Whispers in Shadows
A Dark Club Poem48 total reviews
Comment from daymanrayne
Awesome picture on this one and especially love the colors in the background for this one in particular. I think after I'm done here I'm going to subscribe to you.
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Awesome picture on this one and especially love the colors in the background for this one in particular. I think after I'm done here I'm going to subscribe to you.
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from JW
Yet another dark piece of artwork. Very well written. It's use of description and imagery, perfect for a haunting scene. Good job.
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Yet another dark piece of artwork. Very well written. It's use of description and imagery, perfect for a haunting scene. Good job.
Comment Written 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from WilliamDeen
Nice work. Very haunting piece. Good presentation. A very enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing.
Couple of items in particular.
Liked this, "The shattered collection of broken dreams continues." It has a haunting sadness to it.
Also liked this, "I continue the departure of longing." Reminds one that caring for another does not just stop. It takes a while to get over it.
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Nice work. Very haunting piece. Good presentation. A very enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing.
Couple of items in particular.
Liked this, "The shattered collection of broken dreams continues." It has a haunting sadness to it.
Also liked this, "I continue the departure of longing." Reminds one that caring for another does not just stop. It takes a while to get over it.
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for these kind words, I am so pleased that you enjoyed it...dark lord
Comment from DIS-illusioned
--Interesting picture image.
--"Not sure why the hatred burns within.
The living embers that control the soul "
Very good metaphor.
--"The living embers that control the soul
Will only turn the light into blackness coal. "
Good rhymes.
--"The shattered collection of broken dreams continues. "
Good metaphoric imagery.
--"Prosperity is only for the chosen few, not demons under cover. "
Nice!
--Powerful imagery and metaphors throughout this cemetery perambulating story. Very nicely expressed and presented.
HOWL!!! ... :)
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--Interesting picture image.
--"Not sure why the hatred burns within.
The living embers that control the soul "
Very good metaphor.
--"The living embers that control the soul
Will only turn the light into blackness coal. "
Good rhymes.
--"The shattered collection of broken dreams continues. "
Good metaphoric imagery.
--"Prosperity is only for the chosen few, not demons under cover. "
Nice!
--Powerful imagery and metaphors throughout this cemetery perambulating story. Very nicely expressed and presented.
HOWL!!! ... :)
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind review, I do appreciate you stopping by and reading my work...dark lord
Comment from Galadriel's Lyric
You've done it again dark lord. Another brilliantly dark poetic haunting my mind with images of blood lusting demons. Great write, best of luck this week!
~Kristie
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You've done it again dark lord. Another brilliantly dark poetic haunting my mind with images of blood lusting demons. Great write, best of luck this week!
~Kristie
Comment Written 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for these kind words, it means the world to me...dark lord
Comment from missy98writer
Dklrd,
your dark poem is superbly written and dark in imagery. Your art work is creepy and cool. Written and rich in imagery. I love the dark story your poem told. You make effective use of the poetic devices alliteration and metaphor in your writing. Your rhymes are solid. Your descriptive writing is excellent. I like you second stanza the best because there truth in your words: "Prosperity is only for the chosen few, not demons under cover. Looking at the tomb of the lost soul, A crimson tear appears. Blood thirsty for a taste of a virgin touch, I long for death. Looking within, a slight sound is heard over the silence of desire." Keep on rocking excellent verse.
Melissa.
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Dklrd,
your dark poem is superbly written and dark in imagery. Your art work is creepy and cool. Written and rich in imagery. I love the dark story your poem told. You make effective use of the poetic devices alliteration and metaphor in your writing. Your rhymes are solid. Your descriptive writing is excellent. I like you second stanza the best because there truth in your words: "Prosperity is only for the chosen few, not demons under cover. Looking at the tomb of the lost soul, A crimson tear appears. Blood thirsty for a taste of a virgin touch, I long for death. Looking within, a slight sound is heard over the silence of desire." Keep on rocking excellent verse.
Melissa.
Comment Written 11-May-2011
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WOW!!!! Thank you so very much for these kind words. I am so glad that you enjoyed this piece...dark lord
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good strength in the fourth stanza. Keep up the good work.
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good strength in the fourth stanza. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
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You're welcome, DK. Charlie
Comment from Laurie Clayton
Another good offering to the
Dark Club vaults,
It's dark with strange yet
compelling combination of
passion, anger and resignation.
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Another good offering to the
Dark Club vaults,
It's dark with strange yet
compelling combination of
passion, anger and resignation.
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the positive review...dark lord
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Dklrdmcches
There is certainly a Gothic feel to this poem. The theme is strong, so is the imagery you invoke. Good work.
Patrick
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Hi Dklrdmcches
There is certainly a Gothic feel to this poem. The theme is strong, so is the imagery you invoke. Good work.
Patrick
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from miss joyce
This fascinates, mainly that I am clueless what you actually say here. I'll write the review and read again, again.
'The trouble spot of the known world lies in the anger of the tombstone.'
You do indeed write from right out of Poe's imaginings, that is a complement as his genius still remains alive even with those less than fifty years old!
Kiss, Van Halen gives it away...
Just being a wise.....person!
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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This fascinates, mainly that I am clueless what you actually say here. I'll write the review and read again, again.
'The trouble spot of the known world lies in the anger of the tombstone.'
You do indeed write from right out of Poe's imaginings, that is a complement as his genius still remains alive even with those less than fifty years old!
Kiss, Van Halen gives it away...
Just being a wise.....person!
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the insight and kind words...dark lord
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It's always a pleasure to read those inner thoughts of others...
Smiles!
