Echoes of the Past
Old Sydney town revisited19 total reviews
Comment from patmedium
barque
Good luck with this one, Kace. You had me there. Very nicely done, dear. I like the illustration of the clipper ship, too. xxx
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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barque
Good luck with this one, Kace. You had me there. Very nicely done, dear. I like the illustration of the clipper ship, too. xxx
Comment Written 28-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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Hello Noddy two-shoes, Thanks for reading, glad you liked it. I try to get our history out there as much as I can; we may be Down Under but we have a lot of history to relate. Cheers, Kace.
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent abab rhyming in your quatrains, Kay.
Hero of Waterloo it's given name - drop the apostrophe
I like the alliteration in bawdy barmaids and the great visual of toothless pirates
What a great tale of Old Sydney town's history and the way it lives on in legend today :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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Excellent abab rhyming in your quatrains, Kay.
Hero of Waterloo it's given name - drop the apostrophe
I like the alliteration in bawdy barmaids and the great visual of toothless pirates
What a great tale of Old Sydney town's history and the way it lives on in legend today :-) Brooke
Comment Written 28-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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Wow! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing; took me ages to bring it to birthing - still feel it a bit choppy, like the sea. LOL.
Comment from Mithma
This is so well written poem that has been composed with underastanding and being a part of it. I like the matching picture, flow, rhyme and mood which enhance the effect. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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This is so well written poem that has been composed with underastanding and being a part of it. I like the matching picture, flow, rhyme and mood which enhance the effect. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 28-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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Mithma, Thanks for reading and glad you liked the poem. Cheers, Kay. XX
Comment from samsaysagain
Exceptional. This is a grand description of a part of the world many of us will never have the opportunity to see. Your writing captivates and entices the reader to learn more and more about this 'land down under'. Contest requirements are well met by the interesting story within a poem and the proper usage of an a,b rhyme scheme. The rhythm of the poem is a little 'choppy' but, in essence, fits well with the subject matter. It's easy to imagine that sailboat traversing choppy waters. The artwork is perfect for this well done poem.
Wish I could travel there and experience the uniqueness and history you describe. Very well done.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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Exceptional. This is a grand description of a part of the world many of us will never have the opportunity to see. Your writing captivates and entices the reader to learn more and more about this 'land down under'. Contest requirements are well met by the interesting story within a poem and the proper usage of an a,b rhyme scheme. The rhythm of the poem is a little 'choppy' but, in essence, fits well with the subject matter. It's easy to imagine that sailboat traversing choppy waters. The artwork is perfect for this well done poem.
Wish I could travel there and experience the uniqueness and history you describe. Very well done.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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samssong, thanks so much for the great review; I wish you could come see Oz one day. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Haggard
The first two paragraphs seemed to describe the beauty of atmosphere, but as I read on it began to display the imagery of haughty, unpleasant-looking pirates and liquor. It had a lot of different pieces combined into one lovely-written poem. You described everything in a bold, imaginable way - nicely executed. Thanks for the read. PS The quote at the end was quite thoughtful too.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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The first two paragraphs seemed to describe the beauty of atmosphere, but as I read on it began to display the imagery of haughty, unpleasant-looking pirates and liquor. It had a lot of different pieces combined into one lovely-written poem. You described everything in a bold, imaginable way - nicely executed. Thanks for the read. PS The quote at the end was quite thoughtful too.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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Hello Haggard, I tried to suck the reader into the pub; obviously it worked! Thanks so much for reading. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from MizKat
Aussie - Your story in a poem is very good and held my interest throughout. I enjoyed the read and also what you said in your Author Notes.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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Aussie - Your story in a poem is very good and held my interest throughout. I enjoyed the read and also what you said in your Author Notes.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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Hi Mizkat, thanks so much for reading, glad you enjoyed. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from Espresso momma
You have a bit of old history under your belt then I'd say. This is a great read and the photo adds to the beauty of the verse. Thank you so much.:)
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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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You have a bit of old history under your belt then I'd say. This is a great read and the photo adds to the beauty of the verse. Thank you so much.:)
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Comment Written 28-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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And thank you so much for reviewing; yes, Oz has a lot of history and we were fortunate to grow up with the Sydney Harbour bridge as our playground. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from Gungalo
Drinking to 'blackbirding' and whaling
They raise their pottery cups to eternity
Ghostly men that will never again go sailing
Fade into the walls with certainty.
Girl, as always this is just amazing. The verse above is wonderful and makes me smile for the stories they must have told while raising those mugs in toast!!!
I really love thisone!!
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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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Drinking to 'blackbirding' and whaling
They raise their pottery cups to eternity
Ghostly men that will never again go sailing
Fade into the walls with certainty.
Girl, as always this is just amazing. The verse above is wonderful and makes me smile for the stories they must have told while raising those mugs in toast!!!
I really love thisone!!
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Comment Written 28-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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Hey, Gungalo, Glad you enjoyed the story - took ages to sort it out! Blessings, Kay.
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But you wrote it ohhhhh so well as always. You are amazing girl!!!
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Cheeky charmer you is!
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Kay,
I am sorry to say I missed seeing Old Sydney when I was there. It sounds like such a magical place and your poem makes it seem even more so. I love the theme, the well chosen words and the easy flow. Well done and good luck in the contest. Blessings, chey
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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Hi Kay,
I am sorry to say I missed seeing Old Sydney when I was there. It sounds like such a magical place and your poem makes it seem even more so. I love the theme, the well chosen words and the easy flow. Well done and good luck in the contest. Blessings, chey
Comment Written 28-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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Hi chey, Thanks so much for reading and glad you enjoyed the story (took ages to sort out) bless you, Kay.
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You are most welcome...the poem is well worth six stars!
