heart,the path..life
struggling with life2 total reviews
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Wonderfully descriptive, emotions run free requesting and sometimes demanding peace/silence
There are a quite a few places where "i" needs to be capitalized in this work...go through on spell check, it should catch them for you.
I found this to be very hard on my eyes...the colouring on the page and the colour of the font while looks good was hard to read....that may affect some reviews....
Otherwise a great imaginative piece, thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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Wonderfully descriptive, emotions run free requesting and sometimes demanding peace/silence
There are a quite a few places where "i" needs to be capitalized in this work...go through on spell check, it should catch them for you.
I found this to be very hard on my eyes...the colouring on the page and the colour of the font while looks good was hard to read....that may affect some reviews....
Otherwise a great imaginative piece, thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 09-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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thank you for the feedback Maureen its much appreciated,being new to fan story i am grateful for anyone who is willing to point out the mistakes i make it will simply make me better at writing so i will work on these points looking forward to future communication
Comment from nanna
I like what you have to say but you claim that it is a 5 7 5
poetry entrant. I cannot see that you followed that formula.
I found the back ground color hard to read, but my eyes are old. I like the thoughts behind your poem, what you have to say, but cannot align it with 5 7 5 formula. Hope I have not said the wrong thing. I think it would have done better in open verse because you are giving a message which is good. Nanna
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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I like what you have to say but you claim that it is a 5 7 5
poetry entrant. I cannot see that you followed that formula.
I found the back ground color hard to read, but my eyes are old. I like the thoughts behind your poem, what you have to say, but cannot align it with 5 7 5 formula. Hope I have not said the wrong thing. I think it would have done better in open verse because you are giving a message which is good. Nanna
Comment Written 09-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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thank you for taking time out to read my piece your comments are well appreciated looking forward to future communication
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How generous of you, I do wish you well Nanna
