Paranormal Adventures
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Guardians Gather"Case Studies of Hauntings
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Comment from Piggies Grandma
This is getting very interesting. I enjoyed reading this chapter and I am looking forward to reading the next one. It is well thought out and very well written.
reply by the author on 26-May-2011
This is getting very interesting. I enjoyed reading this chapter and I am looking forward to reading the next one. It is well thought out and very well written.
Comment Written 25-May-2011
reply by the author on 26-May-2011
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Hi, Piggies Grandma. Thanks for the words of support and for taking time to read my chapter. I really appreciate your feedback and interest. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Bellringer
Bev, another well written chapter. The first part of your chapter provides an eerie scene showing the infamous Charles Bellingham hiding in fear--wonder what could scare him so. The details of the hotel were exceptional and you managed to maintain the tension of the story. Carrot cake pancakes with cream cheese frosting! Oh my. Delicious writing, my friend. Blessings, Hector
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
Bev, another well written chapter. The first part of your chapter provides an eerie scene showing the infamous Charles Bellingham hiding in fear--wonder what could scare him so. The details of the hotel were exceptional and you managed to maintain the tension of the story. Carrot cake pancakes with cream cheese frosting! Oh my. Delicious writing, my friend. Blessings, Hector
Comment Written 25-May-2011
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
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Hi, Hector. Thank you for taking on my fifth chaper! I really so appreciate your support and generosity. Glad you liked the descriptions. I have the heart of an interior decorator - so I guess that came through LOL. Warmest regards, Bev
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A pleasure to read, Bev. Blessings, Hector
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent dialogue - you show Mia's state of exhaustion and unrest well.
Your depiction of what went on back in 1918 is most dramatic - what a horrific scene you create through your vivid detail. Brooke
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
Excellent dialogue - you show Mia's state of exhaustion and unrest well.
Your depiction of what went on back in 1918 is most dramatic - what a horrific scene you create through your vivid detail. Brooke
Comment Written 25-May-2011
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
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Hi, Brooke. Thanks so much for stopping by. I had to show off my new-found knowledge of action verbs in the first half of the story! LOL Really appreciate your support and generous review. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from misscookie
Thank you very much for the large print in the story. It truly helps me to read it. And I'm sure other reader with sailing eyesight will feel the same way. I enjoyed reading this chapter and found it very interesting. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
Thank you very much for the large print in the story. It truly helps me to read it. And I'm sure other reader with sailing eyesight will feel the same way. I enjoyed reading this chapter and found it very interesting. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-May-2011
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
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You are most welcome, misscookie. I really appreciate your warm and generous review, lovely lady. Blessings, Bev
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have a blessed day.
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Bev
I don't know if it was intended - but the text for your story has an extremely large font size. Author's notes are the usual standard size,
This chapter got off to a tremendous start - the melting door handle was a delicious touch. The second haunting was more tame, but intriguing.
You're going from strength to strength with this.
Ron xox
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
Hi Bev
I don't know if it was intended - but the text for your story has an extremely large font size. Author's notes are the usual standard size,
This chapter got off to a tremendous start - the melting door handle was a delicious touch. The second haunting was more tame, but intriguing.
You're going from strength to strength with this.
Ron xox
Comment Written 25-May-2011
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
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Hi, Ron. I'm chuckling to myself because I just got a big thank-you from a reviewer who thanked me for the larger font size! I've had at least two people in the past suggest that it helps and an equal number don't like it. But, your point is well taken and I know your intention is to help the piece get a better viewing. Thanks, my friend. I appreciate your support and praise for the piece. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from bhogg
A really fun read here. I particularly enjoyed the descriptors of the two rooms. Ended with a bit of tension, so I guess we will all have to stay tuned. Regards, Bill
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
A really fun read here. I particularly enjoyed the descriptors of the two rooms. Ended with a bit of tension, so I guess we will all have to stay tuned. Regards, Bill
Comment Written 25-May-2011
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
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Glad you liked it and had some fun, Bill. I appreciate your generous review and interest very much. Thanks for stopping by!Warm regards, Bev
Comment from quashdog
Good chpter, moves the story right along. I liked the dialogue at the end between the two spirits, it draws the battle lines for the skirmish that is still up ahead with the evil ghost.
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
Good chpter, moves the story right along. I liked the dialogue at the end between the two spirits, it draws the battle lines for the skirmish that is still up ahead with the evil ghost.
Comment Written 25-May-2011
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
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Hi, quashdog. I really appreciate your wonderful review. Thanks so much for stopping by! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from The Stranger
this is an exceppebt story, the presentation is of a very high standard, I enjoyed being able to review work of such a high standard
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
this is an exceppebt story, the presentation is of a very high standard, I enjoyed being able to review work of such a high standard
Comment Written 25-May-2011
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
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Hi, TS. I am so honored by your wonderful review. Your generous insights are most appreciated, as is your support! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Cletus Hardiman
You keep them coming and I'll keep reading......LOL This is a nice write...... Thanks for sharing! Cletus Hardiman Clete
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reply by the author on 25-May-2011
You keep them coming and I'll keep reading......LOL This is a nice write...... Thanks for sharing! Cletus Hardiman Clete
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Comment Written 25-May-2011
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
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Hi, Clete. Thanks for the vote of support. And I really appreciate you reading! Warm regards, Bev
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You are welcome for the review! Clete
Comment from Pen&Ink
Good Morning, Bev. This is a very well-written chapter which needs only slight tweaking. You allow conversation to carry much of the plot. Your use of detail in the descriptions is excellent. Here are my suggestions for your consideration.
After introductions were completed,
No need for "were completed".
At the disgusted look on Emma's face, Mia began to laugh and soon had her friend joining in with her.
Rearranged:
Mia began to laugh (at the disgusted look on Emma's face, and soon had her friend joining in.")
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Good job on this chapter.
Ray
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reply by the author on 25-May-2011
Good Morning, Bev. This is a very well-written chapter which needs only slight tweaking. You allow conversation to carry much of the plot. Your use of detail in the descriptions is excellent. Here are my suggestions for your consideration.
After introductions were completed,
No need for "were completed".
At the disgusted look on Emma's face, Mia began to laugh and soon had her friend joining in with her.
Rearranged:
Mia began to laugh (at the disgusted look on Emma's face, and soon had her friend joining in.")
pivotted
(pivoted)
Good job on this chapter.
Ray
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Comment Written 25-May-2011
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
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Hi, Ray. Thanks much for the helpful suggestion, which I think are very good. I appreciate you taking time to read the chapter with an eye for details and improvement. I also am grateful for your interest and generous review. Warm regards, Bev