Anger/hate
Senryu about feeling ; 5-7-529 total reviews
Comment from MarquisdeMars
I totally agree with your point, if I interpreted it correctly. Anger is OK but not hate. If you meant something else, that is the beauty of a haiku, everyone may see something different and that is a good thing. Yours did it nicely. Good poem.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2011
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I totally agree with your point, if I interpreted it correctly. Anger is OK but not hate. If you meant something else, that is the beauty of a haiku, everyone may see something different and that is a good thing. Yours did it nicely. Good poem.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Blessings and have a nice day. Ine
Comment from djsaxon
Beautful intent and adherence yo the form. I so cannot even approach haiku yet. Tried once, I think. Maybe one day.
Cheers - DJ
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Beautful intent and adherence yo the form. I so cannot even approach haiku yet. Tried once, I think. Maybe one day.
Cheers - DJ
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Have a lovely Sunday, Ine
You should try, is not that difficult I found.
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maybe - I normally just write silly, long winded stuff
Comment from waihekebach
This poem has a sound message, although there are situations where it is difficult, not to feel angry.
The syllable count is perfect.
There is an interesting little metaphor in this, which I just love.
Go well.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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This poem has a sound message, although there are situations where it is difficult, not to feel angry.
The syllable count is perfect.
There is an interesting little metaphor in this, which I just love.
Go well.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. Have a lovely Sunday, Ine
Comment from missy98writer
robina1978,
your are now waxing poetic upon the page for me. YOur 5-7-5 poem is cleverly written. You paint a picture of anger in the readers head with your words. The art work you used is perfect. I love your satori line or the last line in a 5-7-5, Haiku and Senryu style poetry: "Do not hate someone." I like your great metaphor: "might be fell." Your Senryu is in proper form and reflects an aspect of human nature in either a satirical or ironic fashion and you accomplished it with your poem. I wish you success in the 5-7-5 Poetry contest. I wish you good luck in the contest. Keep on writing creatively. Have a nice day.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2011
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robina1978,
your are now waxing poetic upon the page for me. YOur 5-7-5 poem is cleverly written. You paint a picture of anger in the readers head with your words. The art work you used is perfect. I love your satori line or the last line in a 5-7-5, Haiku and Senryu style poetry: "Do not hate someone." I like your great metaphor: "might be fell." Your Senryu is in proper form and reflects an aspect of human nature in either a satirical or ironic fashion and you accomplished it with your poem. I wish you success in the 5-7-5 Poetry contest. I wish you good luck in the contest. Keep on writing creatively. Have a nice day.
Melissa.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2011
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Thanks foryour review Melissa
Comment from donette1914
i thought this was well thought out, how you can have anger, but dont hate, it will eat at you the rest of your life. good strong photo very well done!!!
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2011
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i thought this was well thought out, how you can have anger, but dont hate, it will eat at you the rest of your life. good strong photo very well done!!!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2011
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Thanks for your kind review.
Comment from Doug LeCroy
Good advice. It sounds real easy until you try to actually do it. I think not hating someone who has wronged you is the most difficult thing achieve. Nevertheless, we should try to do so. A good poem.
doug
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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Good advice. It sounds real easy until you try to actually do it. I think not hating someone who has wronged you is the most difficult thing achieve. Nevertheless, we should try to do so. A good poem.
doug
Comment Written 09-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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Thanks for your kind review.
Comment from Ekim777
Hate, anger, jealousy and the rest are all related. Take your pick. You prefer anger, I prefer hate though it is something foreign to me. I balk at jealousy because maybe I have a jealous nature. Someone once asked Tennessee Willliams why he was so full of jealousy and hate and he said, "not hate; definitely not hate." The point is negative emotions probably rule all our relationships except in those rare moments of love and this you do not say in your poem. Therefore, I reckon it is an incomplete poem. What about love? - Ekim
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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Hate, anger, jealousy and the rest are all related. Take your pick. You prefer anger, I prefer hate though it is something foreign to me. I balk at jealousy because maybe I have a jealous nature. Someone once asked Tennessee Willliams why he was so full of jealousy and hate and he said, "not hate; definitely not hate." The point is negative emotions probably rule all our relationships except in those rare moments of love and this you do not say in your poem. Therefore, I reckon it is an incomplete poem. What about love? - Ekim
Comment Written 09-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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Thanks for your kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello robina,
I like the message in your 5-7-5 poem--
Do not hate someone
and I say don't ever hate yourself
Best to you in this contest.
Gert
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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Hello robina,
I like the message in your 5-7-5 poem--
Do not hate someone
and I say don't ever hate yourself
Best to you in this contest.
Gert
Comment Written 09-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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Thanks for your kind review.
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You are welcome
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smiles
Gert
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Thanks,smiles back
Comment from TammyGail
Well said ...... you said so much with
Few words.... This kind of poem is needed
From time to time on this site and in life....
Beautiful artwork as well....
Thanks for sharing ......
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2011
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Well said ...... you said so much with
Few words.... This kind of poem is needed
From time to time on this site and in life....
Beautiful artwork as well....
Thanks for sharing ......
Comment Written 08-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2011
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Thanks for your review
Comment from Cassie Needham
Like its simplicity and realism. Such a good message. Smart not to use punctuation, the sentence structure is good enough. Flows, isn't choppy. Great picture.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2011
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Like its simplicity and realism. Such a good message. Smart not to use punctuation, the sentence structure is good enough. Flows, isn't choppy. Great picture.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2011
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thanks for your review.
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Your welcome!
