Tribute to Our Lady of Fatima
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "The Bird on Mary's Hands"Marian poems
4 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
What a great focus for a poem, this little bird perched on Mary's hands - just the thought of it makes me smile.
I love that it sings to Mary and the speaker's observation that it seems as though when the bird takes off, it is carrying her prayer. This is a beautifully uplifting poem. Brooke
reply by the author on 23-May-2011
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What a great focus for a poem, this little bird perched on Mary's hands - just the thought of it makes me smile.
I love that it sings to Mary and the speaker's observation that it seems as though when the bird takes off, it is carrying her prayer. This is a beautifully uplifting poem. Brooke
Comment Written 23-May-2011
reply by the author on 23-May-2011
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Dear Brooke, Thank you for your review. I am going to see Mary again in Medjugorje, the way I did last year, and i'll say a prayer for you. Dove
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Thank you so very much :-) Even though I am Protestant, I've always had great reverence and admiration and empathy for Mary :-)
Comment from Nancy Cole Silverman
Your poem brought a smile to my face on this rainy southern day. My only thought is perhaps you might simplify the last line; changing it to: 'to her, it carried my prayer.' I don't think you need to say 'it felt as though' The context is understood and adding it takes away from your meaning.
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Your poem brought a smile to my face on this rainy southern day. My only thought is perhaps you might simplify the last line; changing it to: 'to her, it carried my prayer.' I don't think you need to say 'it felt as though' The context is understood and adding it takes away from your meaning.
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Dear Nancy, Thank you for your review. Dove
Comment from mumsyone
This is a cute poem; easy to envision a little bird sitting on Mary's hand.
Note: Did you realize that you pasted 2 copies of your poem on the page?
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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This is a cute poem; easy to envision a little bird sitting on Mary's hand.
Note: Did you realize that you pasted 2 copies of your poem on the page?
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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No, I didn't realize it. I was trying to get a picture posted with it, I guess that's what happened. Thank you for your review.
Comment from agedwell
I like the poem, but there are a couple of technical problems. The poem is printed twice in the space. And did you intend it to be "tho" or did you mean "though"?
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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I like the poem, but there are a couple of technical problems. The poem is printed twice in the space. And did you intend it to be "tho" or did you mean "though"?
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Dear agedwell, I didn't know that it printed twice and I did mean "tho' Dove
