Comment from York Lumsey

Excellent

Nice. Good use of primal contexts in such a short format.
Perhaps an additional preposition in there somewhere would have helped, but it's an open topic.
Nice topic, too. Evokes memories and lost emotions.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2011

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011

Thanks for rating lumsey,I like your comment, have a very nice day :)

Comment from georgetitus

Excellent

just to provide a rating have to sign up this is ridiculous for future should be facilitated no need to sign up for give rating only for efficiency of time

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2011

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011

Thanks Georgetitus for rating my 5-7-5 poem :) cheers...

Comment from Chris Tee

Excellent

The syllable count is spot on here old sport
A vaccinating little 5-7-5 here may I say.
This work could be enhanced by an added picture to it my dear fellow poet

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2011

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011

Thank you Chris, yes I just added a picture to it. Greeting from Indonesia.

reply by Chris Tee on 27-Jun-2011

Now that is smart and gives you a great chance!

reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011

Yeah... I hope so, thank you so much, cheers Chris

Comment from Espresso momma

Excellent

This is a sad 5-7-5. Hopefull it don't last long. But love tends to make us feel this way at times, So thank you for the reading.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2011

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011

Hello Espresso, thanks for reading my poem, and I like your comment, thank you so much :)