Gypsy Woman
Sometimes we must wait ...26 total reviews
Comment from Dave M
Susan,
This is an excellent story about a woman, living alone, who became old. At the end of the story, I get the feeling that she dies. I enjoyed this read and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2011
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Susan,
This is an excellent story about a woman, living alone, who became old. At the end of the story, I get the feeling that she dies. I enjoyed this read and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 29-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2011
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Hi Dave!How are you?? I finally got moved. It took forever to find a place to keep horses. And my little dog is gone. NO fun. But it's nice to hear from you and be here again. Thank you!! ") Susan
Comment from missy98writer
Gypsy Woman by realist101
Susan,
Your story is beautifully written. Your descriptive writing is excellent and your well crafted vocabulary words paints a vivid mental picture in the readers head. Your narrative is great in your story. Missy. In a minimum of words for the greatest effect you've successfully created a setting, conflict, and a resolve to your story. I enjoyed this descriptive you had written: "Wavering shadows seemed to move as a familiar shape formed behind Gypsy. Broad shoulders leaned toward her, the tall man's familiar hands caressed her weary shoulders gently, and she closed her eyes in ecstasy as her lover began to fade into the recesses of her mind. Beautiful once more, Gypsy Woman reached out her quivering hands as she followed him through space and time, leaving the swamp and it's utter loneliness, to speak of things unknown." I immensely enjoyed this terrific flash fiction story, my friend. I'd defiantly recommend your story titled Gypsy Woman as a 'must ' read. Keep on writing fabulously, my friend. Long time no read. I've missed your short stories and your reviews. I hope you're back. Have a marvelous weekend. Love ya...Melissa.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2011
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Gypsy Woman by realist101
Susan,
Your story is beautifully written. Your descriptive writing is excellent and your well crafted vocabulary words paints a vivid mental picture in the readers head. Your narrative is great in your story. Missy. In a minimum of words for the greatest effect you've successfully created a setting, conflict, and a resolve to your story. I enjoyed this descriptive you had written: "Wavering shadows seemed to move as a familiar shape formed behind Gypsy. Broad shoulders leaned toward her, the tall man's familiar hands caressed her weary shoulders gently, and she closed her eyes in ecstasy as her lover began to fade into the recesses of her mind. Beautiful once more, Gypsy Woman reached out her quivering hands as she followed him through space and time, leaving the swamp and it's utter loneliness, to speak of things unknown." I immensely enjoyed this terrific flash fiction story, my friend. I'd defiantly recommend your story titled Gypsy Woman as a 'must ' read. Keep on writing fabulously, my friend. Long time no read. I've missed your short stories and your reviews. I hope you're back. Have a marvelous weekend. Love ya...Melissa.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2011
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Hi again Melissa! Thank you very much! I always appreciate your detailed reviews. What a real pleasure to see you enjoy my efforts. Thank you again Miss M. SO nice to hear from you! xoxo, susan
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Haven't seen you post for quite a while, or perhaps I just missed it.
This is a very sesuous post with layers of detail artfully adding to the melancholy dance.
Beautifully written.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2011
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Haven't seen you post for quite a while, or perhaps I just missed it.
This is a very sesuous post with layers of detail artfully adding to the melancholy dance.
Beautifully written.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2011
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HI Ingrid! HOW are YOU?? I finally got moved and am sort of situated. VERY tiring. I splurged and have a new pc. Learning to use it and trying to catch up with everyone. I will get your stories read asap. SO sorry to be behind. I hope you are happy and well!! xoxo, susan
Comment from Larrypic11
This is a beautiful story. I have strong past life memories as well. In fact I co-authored "The Gypsy Girl" with N.K. Wagner and we posted it several weeks ago. It is in 2 parts. The part about Pere Robert and Mala is a past life recollection of sorts. You might enjoy the read. In any case, you did a great job of setting the mood of this powerful piece. Be well. Larry
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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This is a beautiful story. I have strong past life memories as well. In fact I co-authored "The Gypsy Girl" with N.K. Wagner and we posted it several weeks ago. It is in 2 parts. The part about Pere Robert and Mala is a past life recollection of sorts. You might enjoy the read. In any case, you did a great job of setting the mood of this powerful piece. Be well. Larry
Comment Written 29-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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Hi Larry! I could not find part one of your story? I will read it tho asap...as well as part two. I thank you so much for this wonderful review...I appreciate it and will do my best to read as much of your work as I can as well!! Happy Friday! Susan
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I only suggested that because of the Gypsy connected. At your leisure, when and if... Larry
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Hi again Larry! I just want to read the first part first?? Let me know how to find it for sure. I am very tired tonight, and will keep trying tho. ") Susan
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Go to N.K Wagner's profile. In the bottom left you will see a list of her work. You can click on Part I there. Part II is under my profile. We collaborated on the work. Let me know if you still can;t find. Larry
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OH! I didn't realize it was with her! SO sorry. Will do Larry!")) Susan
Comment from Gideon Roth
Hi Susan, It is great to see a story posted by you. And, a great one at that. It was well done in every way. I have returned after a long absence myself and it is so good to see many of my favorites still turning out great stuff. Hope your doing well and looking forward to your next post soon...Tim
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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Hi Susan, It is great to see a story posted by you. And, a great one at that. It was well done in every way. I have returned after a long absence myself and it is so good to see many of my favorites still turning out great stuff. Hope your doing well and looking forward to your next post soon...Tim
Comment Written 29-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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Hi Tim! Thank you so much!! I am so far behind it's not funny. But will do my best to get back to work! I promise to read as much of your work as I can!! Smiles and best!! Susan
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
That's made my day, seeing you
back on site... I've been wondering
how things are with you and hoped
you'd soon be back, my friend.
toward her[,](;) the tall
and it's utter - its
Great to see you writing.
