Comment from wiskas677@yandex.ru

Excellent

Very nice. I like how you start the story with the evil perpetrator...very nasty customer, that one. A couple of things tripped me up---Lake? I think it should be lake, or name the lake to make it a proper capitalization.
also, godsend (,) as
Other than that, well done!

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2011

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011

Thanks so much wiskas for catching those spags. I appreciate you getting my back, so to speak. I hope you'll stop by for future writes! Much appreciate your time and interest. Warm regards, Bev

Comment from Writeaway...

Excellent

A great start to a novel writingfundimension, the first chapter is always the most important one. You held my interest from beginning to end and I cannot suggest anything for improvment, an excellent job, keep writing!! :)

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2011

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011

Thanks, Jakeyboy. I hope to have some fun with this! I really appreciate your interest and taking time to read and review. You are most kind! Bev

Comment from JW

Excellent

Your update to this story was well done. No spags found and it was very easy to read. Definitely exciting.

Thanks for sharing this. JW


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 Comment Written 30-Mar-2011

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2011

Thanks buddy. I don't like putting out things with SPAGS, so I'm really happy you and others caught that. Thank you sincerely for your interest and support, Jonathon. Warm regards, Bev