Whispers in Shadows
A Dark Club Poem48 total reviews
Comment from stanishmichelle
Hi Dark Lord, I think this is a great poem for the club. Longing for death while traveling down the path of hurt, parting the sea of thorns. I feel the hatred feeding on his soul. I really enjoyed reading this. Michelle
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Hi Dark Lord, I think this is a great poem for the club. Longing for death while traveling down the path of hurt, parting the sea of thorns. I feel the hatred feeding on his soul. I really enjoyed reading this. Michelle
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
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You're welcome.
Comment from chita
You have good imagery and good rhythm and rhyme-you are descriptive and meet the requirements for the dark club-you write about demons -hatred-prosperity- and laughter--I like where you write about whispers(Whispers in Shadows ia all that I continue to expect and respect) a powerful statement and a thought provoking write--great job.
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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You have good imagery and good rhythm and rhyme-you are descriptive and meet the requirements for the dark club-you write about demons -hatred-prosperity- and laughter--I like where you write about whispers(Whispers in Shadows ia all that I continue to expect and respect) a powerful statement and a thought provoking write--great job.
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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WOW! Thank you so very much for the positive feedback, I do appreciate it...dark lord
Comment from Kevin C
This is an excellent darkly written write. Great mood and atmosphere. You set your tone with excellent lines and really gives the reader something to think about. Great write.
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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This is an excellent darkly written write. Great mood and atmosphere. You set your tone with excellent lines and really gives the reader something to think about. Great write.
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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As always, thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from pigwit
This poem had a different feel/rhythm to it than your others. -- Pigwit
Favorite line:
Following the sense of the unknown, I travel down the path of hurt.
Seeing the pain in your eyes, I continue the departure of longing.
The trouble spot of the known world lies in the anger of the tombstone.
Whispers in Shadows is all that I continue to expect and respect.
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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This poem had a different feel/rhythm to it than your others. -- Pigwit
Favorite line:
Following the sense of the unknown, I travel down the path of hurt.
Seeing the pain in your eyes, I continue the departure of longing.
The trouble spot of the known world lies in the anger of the tombstone.
Whispers in Shadows is all that I continue to expect and respect.
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the continued support of my writing, I do appreciate it...dark lord
Comment from angel123
This is a well written poem with good visual representation. It is interesting and it held my attention. I have no suggestions for any changes.
Angel123
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This is a well written poem with good visual representation. It is interesting and it held my attention. I have no suggestions for any changes.
Angel123
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from Piggies Grandma
This is very expressive and very well written. Your words are well chosen for maximum impact. This is different to the poetry that I write but I can appreciate it for the work of art it is.
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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This is very expressive and very well written. Your words are well chosen for maximum impact. This is different to the poetry that I write but I can appreciate it for the work of art it is.
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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I thank you so very much for the kind support of my writing...dark lord
Comment from Chris Tee
Absolutely dark!!! Well done here my friend!!
The poem expresses the doldrums and slums of a dark soul.
"loathing,through,thorns,of hurt,longing,tombstone,respect."
Above are extracts of the last words of the last seven lines and it spells out a dark picture indeed
Well done here mate!!
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reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Absolutely dark!!! Well done here my friend!!
The poem expresses the doldrums and slums of a dark soul.
"loathing,through,thorns,of hurt,longing,tombstone,respect."
Above are extracts of the last words of the last seven lines and it spells out a dark picture indeed
Well done here mate!!
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Comment Written 11-May-2011
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WOW! I thank you so very much for these kind words...dark lord
Comment from MS Writer
Powerful words and imagery. A fitting entry for the Dark Club. You can almost feel cold when reading this. I found this stanza the darkest:
Kicking the playing cards into the furnace, laughter is cold and relentless.
Controlled by the strings of the patriarch of loathing,
I settle not for greatness, but for the chance to slip on through.
Lounging in the graveyard of those gone by, I part the sea of thorns.
Great read and good luck.
Michele
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reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Powerful words and imagery. A fitting entry for the Dark Club. You can almost feel cold when reading this. I found this stanza the darkest:
Kicking the playing cards into the furnace, laughter is cold and relentless.
Controlled by the strings of the patriarch of loathing,
I settle not for greatness, but for the chance to slip on through.
Lounging in the graveyard of those gone by, I part the sea of thorns.
Great read and good luck.
Michele
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Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
