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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from koneart
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You've kept this story progressive and your writing is near perfect. I didn't find anything to note or any suggestions to tell you. The story is good. The Author Notes informative. Very well done.

 Comment Written 03-May-2011


reply by the author on 03-May-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Des Beirne
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I do so enjoy the way you write. I find it difficult to review this work, because I feel that everything I write may appear trite. If it is forgive me.
Having been in Troy's shoes, I really can empathise with this story.
Looking forward to the next chapter

 Comment Written 03-May-2011


reply by the author on 03-May-2011
    I find nothing you write trite. I appreciate you taking time to write a review.
Comment from kiwisteveh
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I have been following your story with some interest. I have docked one star here because I wonder if this section of the chapter has any real purpose - it seems to cover the same ground as earlier, with the only really new material being Anna's musing comparison of Troy and Bobby.

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 Comment Written 03-May-2011


reply by the author on 03-May-2011
    I am sorry you feel that way. I feel this section of the chapter is showing some growth of Anna and working on Troy and Anna's relationship. That relationships needs to be built extrmely show. Any woman who has been in that situation would understand and from the rest of my reviews has understood. Thank you for your review.
Comment from markk
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A fantastic story. You are doing a great job of this. I hope you too are doing well with your treatments and I hope that things are getting better. I am enjoying following this story. well done.

 Comment Written 03-May-2011


reply by the author on 03-May-2011
    Thank you for the kind review. I think I need to another cancer update. I will work on that. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from TheRavenKing
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I liked this vary much, mainly for your use of dialogue. I always find that a story moves much better when the is a good flow of speech. I plan to go back and read the rest of this story so i i can catch up thank you for a good read.

 Comment Written 03-May-2011


reply by the author on 03-May-2011
    Thank you for your kind words and encouragement.
Comment from Queenise
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Barbara your writing is so captivating and this seems so real. It is something that happens more than we like to acknowledge. Great information, pace, flow and imagery. the message conveyed is clear and easily understood. I feel the pain in this story. blessings. Would recommend. Queenise

 Comment Written 03-May-2011


reply by the author on 03-May-2011
    Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
reply by Queenise on 03-May-2011
    You're welcome,Barbara. Queenise
Comment from Paradox Tremors
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Sometimes, the abuse is not physical but mental--I understand the mental aspect. Abuse is never right or good in any shape or form. Well written my friend.

 Comment Written 03-May-2011


reply by the author on 03-May-2011
    I agree. Emotional abuse is just as damaging. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from swosugrad09
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Your author notes are superb and very interesting in light of the read. I appreciate you adding them. I hope she ends up with Troy and that Bobby gets what he deserves. Well written chapter!

 Comment Written 02-May-2011


reply by the author on 03-May-2011
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from stanishmichelle
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Poor Anna. Being in the hospital after a brutal beating has given her time to reflect seriously on her life and the mistake she made in marrying Bobby. Troy's acts of kindness definitely triggered this off. The story gets better each time I read, and I found the author notes interesting too.

 Comment Written 02-May-2011


reply by the author on 03-May-2011
    Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
reply by stanishmichelle on 03-May-2011
    You're welcome. All the best.
Comment from quashdog
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Sometimes in their youthful exuberance, girls imagine their boyfriends as their "knight in shining armor" and fail to see the two faced Jeckyll and Hyde persona that he really is until it is too late. Some men don't see their women as life partners, but rather, as personal property.

 Comment Written 02-May-2011


reply by the author on 02-May-2011
    Very true. Thank you for you insight and kind review.