Paranormal Adventures
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Comment from N.K. Wagner
A wonderfully creepy introduction to the manor and it's caretaker. A fun read, Bev. No SPAG or other issues. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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A wonderfully creepy introduction to the manor and it's caretaker. A fun read, Bev. No SPAG or other issues. :) Nancy
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Hi, Nancy, Thanks for reading and for the great review. I'm glad you liked it! :) Bev
Comment from lancellot
Well, this was refreshing a perfectly written chapter tonight. The dialogue was realistic and you kept it moving.
- does Aikido work on dogs? I like the humor of his thoughts.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Well, this was refreshing a perfectly written chapter tonight. The dialogue was realistic and you kept it moving.
- does Aikido work on dogs? I like the humor of his thoughts.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Hi, lancellot. I tried Aikido for a while, but didn't have the strength for all the kicking which I think would definitely fend off an animal attack. Wish I'd taken it up a lot younger because it was great discipline and quite fascinating.
Appreciate your kind and generous review.
Bev
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Quite a creepy start to this investigation. I lived in a trailer many years ago and things would fly off shelves at me. I don't think it was the trailer settling like everyone said, because it only happened when I was there alone. Pretty creepy. Enjoyed this chapter, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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Quite a creepy start to this investigation. I lived in a trailer many years ago and things would fly off shelves at me. I don't think it was the trailer settling like everyone said, because it only happened when I was there alone. Pretty creepy. Enjoyed this chapter, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Debbie, for sharing your experience and for the gracious review. Not much fun when you're at the receiving end of such happenings. :)
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Bev.
What an exciting chapter! Your characters and dialogue are excellent, keeping me hanging on every word. Great imagery as they entered the house of the portrait as the central feature. I could clearly see Jenkins change, his physical features, his mood and sneering grin. Ohh... this is so good and creepy! You've captured such a great vibe of mystery, eeriness and tension. Awesome chapter!
Bye
Hugs
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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Hi, Bev.
What an exciting chapter! Your characters and dialogue are excellent, keeping me hanging on every word. Great imagery as they entered the house of the portrait as the central feature. I could clearly see Jenkins change, his physical features, his mood and sneering grin. Ohh... this is so good and creepy! You've captured such a great vibe of mystery, eeriness and tension. Awesome chapter!
Bye
Hugs
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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Hello, my friend. I am so very thrilled that you enjoyed this chapter. It's going to be fun to re-edit and add some new elements to the old postings, and your encouragement really helps me feel supported in that. I so appreciate you! Hugs, Bev
Comment from judiverse
Really excellent. You do a great job with the caretaker. It's interesting that he is so in touch with Charles Bellingham and has his portrait. Jenkins is uncooperative, and would probably turn the dog on the investigators if sufficiently provoked. His behavior is strange, but the question is he just drunk or is it some kind of possession? If they have such responses in the caretaker's cottage, what they get in the house will be really be something. I like what you're doing with the language the investigators use. It's so down to earth, in contrast to the seriousness of their investigative work. judi
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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Really excellent. You do a great job with the caretaker. It's interesting that he is so in touch with Charles Bellingham and has his portrait. Jenkins is uncooperative, and would probably turn the dog on the investigators if sufficiently provoked. His behavior is strange, but the question is he just drunk or is it some kind of possession? If they have such responses in the caretaker's cottage, what they get in the house will be really be something. I like what you're doing with the language the investigators use. It's so down to earth, in contrast to the seriousness of their investigative work. judi
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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Judi, I really appreciate your comment about the dialogue. I've been getting some interesting feedback on that, so your words DO warm my heart. I think we grew up reading the same kind of authors and books, like Nancy Drew. The characteristics of the investigators will become more apparent as they face their challenges. Thank you so very much for this generous and most-encouraging review. Hugs, Bev
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You're welcome. judi
Comment from lindalcreel
I have to wonder if the dog belonged to the owner or if he belonged to the caretaker. He seems to be pretty protective of him. It would make senses that they couldn't find Bellingham's body if he were possessing the caretaker. Lots of stuff is going to happen and I hope they can finish their investigation.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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I have to wonder if the dog belonged to the owner or if he belonged to the caretaker. He seems to be pretty protective of him. It would make senses that they couldn't find Bellingham's body if he were possessing the caretaker. Lots of stuff is going to happen and I hope they can finish their investigation.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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There's a lot that's going to happen between now and the end for sure, Lindal. Thanks for the great review. :)
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Looking forward to the next chapters.
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Thanks!
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My pleasure:)
Comment from DALLAS01
Bev,
I am really enjoying this one. The pace is great and it seems to have a focus more on story than character relationships. Is this one going to be a short story write? I know it is early on in the story, so maybe I am misreading.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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Bev,
I am really enjoying this one. The pace is great and it seems to have a focus more on story than character relationships. Is this one going to be a short story write? I know it is early on in the story, so maybe I am misreading.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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Hi, Dallas. This will definitely be a shorter novel. I'm planning in the range of 25 to 30 chapters. It's just getting warmed up, though, and more of the characters' personalities will emerge. Thanks so much for the great review.
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Welcome*****
Comment from Joan E.
Scary but vividly appropriate artwork! I relished the realistic dialog and detailed description of the portrait. The dog's antics added to the tension. Here's to the continuing "rollercoaster ride"! -Joan
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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Scary but vividly appropriate artwork! I relished the realistic dialog and detailed description of the portrait. The dog's antics added to the tension. Here's to the continuing "rollercoaster ride"! -Joan
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Joan. I really appreciate your reading the chapter and your fine review! :) Bev
Comment from Selina Stambi
Yep, one heckova ride, all right, my dear Bev!
Hanging on for dear life, holding my breath and waiting for more!
I think you've got another FS bestseller here, my friend.
Just a few sleeps to go ... :):)
xxx
Sonali
The artist (had) kept the background simple
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2014
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Yep, one heckova ride, all right, my dear Bev!
Hanging on for dear life, holding my breath and waiting for more!
I think you've got another FS bestseller here, my friend.
Just a few sleeps to go ... :):)
xxx
Sonali
The artist (had) kept the background simple
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2014
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Thank you so very much for this very generous review, Sonali. I appreciate very much your encouragement and support, my friend. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Cumbrianlass
It ended too soon! I was reading away, lost in your story, and then POOF! LOL!
I'm loving this, Bev. So, Bellingham is using Porter. Love the 'evilness' of it. Great touch with the poker, and the dog adds another element of fear.
Great work.
Noticed only two itty bitty nits:
Jenkins Porter's voice rose in shrill objection(.)
Mike was trying to figure out what to do when he heard Mia's request(.)
Love Av
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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2014
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It ended too soon! I was reading away, lost in your story, and then POOF! LOL!
I'm loving this, Bev. So, Bellingham is using Porter. Love the 'evilness' of it. Great touch with the poker, and the dog adds another element of fear.
Great work.
Noticed only two itty bitty nits:
Jenkins Porter's voice rose in shrill objection(.)
Mike was trying to figure out what to do when he heard Mia's request(.)
Love Av
xx
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Av. Glad you enjoyed the chapter. Things are going to be moving pretty quickly because I have no intention of spending three years on another novel LoL. Seriously, thanks much for the encouragement and grand review. Corrections made, as well. Love and hugs, Bev
