Walk In The Dark Forest
Ivan sneaks off the school bus55 total reviews
Comment from misscookie
This is a very nice story
It had my attention from the first line to the last.I had to smile thinking just like the child in the story how could my mother know everything. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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This is a very nice story
It had my attention from the first line to the last.I had to smile thinking just like the child in the story how could my mother know everything. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Your review is delightful. You have a clear understanding of a little child's story. Thanks!
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Your very welcome.
Comment from Janie King
I wouldn't think one would want ot wander off in the deep woods in Alaska but then I've never been there, just more wildlife than I'm used to for my comfort. This is very nicely written and I was real relied when it was momma in her yellow juacket. God bless.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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I wouldn't think one would want ot wander off in the deep woods in Alaska but then I've never been there, just more wildlife than I'm used to for my comfort. This is very nicely written and I was real relied when it was momma in her yellow juacket. God bless.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thank you, Jane, for giving time to this little story. I appreciate your review.
Comment from mumsyone
Your story is okay but, in my opinion, the ending fizzles a little. In fact, the very last line really takes away from the story. Ending with the mother's call would give it a lot more impact.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Your story is okay but, in my opinion, the ending fizzles a little. In fact, the very last line really takes away from the story. Ending with the mother's call would give it a lot more impact.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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I'll consider your suggestion. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Gideon Roth
Hi there. This is not a genre that I would normally read but I happened upon it and I enjoyed it. You should do well with this...Gideon
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Hi there. This is not a genre that I would normally read but I happened upon it and I enjoyed it. You should do well with this...Gideon
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thanks for the review, Gideon. I appreciate the time you gave to the little story. Marie
Comment from PrincessinPurple
Okay, not exactly getting this story. It's too short. There is a lot of question I have?
1) Who is Ivan?
2)who is Annie?
3) Why did Ivan sneak off the school bus?
4) How could the drive not seen Mac get off the school bus:?
5) Do they live in a City or in the wild?
6) What is making this a story there is no beginning or end to the story?
7) Why is Ivan mom looking for him?
8) Is it afternoon of night?
9) Why is it called walking in the forest?
10) Are you going to write more to this story or is a stand alone?
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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Okay, not exactly getting this story. It's too short. There is a lot of question I have?
1) Who is Ivan?
2)who is Annie?
3) Why did Ivan sneak off the school bus?
4) How could the drive not seen Mac get off the school bus:?
5) Do they live in a City or in the wild?
6) What is making this a story there is no beginning or end to the story?
7) Why is Ivan mom looking for him?
8) Is it afternoon of night?
9) Why is it called walking in the forest?
10) Are you going to write more to this story or is a stand alone?
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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The idea is for a picture book that holds a lot of illustrations. All the pictures become a big part of the story and would answer most of your questions. Thanks for the review.
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You should mention that in the author note. so that way people know.
