Nasya
Picture inspired story of an unusual child33 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
What an outstanding story that touched on many senses and left me wondering if just maybe there could be some amount of truth in it. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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What an outstanding story that touched on many senses and left me wondering if just maybe there could be some amount of truth in it. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Thank you Ric. There are many people who believe they are Indago children in existence. I can't certainly can't say for sure, but there is enough evidence to make you wonder if this might actually be happening. I really appreciate the six stars.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nicely written. Good work.
You have introduced an exceptional character. Nasya needs some development, but she is young. you could put her in a variety of exciting scenes and situations.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Very nicely written. Good work.
You have introduced an exceptional character. Nasya needs some development, but she is young. you could put her in a variety of exciting scenes and situations.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Thank you Wayne, I thought I do that at some point. Thanks for the suggestion and nice review.
Beth
Comment from Ulla
Hi Beth, this is an amazing story and you told it so very well. I was riveted all the way through. She was indeed a child with a very rare gift. All best, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Hi Beth, this is an amazing story and you told it so very well. I was riveted all the way through. She was indeed a child with a very rare gift. All best, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you, I'm so glad you like it.
Beth
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This story was fascinating, beginning to end, even sounding like it actually might happen. Our second grandson didn't talk till he was two. We were concerned that there was something wrong till we realized he was letting his big brother do all the talking for him. He turned out to be exceptionally bright and quite able to talk.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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This story was fascinating, beginning to end, even sounding like it actually might happen. Our second grandson didn't talk till he was two. We were concerned that there was something wrong till we realized he was letting his big brother do all the talking for him. He turned out to be exceptionally bright and quite able to talk.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you for a great review. Some people believe Indigo children do exist. I don't know but maybe your grandson is one. I find it interesting to read about.
Beth
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He doesn't appear to have any ESP for animals or people. Smile. He is a captain in the Air Force.
Comment from lyenochka
This is a riveting story, Beth! You should have entered it into the First Chapter contest. I can imagine that we could learn a lot from this child. It reminds me of the verse " a little child will lead them."
A comment on the name:
Actually, the Hebrew for Miracle of God would be Nasyah (N-S for the miracle or banner and Yah for Yahweh) So you have the "y" and "s" switched.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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This is a riveting story, Beth! You should have entered it into the First Chapter contest. I can imagine that we could learn a lot from this child. It reminds me of the verse " a little child will lead them."
A comment on the name:
Actually, the Hebrew for Miracle of God would be Nasyah (N-S for the miracle or banner and Yah for Yahweh) So you have the "y" and "s" switched.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Except for the last ten paragraphs, this was written about eleven years ago, so I couldn't have used it as a first chapter. I might continue the story anyway. I'm bad about switching letters in words. I had the name spelled right to began with but someone pointed out, I was writing it both ways so I went back and changed the to all be alike and I should have looked up the meaning again. I knew you knowing Hebrew would notice that. No one else would. LOL I'll correct it.
Beth
Comment from Spitfire
I have heard about Indigo children and seen a movie made about them. At first, I thought the baby might be a demon from the description of her eyes. Nice turnaround with the story about the bear and Naysa's affinity for it. The ending is so true. The media may give the parents more fear than they can handle!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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I have heard about Indigo children and seen a movie made about them. At first, I thought the baby might be a demon from the description of her eyes. Nice turnaround with the story about the bear and Naysa's affinity for it. The ending is so true. The media may give the parents more fear than they can handle!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you for a great review. I really appreciate your comments. I'm thrilled with the six stars. I might add to this story at some point.
Beth
Comment from Judy Lawless
Wow, this is a very well written piece of supernatural fiction, Beth. My heart ached for the bear and little Naysa. The ending is so revealing. This could be the start of a novel about her life. :)
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Wow, this is a very well written piece of supernatural fiction, Beth. My heart ached for the bear and little Naysa. The ending is so revealing. This could be the start of a novel about her life. :)
Comment Written 23-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Thank you Judy, I thought it might make a longer story. If I had started it so long ago and I might could entered it as a first chapter. I might think about continuing it.
Beth
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You're very welcome, Beth. I'm disappointed it won't be a novel, but you have to do what works for you. :)
Comment from royowen
Perhaps you should have entered this in that first chapter contest Beth. I think if you can keep up this brilliant opening episode that you've got some sort of a book ahead of you. You have an excellent imagination my friend, blessings Roy
Typo : no, we('re) not talking... 2: you need to let us interview (hear) her?
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Perhaps you should have entered this in that first chapter contest Beth. I think if you can keep up this brilliant opening episode that you've got some sort of a book ahead of you. You have an excellent imagination my friend, blessings Roy
Typo : no, we('re) not talking... 2: you need to let us interview (hear) her?
Comment Written 23-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Thank you Roy, I wouldn't be allowed to enter it in a contest because I was an old one revived. I did add several paragraphs to the end of the original and I thought it might work as first chapter for a book. I think i might write more because she wouldn't be a bad character. Thanks for catching the spags.
Beth
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I realised that after I commented, a wonderful episode
Comment from Thomas Blanks
Naysa is an exceptionally well-written story supernatural fiction story about a young girl with powers. While the notes say the story was based on a photo of a very small child playing with a massive grizzly bear. That photo sends alarm bells off in my head. What could the true parents of the child in that photo be thinking? No matter how tame and trained... It is a wild animal that could kill a grown man with one swipe of its paw!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Naysa is an exceptionally well-written story supernatural fiction story about a young girl with powers. While the notes say the story was based on a photo of a very small child playing with a massive grizzly bear. That photo sends alarm bells off in my head. What could the true parents of the child in that photo be thinking? No matter how tame and trained... It is a wild animal that could kill a grown man with one swipe of its paw!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Thank you Thomas, I agree with you that if this is real live bear and it isn't photoshopped, someone was being very careless with a child's life. Still the picture deserved a story. I appreciate the comments.
Beth
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting and well written story. You used great descriptive words. Please check out these things:
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I hope you do very well in the contest! love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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This is a very interesting and well written story. You used great descriptive words. Please check out these things:
a accompanied the group.
accompanied
I hope you do very well in the contest! love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 23-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022
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Thank you Teri, This is an old one I pulled our of the archives and revived. I haven't written a lot of fiction lately. I appreciate the review, and I'm glad you noticed the spag."
Beth
Beth
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you are so welcome! I love reading your work! love you my friend!
