Paranormal Adventures
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "A New England Haunting"Case Studies of Hauntings
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Comment from royowen
I enjoyed this well contrived and written episode, about paranormal activity! This narrative was well written, the character(s) well defined, although never having met a person like his malevolence, believable! The story is well plotted and absorbing, the scenes well described and designed, I found this to be overall, interesting and readable! I found no obvious errors, well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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I enjoyed this well contrived and written episode, about paranormal activity! This narrative was well written, the character(s) well defined, although never having met a person like his malevolence, believable! The story is well plotted and absorbing, the scenes well described and designed, I found this to be overall, interesting and readable! I found no obvious errors, well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thank you very much, Roy. My story is just getting started, so it's very gratifying to read that I have managed to make the story interesting thus far! I really appreciate your encouragement and generosity. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from José Ángel
I liked your story, good story, well run and with a compelling story. I loved the plot and how you develop it. 5 Stars. Congratulations, a hug from Chile :)
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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I liked your story, good story, well run and with a compelling story. I loved the plot and how you develop it. 5 Stars. Congratulations, a hug from Chile :)
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Jose. I'm really glad you liked the plot and how I'm developing it. That's most encouraging. :) Bev
Comment from c_lucas
I see you are off to an endeavor that will put your latest work to shame. This is very well written with a eery flow of words. I like your Maine Setting.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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I see you are off to an endeavor that will put your latest work to shame. This is very well written with a eery flow of words. I like your Maine Setting.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Hiya, Charlie. Thank you so much for this very encouraging review. Glad you found it eerie 'cause that's what I'm aiming for. I do love the Maine coastline. I was surprised when I re-posted that the site apparently slapped a picture on that wasn't my choice. I've tried changing it, but I guess I'll have to go with what's there.
Thanks again!
:) Bev
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Go to your editing page, remove image and post your own. You're welcome, page. Charlie
Comment from amahra
I noticed that this is listed as a supernatural fiction. But in the intro you said it is actual facts. Is the intro fiction or were you informing the readers?
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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I noticed that this is listed as a supernatural fiction. But in the intro you said it is actual facts. Is the intro fiction or were you informing the readers?
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thanks for that, Amahra. This is fiction. I'll check the wording of that intro. Thanks for the review! :) Bev
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Bev! I thought it was about time I read one of your books. This one caught my interest since I am writing about supernatural fiction right now too. It appears you have written 19 chapters. Will there be more at some point or is this it?
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Hi Bev! I thought it was about time I read one of your books. This one caught my interest since I am writing about supernatural fiction right now too. It appears you have written 19 chapters. Will there be more at some point or is this it?
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Joy, I really appreciate you taking time to read. I'd love to get any technical feedback you feel like offering. This was my first on-site novel and I'm thinking of pulling it out of mothballs.
Thanks my friend,
Hugs, Bev
Comment from AZDee
I very much enjoyed the first chapter .No Stone Unturned. One thing I noted was the seque from the 1922 murders and the investigation. I would have liked a bit of background on the 1922 characters and why he was going to murder the 2 women.
I was immediately drawn to read more about them.
Your dialog flows well. I know that is challenging and appreciate reading a good example.
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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I very much enjoyed the first chapter .No Stone Unturned. One thing I noted was the seque from the 1922 murders and the investigation. I would have liked a bit of background on the 1922 characters and why he was going to murder the 2 women.
I was immediately drawn to read more about them.
Your dialog flows well. I know that is challenging and appreciate reading a good example.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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Thanks AZDee. I really appreciate you taking time to read my first chapter. Your insights are helpful and I will consider them when doing a re-write. However, the story of Charles, as indicated in the beginning chapter is that he murdered the maid in the process of torturing her to find out who is wife Catherine was having an affair with. Having gotten that out of her, he murdered the wife and lover during a tryst. Thanks again for your review and interest...Bev
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When I reread the story paying more attention I caught that in the first few paragraphs.Bear with me as I learn to reveiw the posting.I speed read and find it isn't a good thing when I should pay attention to detail.I like this site and look forward to getting input on my first posting. I hope to get Chapter one of my work in progress posted Sat.
Thanks for writing
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No problem, AZDee!
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
you have a wonderful imagination. i've always been one that seems to draw spirits or haints, as granny used to call them but have never embraced it. they don't care, though, sometimes! interesting read, my dear.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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you have a wonderful imagination. i've always been one that seems to draw spirits or haints, as granny used to call them but have never embraced it. they don't care, though, sometimes! interesting read, my dear.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2011
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Thank you so much Kentucky Sweet Pea. I really appreciate you taking time to read my chapter and, especially, your fascinating personal history. Spirits do know who has the gift, and will attach themselves to us when they are in dire need, as you well know. I really appreciate your stopping by and your generous words of support. Take care! Bev
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well, bev, you certainly do "get" me and the spirits too. you are absolutely correct, too. i don't always like it, but have grown used to it over the almost 53 years i have lived. what a great note you've sent me. i needed it. thank you~p
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You are so very welcome, p. Glad to be of help! Hugs, Bev
Comment from Paradox Tremors
Wow, double wow, I wish I had a "6" to give you. Love the beginning and the setup--but the ending was fantastically incredible-----" Mia sat very still in her chair; and focused on getting the specter of an old woman, covered in blood, to go away." What a way to leave the reader wanting more! Love it! Glad I decided to read this.
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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Wow, double wow, I wish I had a "6" to give you. Love the beginning and the setup--but the ending was fantastically incredible-----" Mia sat very still in her chair; and focused on getting the specter of an old woman, covered in blood, to go away." What a way to leave the reader wanting more! Love it! Glad I decided to read this.
Comment Written 16-May-2011
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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I'm so happy that you liked my chapter, PT. I have had to get a little bit away from the specifics of the paranormal effects in order to set the scene and introduce characters a little better, but I promise you will be seeing more of Mia's potent abilities! So appreciate your virtual 6. You have definitely made my week! Kind regards, Bev
Comment from taravan
This is wonderfully written. Filled with intense emotion suspense and great character involvement. I could feel the complete switch from the past to the present just with the emotional involvement. Great job
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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This is wonderfully written. Filled with intense emotion suspense and great character involvement. I could feel the complete switch from the past to the present just with the emotional involvement. Great job
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Hi, taravan. Thank you so much for your wonderful review! I'm so happy you enjoyed chapter 1. I really appreciate you taking the time to read the piece and send along your great words of support. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from WilliamDeen
Very nice beginning. I'll bookcase to keep up with it. Well written and you introduced some really good characters. The historical backdrop at the beginning was very intriguing. Look forward to next addition. Billy
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Very nice beginning. I'll bookcase to keep up with it. Well written and you introduced some really good characters. The historical backdrop at the beginning was very intriguing. Look forward to next addition. Billy
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Hi, Billy. I'll be coming out with a new chapter this week. I sure do appreciate your interest; and, as always, your support and insights. Thanks much, Bev
