Broken Motherhood
The poem puts word on philoprogenitiveness3 total reviews
Comment from glpar
Oh, my God, so simply written and a story told. I wish I could leave it at that but for some reason fanstory calls for more words to have it show up. Good job. Sad story
reply by the author on 24-May-2011
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Oh, my God, so simply written and a story told. I wish I could leave it at that but for some reason fanstory calls for more words to have it show up. Good job. Sad story
Comment Written 24-May-2011
reply by the author on 24-May-2011
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Thank a lot, glpar. I'm glad you like it. Did you say Fanstory calls for more words, could you expatiate a little, please?
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when I try to post short comments it sends me back to make them longer. It's not in your writing but when I'm trying to make my comments short. I think it's funny when it takes more words then needed to make a comment. So I was just rambling to make sure it would post that time. LOL
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LOl, I get you now. Well, it's enough that you liked the poem or whatever you're writing or reviewing, but if they need you to be wordy in order to be worthy, then just do what ELMORE LEONARD calls "hooptedoodling".
Comment from gazzagodbod
wow so much power in so few words visions of pain and a grieving mum the picture complimenting the piece perfectly
thank you so much for sharing it
gazza
reply by the author on 24-May-2011
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wow so much power in so few words visions of pain and a grieving mum the picture complimenting the piece perfectly
thank you so much for sharing it
gazza
Comment Written 24-May-2011
reply by the author on 24-May-2011
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Thank you a lot for reading it.
Comment from dogontherocks
Good job Prospero. I gave this a four star instead of five only because I'm picky. Your poem is about a broken and bleeding child but the picture above is serene. The mother and child are content and happy. You might consider changing line two to read "Her son hangs broken and still" Sad story. Good luck
reply by the author on 24-May-2011
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Good job Prospero. I gave this a four star instead of five only because I'm picky. Your poem is about a broken and bleeding child but the picture above is serene. The mother and child are content and happy. You might consider changing line two to read "Her son hangs broken and still" Sad story. Good luck
Comment Written 24-May-2011
reply by the author on 24-May-2011
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Yeah, dogontherocks, I had to use that since no portrait in the repertoire of pictures in the FanstoryArt section for mother and child limned a picture which fit the poem more than the one I chose. It repents me, but then I had no option; and I think I deserve the reduction.Thanks a lot.
