Whispers in Shadows
A Dark Club Poem48 total reviews
Comment from Gungalo
Not sure why the hatred burns within.
The living embers that control the soul
Will only turn the light into blackness coal.
The shattered collection of broken dreams continues.
Dark Lord, this is an awesome write, guy!!! I love the layout and the picture for they add to the feel of your write. Darkness guides your readers into a world forlorn and shadowy. You conjure up some mightly amazing lines here, like this one:
Looking within, a slight sound is heard over the silence of desire.
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Not sure why the hatred burns within.
The living embers that control the soul
Will only turn the light into blackness coal.
The shattered collection of broken dreams continues.
Dark Lord, this is an awesome write, guy!!! I love the layout and the picture for they add to the feel of your write. Darkness guides your readers into a world forlorn and shadowy. You conjure up some mightly amazing lines here, like this one:
Looking within, a slight sound is heard over the silence of desire.
Comment Written 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words. I love that you felt this was a good write. Your words bring joy to my soul...dark lord
Comment from Writingfundimension
You have some really superb lines in this poem, dark lord. I liked the images portrayed in 'kicking the playing cards into the furnace' - nicely done! and 'Following the sense of the unknown, I travel down the path of hurt' - again superb. There are a number of these in your poem, making it a impressive read. Take care, Bev
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You have some really superb lines in this poem, dark lord. I liked the images portrayed in 'kicking the playing cards into the furnace' - nicely done! and 'Following the sense of the unknown, I travel down the path of hurt' - again superb. There are a number of these in your poem, making it a impressive read. Take care, Bev
Comment Written 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
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You're welcome!
Comment from PoesyPoet
I like the line shattered collection of broken dreams. I can identifty with the dark areas of the poem, but I like light happy endings too. Thanks for sharing.
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I like the line shattered collection of broken dreams. I can identifty with the dark areas of the poem, but I like light happy endings too. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from denhagan
This was a nice quatrain-style poem written about "whispers in shadow", which was an interesting read.
No negative comments, other than maybe make it rhyme.
I enjoyed reading this poem.
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This was a nice quatrain-style poem written about "whispers in shadow", which was an interesting read.
No negative comments, other than maybe make it rhyme.
I enjoyed reading this poem.
Comment Written 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
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You are quite welcome! ~denhagan
Comment from Deejharrington
An excellent entry for the Dark Club. The vivid defeat of the soul in this poem is so real. So many terrific images and phrases; "Longing in the graveyard of those gone by" "I travel down the path of hurt", "Looking at the tomb of the lost soul, A crimson tear appears", was my favorite. Good luck.
deb
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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An excellent entry for the Dark Club. The vivid defeat of the soul in this poem is so real. So many terrific images and phrases; "Longing in the graveyard of those gone by" "I travel down the path of hurt", "Looking at the tomb of the lost soul, A crimson tear appears", was my favorite. Good luck.
deb
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words, I do appreciate it...dark lord
Comment from Graceheart
Superb piece of darkness I must say! Wondering where you got your pin name from. It has part of my last name in it. The artwork was perfect for this piece and your gothic vocabulary is perfect for your messege despair and hopelessness. I only hope for you is that these lines are just a temporary escape and not your dark side coming close to the light! There is one Light, if you see it, will heal all wounds and open a door to a life with eternal blessings and forever love. Do you know the JESUS of which I speak? John 14:6 says, JESUS said, " I am the Way, the Truth, and the Life, no man comes to the FATHER but by ME!" That same JESUS pulled me from darkness into HIS Glorious Light! I am compelled to tell anyone I even think might not know HIM about HIS Spiritual death that saved all who believe and HIS physical death, burial, and ressurection 3 days later, that proved HE was GOD as well as a perfect man. I am saved by GOD's Grace, and by nothing that I have done or could do. Eph 2: 8-9. The demons believe and tremble yet are not saved, but your no demon, just a person who seems to enjoy the dark side of writing...you have penned a great piece here, thoroughly enjoyed it...look forward to other poems in the future...till then, you'll be in my prayers.
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Superb piece of darkness I must say! Wondering where you got your pin name from. It has part of my last name in it. The artwork was perfect for this piece and your gothic vocabulary is perfect for your messege despair and hopelessness. I only hope for you is that these lines are just a temporary escape and not your dark side coming close to the light! There is one Light, if you see it, will heal all wounds and open a door to a life with eternal blessings and forever love. Do you know the JESUS of which I speak? John 14:6 says, JESUS said, " I am the Way, the Truth, and the Life, no man comes to the FATHER but by ME!" That same JESUS pulled me from darkness into HIS Glorious Light! I am compelled to tell anyone I even think might not know HIM about HIS Spiritual death that saved all who believe and HIS physical death, burial, and ressurection 3 days later, that proved HE was GOD as well as a perfect man. I am saved by GOD's Grace, and by nothing that I have done or could do. Eph 2: 8-9. The demons believe and tremble yet are not saved, but your no demon, just a person who seems to enjoy the dark side of writing...you have penned a great piece here, thoroughly enjoyed it...look forward to other poems in the future...till then, you'll be in my prayers.
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review my work...dark lord
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Dark Lord,
Your poems never disappoint me. They are delicious in their darkness
with well chosen words and easy flow. I often wonder if you are writing about the pain you have experienced or not. Your last verse is very powerful and gives me a feeling of melancholy. Well done, chey
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Hi Dark Lord,
Your poems never disappoint me. They are delicious in their darkness
with well chosen words and easy flow. I often wonder if you are writing about the pain you have experienced or not. Your last verse is very powerful and gives me a feeling of melancholy. Well done, chey
Comment Written 11-May-2011
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As always thank you for your kind words and support of my writing. My writing is usually fiction with a hint of personal aspects. Usually my feelings on what is happening in my life...dark lord
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I thought so....chey
Comment from MaryLinda
This certainly is one for the Dark Club!. Despair, depression and hurt are all hidden here, tangled up in a web of lost love and broken dreams. The poem has superb imagery and structure, with excellent use of descriptive verse. Wonderful rhythm and meter make this a great read. MaryLinda
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This certainly is one for the Dark Club!. Despair, depression and hurt are all hidden here, tangled up in a web of lost love and broken dreams. The poem has superb imagery and structure, with excellent use of descriptive verse. Wonderful rhythm and meter make this a great read. MaryLinda
Comment Written 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, dklrdmcches, you do such an excellent job writing these poems that even though i am not a fan of this genre, i find myself reading everything you post.
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this is very well written, dklrdmcches, you do such an excellent job writing these poems that even though i am not a fan of this genre, i find myself reading everything you post.
Comment Written 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from ulster3
Hello Dklrdmcches ...
You write for the dark side very well, so well that you make tough competition. I enjoyed this read very much, but i especially like the last stanza. I wish you well this week.
Fondly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Hello Dklrdmcches ...
You write for the dark side very well, so well that you make tough competition. I enjoyed this read very much, but i especially like the last stanza. I wish you well this week.
Fondly, Rebecca
Comment Written 11-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
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:) Wishing you well...
