Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Part two Chapter four"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from WilliamDeen
Quick thinking by the nurse. Nice work. Good intensity and emotion in the scene. Good dialogue and a very enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Quick thinking by the nurse. Nice work. Good intensity and emotion in the scene. Good dialogue and a very enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Thank youi for the kind review.
Comment from angelwings2011
This is an excellent offering. It
kept my attention word by word.
Domestic violence is insidious. Over
time the victim can come to believe
that the abuse is "normal". Great job.
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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This is an excellent offering. It
kept my attention word by word.
Domestic violence is insidious. Over
time the victim can come to believe
that the abuse is "normal". Great job.
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lisasolorio1
I come from an ex marriage of abuse and know the fears all to well. Your story was descriptive enough and closely accurate to what alot of the stronger women would feel. Nicely done.
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I come from an ex marriage of abuse and know the fears all to well. Your story was descriptive enough and closely accurate to what alot of the stronger women would feel. Nicely done.
Comment Written 17-May-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and insight.
Comment from Alaskastory
This part of chapter 4 gives a true picture of the brutal husband. Having a strong-willed nurse and a considerate social worker on the job is vastly encouraging. You've written this post very well, Barbara.
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This part of chapter 4 gives a true picture of the brutal husband. Having a strong-willed nurse and a considerate social worker on the job is vastly encouraging. You've written this post very well, Barbara.
Comment Written 17-May-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Tellis
It was a short post, but it had a lot of impact on the story. That guy is so nuts to think he can act like that and think he will get custody. I enjoyed the chapter very much.
tellis
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It was a short post, but it had a lot of impact on the story. That guy is so nuts to think he can act like that and think he will get custody. I enjoyed the chapter very much.
tellis
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I think Bobby has an ego problem.
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, you make get easy for your readers to feel Anna's pain and fear. It is a very touching story. I hope she get's help from this new volunteer. Keep posting.
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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Barbara, you make get easy for your readers to feel Anna's pain and fear. It is a very touching story. I hope she get's help from this new volunteer. Keep posting.
Comment Written 16-May-2011
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I hope she gets help from Ellen, too.
Comment from Lizizme
Well structured. Tight, clean and realistic dialog. Realistic characters. I really don't have any suggestions on how to make this any better. I'd like to see where this goes and what Anna's next moves are.
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Well structured. Tight, clean and realistic dialog. Realistic characters. I really don't have any suggestions on how to make this any better. I'd like to see where this goes and what Anna's next moves are.
Comment Written 16-May-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
Even though shorter than the other chapters this one made my heart race. Bobby is a violent man and I hope Anna can avoid him when she gets out of the hospital, not only for her sake but for the little boy, as well. I think Ellen Collier may be an angel in hospital clothing. Well done. I will have trouble waiting for the next chapter!...blessings, chey
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Hi Barbara,
Even though shorter than the other chapters this one made my heart race. Bobby is a violent man and I hope Anna can avoid him when she gets out of the hospital, not only for her sake but for the little boy, as well. I think Ellen Collier may be an angel in hospital clothing. Well done. I will have trouble waiting for the next chapter!...blessings, chey
Comment Written 16-May-2011
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I hope Ellen can help Anna. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
Very different approach of love and romance, Barbara. I haven't read much of you lately but this may the best one yet--VERY REALISTIC. I suppose many people wouldn't like realistic though, as they read fiction to escape reality. I found no errors. Great chapter.
Isaiah
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Very different approach of love and romance, Barbara. I haven't read much of you lately but this may the best one yet--VERY REALISTIC. I suppose many people wouldn't like realistic though, as they read fiction to escape reality. I found no errors. Great chapter.
Isaiah
Comment Written 16-May-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I hope I see your review again.
Comment from dtimes3
I enjoyed the story. It is believable and pretty much to the point. It was nice of the nurse to help out although her involvement may be grounds for a liability issue depending on the outcome. I look forward to the part of the volunteer at the door. Thanks for sharing.
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I enjoyed the story. It is believable and pretty much to the point. It was nice of the nurse to help out although her involvement may be grounds for a liability issue depending on the outcome. I look forward to the part of the volunteer at the door. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-May-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
