I Remember When It Used To Rain
An old man shares his final story.3 total reviews
Comment from brown.amy97
I love how you used words to explain how the rocking chair sound. I also like the ryhme scheme. Everything flowed very well and it was very interesting! Good Job!!!
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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I love how you used words to explain how the rocking chair sound. I also like the ryhme scheme. Everything flowed very well and it was very interesting! Good Job!!!
Comment Written 16-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Thank you for reading my poem. I am happy you enjoyed it.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
An amazing piece of work here. So poetic yet hauntingly sad...a life born, lived, loved, and died ....This story poem brought forth such powerful emotion I felt as if I was about to cry as the cane fell to the ground.
Very powerful piece that feeds the soul, awakens the heart to all that is happening around us.
I loved this so very much, thank you for sharing it.
Hugs
Maureen
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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An amazing piece of work here. So poetic yet hauntingly sad...a life born, lived, loved, and died ....This story poem brought forth such powerful emotion I felt as if I was about to cry as the cane fell to the ground.
Very powerful piece that feeds the soul, awakens the heart to all that is happening around us.
I loved this so very much, thank you for sharing it.
Hugs
Maureen
Comment Written 16-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Thank you so much for your kind comments. I am very glad you enjoyed the poem/story.
Comment from jmeredith
I liked your poem, it was very moving. My only criticism would be that your adherence to the end-rhyme was at times a little forced. ie. sometimes rhymed for convenience. Either way I really liked it!
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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I liked your poem, it was very moving. My only criticism would be that your adherence to the end-rhyme was at times a little forced. ie. sometimes rhymed for convenience. Either way I really liked it!
Comment Written 16-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Thank you reading my poem and for your comments. I regret it was flawed in your eyes. I strive for perfection, but it is something that always eludes me. I will try to do better next time.
