Adrift
a contest entry about loneliness122 total reviews
Comment from KiaraLG
First off, thank you for the author notes, made me feel better after thinking your marriage was in trouble. LOL.
Easy read with the emotion coming across strong! I loved your final line with it's internal rhyme. Perfect ending.
Kiara :)
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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First off, thank you for the author notes, made me feel better after thinking your marriage was in trouble. LOL.
Easy read with the emotion coming across strong! I loved your final line with it's internal rhyme. Perfect ending.
Kiara :)
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Evening, Kiara - Thanks for taking the time to read & review my poem, Adrift.
Have a great week - sherry
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You're welcome Sherry.
Blessings. :)
Comment from MrBoTie
Heartfelt poem, I could feel the heaviness of your loneliness. Excellent imagery. The poem flowed well. Glad things are well again. Great job.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Heartfelt poem, I could feel the heaviness of your loneliness. Excellent imagery. The poem flowed well. Glad things are well again. Great job.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Thanks for taking the time to read & critique my poem, Adrift.
Have a great week - sherry
Comment from Idamarty
I thought your poem was so heartfelt about how even though you share a life and a bed with someone you can feel so alone at times. When you truly love someone you are so connected to their feelings and when they don`t share you become disconnected. I am married and can relate to your feelings of loneliness when there is something going on with your partner and they become parted from you. It is always great to come back together though and I`m glad you both did. Thanks for sharing and great job.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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I thought your poem was so heartfelt about how even though you share a life and a bed with someone you can feel so alone at times. When you truly love someone you are so connected to their feelings and when they don`t share you become disconnected. I am married and can relate to your feelings of loneliness when there is something going on with your partner and they become parted from you. It is always great to come back together though and I`m glad you both did. Thanks for sharing and great job.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Thanks for taking the time to read & comment on my poem, Adrift.
Have a great week - sherry
Comment from Angel Debbie
I know this feeling very well. My husband deals with stress like this too. Very nice write, no need to be hostile in the author notes though. Take care and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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I know this feeling very well. My husband deals with stress like this too. Very nice write, no need to be hostile in the author notes though. Take care and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Hi Debbie - Didn't intend for the author's notes to come across as 'hostile' and am not sure why you thought they did, but I'm sorry ... Anyway, thank you for taking the time to read & comment on my poem, Adrift.
Have a great week - sherry
Comment from Chrisfiore
Hello sherrygreywolf, Thanks for clarifying this in your authors notes, I was beginning to feel a lump in my throat. Men are funny that way, I should know... I do the same thing as your husband from time to time. Why we do it is one of the great wonders of the universe. Coming back to life is the best and brightest way to feel. Chrisfiore
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Hello sherrygreywolf, Thanks for clarifying this in your authors notes, I was beginning to feel a lump in my throat. Men are funny that way, I should know... I do the same thing as your husband from time to time. Why we do it is one of the great wonders of the universe. Coming back to life is the best and brightest way to feel. Chrisfiore
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Thanks for taking the time to read & comment on my poem, Adrift.
Have a great week - sherry
Comment from ldykaty
The 5 line you have written are how so many feel. They show sadness, hope and longing. The unknown of why thnigs are as they are. Very good work. It hits home...
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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The 5 line you have written are how so many feel. They show sadness, hope and longing. The unknown of why thnigs are as they are. Very good work. It hits home...
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Thanks for taking the time to read & comment on my poem, Adrift.
Have a great week - sherry
Comment from zoocq
Well said and how many of us have shared those same feelings...especially of doubt when things seedm a little cool. Thank you,
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Well said and how many of us have shared those same feelings...especially of doubt when things seedm a little cool. Thank you,
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Thanks for taking the time to read & comment on my poem, Adrift.
Have a great week - sherry
Comment from glpar
This poem certainly catches the feelings of loneliness and longing of something missing at the time it was written. I have a bit of a problem reading the red on black but the poem is very well done.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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This poem certainly catches the feelings of loneliness and longing of something missing at the time it was written. I have a bit of a problem reading the red on black but the poem is very well done.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Thanks for taking the time to read & comment on my poem, Adrift. I'm sorry the color combination caused you problems - I have combinations that don't work with my eyes either (just not this particular one).
Have a great week - sherry
Comment from Judith Ann
This poem is a great example of expressing feelings. Thanks for the author's notes too and I am glad your marriage is fine. That is important. Good luck in the contest, this is a winner in my book. -Judy
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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This poem is a great example of expressing feelings. Thanks for the author's notes too and I am glad your marriage is fine. That is important. Good luck in the contest, this is a winner in my book. -Judy
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Evening Judy - Thanks for taking the time to read & comment on my poem, Adrift. Glad you liked it!
Have a great week - sherry
Comment from jmort
This was an excellent poem. Tattered like storm-shattered sails is an image
I can visualize, and I liked the inner rhyme The feeling of being shut out and
ignored, surely comes across. I think we all go through this at one time or
another. You painted a good picture.
jmort
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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This was an excellent poem. Tattered like storm-shattered sails is an image
I can visualize, and I liked the inner rhyme The feeling of being shut out and
ignored, surely comes across. I think we all go through this at one time or
another. You painted a good picture.
jmort
Comment Written 08-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Thanks for taking the time to read & critique my poem, Adrift. The last line is one of my favorites, too. I am glad you liked the poem enough to award it one of those rare sixes!
Have a great week - sherry
