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22 total reviews
Comment from juliaSjames
Congratulations on your second place win, Shelley. What a wonderful play on words with "prints of our soles". And I see that you slipped in a mention of your beloved rainbows. I like the haunting, poignant quality of the write ... mortality vs immortality. On the other hand, your words bring to mind the lively upbeat tempo of Paul Simon's "Diamonds on the soles of her feet." Rich, textured writing - I enjoyed experiencing your haiku.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2011
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Congratulations on your second place win, Shelley. What a wonderful play on words with "prints of our soles". And I see that you slipped in a mention of your beloved rainbows. I like the haunting, poignant quality of the write ... mortality vs immortality. On the other hand, your words bring to mind the lively upbeat tempo of Paul Simon's "Diamonds on the soles of her feet." Rich, textured writing - I enjoyed experiencing your haiku.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2011
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thank you julia :-D
Comment from Misrael
Very short but good meaning. It means to me that all of life makes an impression on us either good or bad. But in the long run we all have choices to make no matter what life has thrown at us.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2011
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Very short but good meaning. It means to me that all of life makes an impression on us either good or bad. But in the long run we all have choices to make no matter what life has thrown at us.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2011
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thank you misrael :)
Comment from Adam C. Glasier
I realized that the second line can have a double-meaning, if you change "sole" to "soul." I'm not sure how the latter would work, but it's something worth thought. Nice write.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2011
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I realized that the second line can have a double-meaning, if you change "sole" to "soul." I'm not sure how the latter would work, but it's something worth thought. Nice write.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2011
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thank you adam :)
Comment from laren
A nice poem Haiku, through its beautiful images manufactures a beautiful and colorful autumn carpet. The artwork chosen is perfect!
Laren
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2011
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A nice poem Haiku, through its beautiful images manufactures a beautiful and colorful autumn carpet. The artwork chosen is perfect!
Laren
Comment Written 22-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2011
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thank you laren :)
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Thank you for sharing,
Laren
Comment from Yvon
Good stuff. The first line really kicks the whole thing off. The second line kind of fooled me, could have said footprints or souls.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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Good stuff. The first line really kicks the whole thing off. The second line kind of fooled me, could have said footprints or souls.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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thank you yvon :)
Comment from Lovinia
An excellent poem. What a delightful way to view Autumn, as a tapestry ... and of course it is just that.
Rainbow colors, "bears the faint prints of our soles" - vivid and poignant imagery. I detect innuendo here and definite layers of meaning.
The final line is a significant statement as the simple falling of leaves and I presume referring to "fallen souls" and also aging into the 'winter' of our lives, leaving just "... the faint prints of our soles".
Vivid imagery and expression and many thoughts to ponder.
The presentation is splendid. The black back ground appears significant as part of, and reflective of, the 'under layers' of the poem, with the white font reflecting 'spirit'. I am not certain if I have perceived more than you have intended or misinterpreted anything. I just wish to express to you how your poem has made me feel and how emotive it is to me.
A wonderful entry for the contest. I wish I had a six. Good luck.
Warm regards - :) Lovinia xoxo
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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An excellent poem. What a delightful way to view Autumn, as a tapestry ... and of course it is just that.
Rainbow colors, "bears the faint prints of our soles" - vivid and poignant imagery. I detect innuendo here and definite layers of meaning.
The final line is a significant statement as the simple falling of leaves and I presume referring to "fallen souls" and also aging into the 'winter' of our lives, leaving just "... the faint prints of our soles".
Vivid imagery and expression and many thoughts to ponder.
The presentation is splendid. The black back ground appears significant as part of, and reflective of, the 'under layers' of the poem, with the white font reflecting 'spirit'. I am not certain if I have perceived more than you have intended or misinterpreted anything. I just wish to express to you how your poem has made me feel and how emotive it is to me.
A wonderful entry for the contest. I wish I had a six. Good luck.
Warm regards - :) Lovinia xoxo
Comment Written 17-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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thank you lovinia :-)
Comment from Kingsland
I think the leaves covered those prints up. This was a well written short poem. It was just a pleasure to have read and written this response for... John
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2011
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I think the leaves covered those prints up. This was a well written short poem. It was just a pleasure to have read and written this response for... John
Comment Written 16-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2011
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lol thank you john :)
Comment from Betty517
rainbow tapestry
bears the faint prints of our soles
autumn's fallen leaves
Very beautiful haiku. This is so powerful! Image and words are right on. Great read.
Betty
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2011
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rainbow tapestry
bears the faint prints of our soles
autumn's fallen leaves
Very beautiful haiku. This is so powerful! Image and words are right on. Great read.
Betty
Comment Written 16-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2011
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thank you betty :)
Comment from Piggies Grandma
This is a very lovely poem, Shelley, and I enjoyed reading it very much. I like the way you used similies and the colors in your words. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2011
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This is a very lovely poem, Shelley, and I enjoyed reading it very much. I like the way you used similies and the colors in your words. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2011
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thank you piggies :-)
Comment from ernesto escarro
Autumn Tapestry
Rainbow tapestry- like wooden ornaments
hanging on the wall
bears the faint prints of our soles-
bears the promising changes of the look.
autumn fallen leaves- nature change as you are to change.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2011
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Autumn Tapestry
Rainbow tapestry- like wooden ornaments
hanging on the wall
bears the faint prints of our soles-
bears the promising changes of the look.
autumn fallen leaves- nature change as you are to change.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2011
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thank you ernesto :)
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Thank you fr sharing. God bless.
