ANZAC Day in May
Kiwis vs Aussies Rugby League Test22 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written kiwi, i enjoyed reading this, i watched the movie about Pharlap years ago, i hope your team wins, rugby is really a vicious competition overseas.
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this is very well written kiwi, i enjoyed reading this, i watched the movie about Pharlap years ago, i hope your team wins, rugby is really a vicious competition overseas.
Comment Written 05-May-2011
reply by the author on 05-May-2011
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Thank you. Aussies and Kiwis enjoy a (usually) friendly rivalry on and off the sports field. Since I live with the 'enemy' I have to stand tall.
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i know what you mean, i am from georgia but live in florida so ga/fl weekend is interesting.
Comment from jackpeg
So glad I still have a hefty six for this masterfully rhymed and metered celebration. You are a rhymer par excellance, Kiwi. I remember seeing a very good movie about the race horse, "Phar Lap." Was he an Aussie horse or a New Zealander? Didn't quite get some of the terms, but without a doubt, this one was written for the home folks.
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So glad I still have a hefty six for this masterfully rhymed and metered celebration. You are a rhymer par excellance, Kiwi. I remember seeing a very good movie about the race horse, "Phar Lap." Was he an Aussie horse or a New Zealander? Didn't quite get some of the terms, but without a doubt, this one was written for the home folks.
Comment Written 05-May-2011
reply by the author on 05-May-2011
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Yes indeed.
Phar Lap was a New Zealand horse - one of the greats - but raced in Australia - went to America where he won his only race before dying in slightly mysterious circumstances. His skeleton is in an Australian museum and they also have his outsized heart in a jar somewhere. As the 'little brother' NZ resents our big bro' taking our 'best' e.g. actors (Russell Crowe), singers (Finn brothers), racehorses, recipes .... Really it just provided ammunition for some (usually) good-natured wrangling.
Thanks for the kind words.
Comment from Ronni
Seems to me this is more suitable in story form and
category, where the dialogue and all those allusions
you cite would consume almost a whole new book.
As it reads, it has distractions that make it somewhat
lengthy as a poem to hold interest and concentration,
since one has to continually seek the footnotes or
translation of jargons used. A Prolgue would have
been immensely helpful in leading into the background
of this particular sports event.
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Seems to me this is more suitable in story form and
category, where the dialogue and all those allusions
you cite would consume almost a whole new book.
As it reads, it has distractions that make it somewhat
lengthy as a poem to hold interest and concentration,
since one has to continually seek the footnotes or
translation of jargons used. A Prolgue would have
been immensely helpful in leading into the background
of this particular sports event.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-May-2011
reply by the author on 05-May-2011
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Thanks for the review - I was aware that this would not be everyone's 'cup of tea' and was 50/50 on whether to post or not...
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The enthusiasm was terrific in
the event, and interesting story.
You tried, took your chances, aware
of the odds, so irregardless, that
makes you a 'winner' for trying!
I commend and applalud you for
the effort and enthusiasim, which
was infectious throughout.
Good luck, keep writing.
Comment from LadyCosgrove
Another gem from your highly entertaining mind. Stanzas brilliantly balanced despite the lengthy tale and the rhythm is spot on the get the feel of the event. Fabulous detail and all held together perfectly in its own flavoursome wrap.
Even without the footnotes it is not difficult to get the gist of the thing.
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Another gem from your highly entertaining mind. Stanzas brilliantly balanced despite the lengthy tale and the rhythm is spot on the get the feel of the event. Fabulous detail and all held together perfectly in its own flavoursome wrap.
Even without the footnotes it is not difficult to get the gist of the thing.
Comment Written 05-May-2011
reply by the author on 05-May-2011
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Thank you for the positive review - tonight is the big match - I have drinks and munchies at the ready and am ready for a rollercoaster ride!
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I love your poem, it is well written and the rhyming is great.
I don't watch Rugby League but I like the way that you portray it.
I thought I better give you five stars as kiwis can't say six properly...lol...only joking. I really did enjoy your poem and it is definitely worth every star :)
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I love your poem, it is well written and the rhyming is great.
I don't watch Rugby League but I like the way that you portray it.
I thought I better give you five stars as kiwis can't say six properly...lol...only joking. I really did enjoy your poem and it is definitely worth every star :)
Comment Written 05-May-2011
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Thanks so much - I forgot to check which part of QLD you're from...
