Tired
Lost Relationship3 total reviews
Comment from nora arjuna
Hi Jane, got your message and thought I'd check on you. The poem by itself is fine. I felt the emotion in the simple lines. But if you meant it for the 5-7-5 contest, it's totally out. Do check the contest rules again. It should be only three lines of 5-7-5 syllable counts.
Also spotted these nits:
I[']m stuck in the ground
I[']m tired of you trying
You['re] still lying.
Keep writing. :)
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Hi Jane, got your message and thought I'd check on you. The poem by itself is fine. I felt the emotion in the simple lines. But if you meant it for the 5-7-5 contest, it's totally out. Do check the contest rules again. It should be only three lines of 5-7-5 syllable counts.
Also spotted these nits:
I[']m stuck in the ground
I[']m tired of you trying
You['re] still lying.
Keep writing. :)
Comment Written 15-Sep-2011
Comment from MizKat
Jane3 - I believe everyone has experience a lost relationship. Your poem about it is nice, even though it's also sad. Great work!! Kat
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2011
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Jane3 - I believe everyone has experience a lost relationship. Your poem about it is nice, even though it's also sad. Great work!! Kat
Comment Written 22-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2011
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Thanks I really apreciate that
Comment from rudion
Oh boy - this poem is about a million different guys and how they have mis-treated a million different girls - right? You said everything so well. Very right on with the feelings - great job!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2011
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Oh boy - this poem is about a million different guys and how they have mis-treated a million different girls - right? You said everything so well. Very right on with the feelings - great job!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2011
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Absolutely, glad you enjoyed it and hope you will have time to read others to thanks
