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New love
2 total reviews
Comment from
agedwell
A rhyming pattern sometimes slips into haiku, senryu, etc, but only if it feels natural and easy. This does not. The intent is clear but the presentation is stilted. This is only my opinion. Good Luck
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 13-May-2011
How would you suggest presenting three lines of poetry more successfully?
reply by agedwell on 13-May-2011
It was only my opinion and my discomfort. I would not presume to re-write your work. If you are comfortable with the rhyming so be it.
Comment from
thsharp1
The 3 verse poems are to the point and to the point.
I liked the simplicity of it and the feelings it provoked
I particularly liked My dream has come true, a good solid ending with excellent choice of words to echo out the whole poem.
Very good! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
Thank you for the positive feedback
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