Comment from adewpearl
love the alliteration in Maori maiden
Excellent cadence and strong rhyming couplets
Wonderful humor in this entertaining story poem
I love the use of local jargon and the upbeat conclusion with all united in what ANZAC day pays tribute to. : -) Brooke
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love the alliteration in Maori maiden
Excellent cadence and strong rhyming couplets
Wonderful humor in this entertaining story poem
I love the use of local jargon and the upbeat conclusion with all united in what ANZAC day pays tribute to. : -) Brooke
Comment Written 05-May-2011
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Thanks, Brooke. I might have to eat some of my cheeky words after the match tomorrow, but if the Kiwis win I will enjoy rubbing some Aussie noses in it...
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Steve,
Racy dialogue, brilliant execution, which of course is what will happen to the poor old Kiwis tomorrow, so you'd butter git used to ut.
Your (sought of) fellow ANZAC,
Rij
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Dear Steve,
Racy dialogue, brilliant execution, which of course is what will happen to the poor old Kiwis tomorrow, so you'd butter git used to ut.
Your (sought of) fellow ANZAC,
Rij
Comment Written 05-May-2011
reply by the author on 05-May-2011
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Cheeky sod!
we've got to win this one of these days...
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Steve,
Be my guest, I follow Union anyway and there we are really suffering.
Comment from Larrypic11
Well I got a few of the references, but certainly not all. I did get the ebb and flow of your poem though, and I thought you did a great job of mimicking the emotions of the fans for this Rugby match, and making it come alive. Enjoy the game! Larry
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Well I got a few of the references, but certainly not all. I did get the ebb and flow of your poem though, and I thought you did a great job of mimicking the emotions of the fans for this Rugby match, and making it come alive. Enjoy the game! Larry
Comment Written 05-May-2011
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Thank you - just reviewed one of yours!
Comment from Chris Tee
Bravo!! Bravo!! If there were springboks in that contest you would sing a different song but we play and are the Rugby Union version world champions!!
I like your poem and think it is marvelous.
Well done.
The All Blacks could do it this year???
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Bravo!! Bravo!! If there were springboks in that contest you would sing a different song but we play and are the Rugby Union version world champions!!
I like your poem and think it is marvelous.
Well done.
The All Blacks could do it this year???
Comment Written 05-May-2011
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They always seem to be favourites, but so seldom bring home the silverware - maybe this time on home soil - that would be special...
Comment from moyramouse
I read this out loud to my husband and we both thoroughly enjoyed it even though we are staunch Rugby Union fans. The Haka is wonderful - we went to the Millenium Stadium in Cardiff when the All Blacks played Wales - it raised the hairs on my back to see them perform it. In my other life as a headmistress, I often had gap year students from NZ and one lad, from Rotorua, taught our first XV to do the Haka. It was fantastic - really got the crowds going. He put in some of his own touches as term progressed.
I loved all the references you dropped into this poem - Captain Cook, Old Mother Hubbard, Nureyev, Calloo Callay from the Jaberwocky, etc. A triumph, hope the game is as good as the poem. ANZAC day still means a lot and whilst the game allows National rivalries to raise their heads, the underlying ties are strong like any good relationship. I really enjoyed this, so full of fervour and fun. xxmouse
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I read this out loud to my husband and we both thoroughly enjoyed it even though we are staunch Rugby Union fans. The Haka is wonderful - we went to the Millenium Stadium in Cardiff when the All Blacks played Wales - it raised the hairs on my back to see them perform it. In my other life as a headmistress, I often had gap year students from NZ and one lad, from Rotorua, taught our first XV to do the Haka. It was fantastic - really got the crowds going. He put in some of his own touches as term progressed.
I loved all the references you dropped into this poem - Captain Cook, Old Mother Hubbard, Nureyev, Calloo Callay from the Jaberwocky, etc. A triumph, hope the game is as good as the poem. ANZAC day still means a lot and whilst the game allows National rivalries to raise their heads, the underlying ties are strong like any good relationship. I really enjoyed this, so full of fervour and fun. xxmouse
Comment Written 05-May-2011
reply by the author on 05-May-2011
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Thanks, mouse. I taught in Singapore for a while and I remember teaching staff members there my own version of the haka for Teachers' Day celebrations - what a hoot! No internet in those days to check words or actions so I did it from my rather fallible memory - of course, no-one in the crowd who watched it knew any better!
I'm more of a Union fan myself, but League is more 'available' here for some reason - better promoted and more commercial perhaps. I've had a couple of kiwis review this already - they love the digs about pavlovas and lamingtons...