Margaret
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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That's made my day, seeing you
back on site... I've been wondering
how things are with you and hoped
you'd soon be back, my friend.
toward her[,](;) the tall
and it's utter - its
Great to see you writing.
Margaret
Comment Written 29-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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Oh thank you Miss Margaret! SO good to see your name here. My battle continues, legal matters take forever but am settling into a house and hoping no one begins to harass our horses here. At first, the 'elements' of disgust had to let us know that they know where we are, so, I will continue to stand up against it. SOOOOoo wrong. BUT, I am happier closer to my brother and all...I saw a movie set in England...and sat there wishing I lived there. Oh well!! You enjoy it for me and keep me posted as to how you are!~! LOVE! Susan
Comment from adewpearl
Susan, it is great to read a new piece by you :-)
Long, silky hair, swung - drop the second comma
the swamp and it's utter loneliness - drop the apostrophe
This is beautifully evocative, Susan.
You get inside this aged gypsy woman's thoughts so well as she remembers her youthful beauty and confronts the reality of her deterioration with age.
And that final paragraph with the appearance of her lover in the mirror as he leads her into the afterlife and a restoration of beauty, that is just wonderfully moving :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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Susan, it is great to read a new piece by you :-)
Long, silky hair, swung - drop the second comma
the swamp and it's utter loneliness - drop the apostrophe
This is beautifully evocative, Susan.
You get inside this aged gypsy woman's thoughts so well as she remembers her youthful beauty and confronts the reality of her deterioration with age.
And that final paragraph with the appearance of her lover in the mirror as he leads her into the afterlife and a restoration of beauty, that is just wonderfully moving :-) Brooke
Comment Written 29-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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Hi Brooke! Thank you so very much! I will revise this too, and am always so thrilled when you really enjoy my efforts. What a compliment it is. SOoo good to see you here again Brooke!! I will read as much of your work as I can too!! HUG! Susan
Comment from BethShelby
Wow! It is good to know you're still around. I haven't read anything from you in a long time. Actually I haven't written anything in a long time myself. I've been distracted by other things. This is beautiful. You are a good writer. Did you find a place to move to?
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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Wow! It is good to know you're still around. I haven't read anything from you in a long time. Actually I haven't written anything in a long time myself. I've been distracted by other things. This is beautiful. You are a good writer. Did you find a place to move to?
Comment Written 29-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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HI Beth!! I almost came to your state...but could not be so far from my brother...so, I will try to be content here at least for now. SOoo good to be back and see your name here! Thank you again Beth. Keep cool and I will try my best to read your work and get caught up!! HUGS! Susan
Comment from Narvik
Susan! You've certainly picked up where you left off. This was stellar. It looked like a poem and a story at the same time, which is very hard to do.
From your tough life, I see a lot of you in these characters you write about. I still remember about the pioneer woman and her baby. This poem seems like the opposite of that one. It ends in hope rather than dispair, and I hope that's how things are going for you. Thanks for writing your stories. They are special.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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Susan! You've certainly picked up where you left off. This was stellar. It looked like a poem and a story at the same time, which is very hard to do.
From your tough life, I see a lot of you in these characters you write about. I still remember about the pioneer woman and her baby. This poem seems like the opposite of that one. It ends in hope rather than dispair, and I hope that's how things are going for you. Thanks for writing your stories. They are special.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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HI Jack!! Thank you so much, what a thrill to see a little gold plus. I had almost forgotten how nice it is to be here. To have you remember a past story too is a real honor. I still absolutely love your story of the Amish in the courtroom...that is just the best. I need to read it again too. HA! ")) Wow. Hugs for being here for me my friend...Susan
Comment from stanishmichelle
This story is well written and most enjoyable. There is an air of sadness about it as Gypsy Woman dances,remembering her youth and happier times. The scene where she looks into the mirror and chants is touching, wanting the woman staring back to be young. I loved the ending and found the story interesting. Michelle
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2011
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This story is well written and most enjoyable. There is an air of sadness about it as Gypsy Woman dances,remembering her youth and happier times. The scene where she looks into the mirror and chants is touching, wanting the woman staring back to be young. I loved the ending and found the story interesting. Michelle
Comment Written 29-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2011
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Hi Michelle! Thank you so much. I'm very pleased you enjoyed this...and greatly appreciate your time to review it too! HUG! Susan
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It was a pleasure reading this, and felt sorry for Gypsy Woman. Hugs, Michelle
