The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "A Duel At Thirty Paces or a Truce?"A family learns their father is a serial killer
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Comment from vickib
Super writing again, and such a great book so far Valerie. It's so interesting and intriguing. We always wonder what goes on behind the story the media tells. You do an excellent job with this. XO
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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Super writing again, and such a great book so far Valerie. It's so interesting and intriguing. We always wonder what goes on behind the story the media tells. You do an excellent job with this. XO
Comment Written 09-May-2011
reply by the author on 09-May-2011
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The media seldom write about this side of the story because they feel it doesn't sell papers or up the ratings. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from Readywriter52
James is having a difficult time dealing with the situation. He can barely talk about it to Mac. It's only at Mac's prodding that James tells him what his mother told him. Unfortunately, he still has to get more information from his mother. If he presses too hard, his mother might break down.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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James is having a difficult time dealing with the situation. He can barely talk about it to Mac. It's only at Mac's prodding that James tells him what his mother told him. Unfortunately, he still has to get more information from his mother. If he presses too hard, his mother might break down.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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Yes, James has to be very careful. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from jehanned
There are a few grammatical and punctuation mistakes that need to be cleared up. For example, on the "Grow up, Watson" line, the end should say "...all the evidence against...." Eight paragraphs down, the last two words should be separated by a comma. "you, too." Just check carefully for those.
Good suspense, nice flow. I'm waiting to find out what happens next!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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There are a few grammatical and punctuation mistakes that need to be cleared up. For example, on the "Grow up, Watson" line, the end should say "...all the evidence against...." Eight paragraphs down, the last two words should be separated by a comma. "you, too." Just check carefully for those.
Good suspense, nice flow. I'm waiting to find out what happens next!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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Thanks for catching the spags. I appreciate your keen eye.
Comment from moyramouse
I am glad you put in an author's note about the 'village' because I had not come across this quote before.
james is carrying such a load it is no wonder he is close to breaking point. I suspected that Mac was using James to get information from his mother, but I can appreciate that she would not have said anything to Mac no matter how he questioned her. So all hinges on what else she can tell James and if the blood is Mary Ellen's. Can't wait for the next part. xxmosue
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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I am glad you put in an author's note about the 'village' because I had not come across this quote before.
james is carrying such a load it is no wonder he is close to breaking point. I suspected that Mac was using James to get information from his mother, but I can appreciate that she would not have said anything to Mac no matter how he questioned her. So all hinges on what else she can tell James and if the blood is Mary Ellen's. Can't wait for the next part. xxmosue
Comment Written 19-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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I a so please you enjoyed this one.
Comment from Tellis
I think James is growimg up really fast as he's been able to keep his anger under restraint. Mac is a good guy and he shouldn't fight him so much. I really enjoyed this excellent chapter.
Tellis
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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I think James is growimg up really fast as he's been able to keep his anger under restraint. Mac is a good guy and he shouldn't fight him so much. I really enjoyed this excellent chapter.
Tellis
Comment Written 19-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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Thank you. I am pleased you are enjoyinhg this.
Comment from lola29
It's fascinating learning about why James' father would do such horrendous things. His mind must really be damaged. James is indeed one of the most intelligent people I've ever read about, and he is also one of the most decent. This was another great chapter.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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It's fascinating learning about why James' father would do such horrendous things. His mind must really be damaged. James is indeed one of the most intelligent people I've ever read about, and he is also one of the most decent. This was another great chapter.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Thank you very much. Yes, his father was carrying a lot of baggage but still no excuse for killing twelve innocent people. I am glad you enjoyed this one.
Comment from WRITER1
I am sorry that I didn't read this sooner. Is this an extension of the Crack in the Mirror. I thought it was just a re hash of the story. I will start to follow it again. I thought the story was over. This is an excellent chapter.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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I am sorry that I didn't read this sooner. Is this an extension of the Crack in the Mirror. I thought it was just a re hash of the story. I will start to follow it again. I thought the story was over. This is an excellent chapter.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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No,this is a full book. I am about 2/3 done. Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Comment from raw form
It's like an onion being peeled layer by layer and with each one peeld off more is revealed! This is excellently crafted. I look forawrd to more.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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It's like an onion being peeled layer by layer and with each one peeld off more is revealed! This is excellently crafted. I look forawrd to more.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Thank you very much. I am pleased you are enjoying this.
Comment from Alaskastory
'A Duel At Thirty Paces or a Truce?' is a chapter that further shows the frustration James feels. Identifying a victim who he knew was a bit of a shock and makes me anxious for the next facts Mac comes up with.
A well written chapter, Sasha.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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'A Duel At Thirty Paces or a Truce?' is a chapter that further shows the frustration James feels. Identifying a victim who he knew was a bit of a shock and makes me anxious for the next facts Mac comes up with.
A well written chapter, Sasha.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Thank you very much. I am thrilled you are enjoying this.
Comment from LadyNyx
Another great chapter, give me more! LOL, the more I read, the deeper I'm pulled in and I truly can't wait to see more.
There was one part that confused me though so I'm hoping you can clear it up for me.
"there would be no village to hold my hand or guide me through this, all I had was Mac"
I'm not sure by the reference of there not being a village to hold his hand.
Beyond my own confusion, like I said, it's great!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2011
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Another great chapter, give me more! LOL, the more I read, the deeper I'm pulled in and I truly can't wait to see more.
There was one part that confused me though so I'm hoping you can clear it up for me.
"there would be no village to hold my hand or guide me through this, all I had was Mac"
I'm not sure by the reference of there not being a village to hold his hand.
Beyond my own confusion, like I said, it's great!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2011
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It is in reference to a book Hillary Clinton wrote called, It takes a village to raise a child....I may have to go back and clarify this section. Glad you still liked this chapter.
