas.
Gert
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2011
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Rdfrdmom2
I like the theme of your well expressed sad poem and great work with the excellent lay out of each of your stanzas.
Gert
Comment Written 11-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2011
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thanks, Gert -- it kind of wrote itself -- love, jan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Grieving is a very personal thing. It is something we need to be very concience of. Sometimes we need to wait until they are ready for us to help, sometimes we need to be there to pick up the pieces.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2011
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Grieving is a very personal thing. It is something we need to be very concience of. Sometimes we need to wait until they are ready for us to help, sometimes we need to be there to pick up the pieces.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2011
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absolutely, barbara -- and we need to let them take the lead -- love, jan
Comment from peggles
I enjoyed reading your poem and I thought it was very cleverly written
You have presented this a very unique style
I like its set up
Your poem held a tender message
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2011
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I enjoyed reading your poem and I thought it was very cleverly written
You have presented this a very unique style
I like its set up
Your poem held a tender message
Comment Written 09-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2011
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thanks, peggles; the style kind of dictated itself. love, jan
Comment from Piggies Grandma
Grieving is different for everyone, you are right when you said it has a life of it's own. I enjoyed reading your poem and I thought it was very cleverly written.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2011
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Grieving is different for everyone, you are right when you said it has a life of it's own. I enjoyed reading your poem and I thought it was very cleverly written.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2011
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thanks, P.G. -- love, jan
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I've never really done great with anyone who just lost someone or is just having a bad day. I think it's a skill that you have to learn. I'm glad we have a friend like you
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2011
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I've never really done great with anyone who just lost someone or is just having a bad day. I think it's a skill that you have to learn. I'm glad we have a friend like you
Comment Written 08-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2011
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you are very kind -- love, jan
Comment from ceye
It is difficult to write about sadness. We feel it at all different levels and one description may not be understood by another.
I had trouble with the first two verses.(A verse starting at the left margin.)I could not understand the reference to 'the hope of New Years Eve and the grace of the Star of David'; and the reference to 'day 95'.
For me, this poem came alive; it sparkled in the next three verses. I felt the connection made, the grief shared at last-finally someone understands..., from dark, brightness...hope for the future.
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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2011
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It is difficult to write about sadness. We feel it at all different levels and one description may not be understood by another.
I had trouble with the first two verses.(A verse starting at the left margin.)I could not understand the reference to 'the hope of New Years Eve and the grace of the Star of David'; and the reference to 'day 95'.
For me, this poem came alive; it sparkled in the next three verses. I felt the connection made, the grief shared at last-finally someone understands..., from dark, brightness...hope for the future.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2011
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Sparklers in her eyes ( like New Year's Eve fireworks signifying hope for a new year and the great light emanating from the Star of David under which Christ was born--our grace); day 95 was just a question as to how many days does it take for our grief to be over and for us to act alive again -- I hope this helps; thanks for reading -- love, jan
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Thank you, I get it now. May I follow you? (I assume this means I am allowed to read more of your writing)Ceye
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yes, it means you may read as much of my writing as you can stand -- love, jan
Comment from JBCaine
Jan-
Very nice. Being no kind of poet other than a poor one, I will just say that the words here manage to pack a big punch.
So many beautifully stated sentiments there that even a dolt like me can get it. Really nice.
JBCaine
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2011
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Jan-
Very nice. Being no kind of poet other than a poor one, I will just say that the words here manage to pack a big punch.
So many beautifully stated sentiments there that even a dolt like me can get it. Really nice.
JBCaine
Comment Written 08-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2011
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you are far from being a dolt, my friend, JB. thanks for reading. love, jan
Comment from Jen Gentry
Jan
I know more about grief than I ever wanted to. This poem shows what a great friend you are to understand that grief just does not go away It is a journey that we all wald at our own pace, really great poem b a really great poet and friend
Blessings
Jenny
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2011
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Jan
I know more about grief than I ever wanted to. This poem shows what a great friend you are to understand that grief just does not go away It is a journey that we all wald at our own pace, really great poem b a really great poet and friend
Blessings
Jenny
Comment Written 08-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2011
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I must admit, I did not write it for the contest -- looked to see if there was a contest it fit after I wrote it -- yes, Jenny, I know a fair amount about grief, too. love, jan
Comment from c_lucas
Grieving can destroy the soul. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is excellent imagery.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2011
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Grieving can destroy the soul. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is excellent imagery.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2011
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yes, charlie, it can, and I am afraid for my friend -- love, jan
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You're welcome, Jan.
Comment from ulster3
Hello, jan.
You are absolutely right, and everyone grieves differently. The poem holds sadness, and the first stanza I found to be especially poignant. Love your choice of picture.
Warmly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2011
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Hello, jan.
You are absolutely right, and everyone grieves differently. The poem holds sadness, and the first stanza I found to be especially poignant. Love your choice of picture.
Warmly, Rebecca
Comment Written 08-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2011
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thanks, Rebecca -- I think the first stanza is kind of universal, don't you? love, jan
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I agree. hugs.
