Never Give Up!
A 5-7-5 poetry!3 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
don't/give/up/dreams - I only count 4 syllables in your first line - this could be easily fixed by saying - Don't give up your dreams
The syllable count in your other lines is good
I like the upbeat and inspirational message you deliver :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2011
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don't/give/up/dreams - I only count 4 syllables in your first line - this could be easily fixed by saying - Don't give up your dreams
The syllable count in your other lines is good
I like the upbeat and inspirational message you deliver :-) Brooke
Comment Written 22-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2011
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Thankyou so much for the praise and sorry for the mistake!I have edited it now...and will try best for a very improved entry next time:)
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Well I can technical tell, as I have never wrote one.
But I liked reading this one and your chosen artwork was also great.
For me this is 5 stars, your first and big challenge....and you met it with courage of writing your first 5-7-5
Congrats to you for your effort.
Maureen
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2011
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Well I can technical tell, as I have never wrote one.
But I liked reading this one and your chosen artwork was also great.
For me this is 5 stars, your first and big challenge....and you met it with courage of writing your first 5-7-5
Congrats to you for your effort.
Maureen
Comment Written 19-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2011
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Thankyou so much for the very appreciating and supporting comment!!!Thankyou for the 5 stars!
Comment from ripcobain
An important message, but I feel like it could be on one of those motivational posters with words like "DARE" written along the bottom and like a photo of a guy climbing a mountain. I wonder if there is a way to make this more genuine even within the confines of the form.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2011
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An important message, but I feel like it could be on one of those motivational posters with words like "DARE" written along the bottom and like a photo of a guy climbing a mountain. I wonder if there is a way to make this more genuine even within the confines of the form.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2011
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The theme you explained is pretty good, but as I am new in here, I didn't exactly know how and what to do for the picture, so I chose a random one!I will try my best to improve my work for the next time.What do you think could make it more genuine?Thankyou anyways for the suggestions and the 4 stars!
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I am new too! And I was not speaking about the picture, but the poem itself. I was saying that it could be on a motivational poster like that. You just need to make this your own, add something genuine from your personal experience, or something of that nature.
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Ohkay!:)
