Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Cherchez La Femme"A collection of my poems
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Comment from c_lucas
I thouroughly enjoyed your poet, it has a good pace to it and covered a lot of history. This poem is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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I thouroughly enjoyed your poet, it has a good pace to it and covered a lot of history. This poem is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thank you for the kind words - hope it made you laugh!
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You're welcome, Kiwi. Charlie
Comment from Aglovale
Witty, amusing and written with a refreshing pace and rhyme scheme. Although I fear for your life, there will be severe reprisals I should think! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Witty, amusing and written with a refreshing pace and rhyme scheme. Although I fear for your life, there will be severe reprisals I should think! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thank you - I shall watch my back!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello kiwisteveh
Here I am a woman but you still put a smile on my face
History with humor
What a great flow with a great rhythm.
Gert
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Hello kiwisteveh
Here I am a woman but you still put a smile on my face
History with humor
What a great flow with a great rhythm.
Gert
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thanks, Gert - it was fun to write - more history lessons to come.
Comment from moyramouse
Hilarious! And that is why women are the stronger ...be afraid...be very afraid... and do what your wife says!!!:)):) Loved the Marie Antoinette stanzas great rhyme with celebrated/decapitated. A very entertaining read with a strong vein of truth running through. xmouse
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Hilarious! And that is why women are the stronger ...be afraid...be very afraid... and do what your wife says!!!:)):) Loved the Marie Antoinette stanzas great rhyme with celebrated/decapitated. A very entertaining read with a strong vein of truth running through. xmouse
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Oh I'm never in doubt as to who is the stronger sex - my wife tells me all the time!
Thanks. Mouse.
Comment from mumsyone
What can I say, except that this is great. I read it with a smile on my lips. Lots of history, though maybe a little twisted but, all in all, a job well done!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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What can I say, except that this is great. I read it with a smile on my lips. Lots of history, though maybe a little twisted but, all in all, a job well done!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thanks for the review - more fun history lessons on the way!
Comment from mountainwriter49
Hello poet,
This poem is a real hoot! I laughed multiple
times as I read your crafty, creative well written
poem. This was a most enjoyable read, and I'll
forgive you for the occasional 'poetic license,"
though I do believe it was an asp, and not a viper,
that did Cleo in.
Very well done and thanks for sharing.
Ray
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Hello poet,
This poem is a real hoot! I laughed multiple
times as I read your crafty, creative well written
poem. This was a most enjoyable read, and I'll
forgive you for the occasional 'poetic license,"
though I do believe it was an asp, and not a viper,
that did Cleo in.
Very well done and thanks for sharing.
Ray
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thanks for the review - more fun history lessons on the way!
If only it had been an asper - then it would have fitted my metre!
Comment from misscookie
I love this poem
And it's perfect for your poem but, one would think a man does not have a mind of their own.no matter what happens it's always blame on the woman. It must be a man thing because my husband use to say after watching a movies. It was going good until a woman got into the picture.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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I love this poem
And it's perfect for your poem but, one would think a man does not have a mind of their own.no matter what happens it's always blame on the woman. It must be a man thing because my husband use to say after watching a movies. It was going good until a woman got into the picture.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Sounds like a man after my own heart! ;)
Thanks for the review - more fun history lessons on the way!
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Ylour verywelcome, take care.
Comment from fourdogs
Thank you for a very clever informative historical poem and then at the close, it gave me a laugh.The poem held my interest from start to finish and I still wanted more. I suppose we will have to wait for Charles and William for you to continue with more .Looking forward to another edition in the future .fourdogs.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thank you for a very clever informative historical poem and then at the close, it gave me a laugh.The poem held my interest from start to finish and I still wanted more. I suppose we will have to wait for Charles and William for you to continue with more .Looking forward to another edition in the future .fourdogs.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Actually I am planning to do more 'Brief Histories' when I have the time e.g. History of Britain, Famous death scenes, even History of English Literature... Thanks for the review
Comment from teacherdub
Well, I am not offended, but I am laughing quite a bit right now. Your quatrains rain on the parade a little, but I think they are well penned. Your use of figurative language, i.e. alliteration, really heightens the readers enjoyment. History needs to be looked at with fresh perspective at times, I believe. Great job.
May I suggest one couplet might need revisiting just to improve the flow not the context: (syllable balance)
With ass's jawbone as a sword,
He slaughtered Philistines by the horde.
{With the jawbone of an ass used as a sword,
He slaughtered Philistines by the horde.}
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Well, I am not offended, but I am laughing quite a bit right now. Your quatrains rain on the parade a little, but I think they are well penned. Your use of figurative language, i.e. alliteration, really heightens the readers enjoyment. History needs to be looked at with fresh perspective at times, I believe. Great job.
May I suggest one couplet might need revisiting just to improve the flow not the context: (syllable balance)
With ass's jawbone as a sword,
He slaughtered Philistines by the horde.
{With the jawbone of an ass used as a sword,
He slaughtered Philistines by the horde.}
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thanks for the review - more fun history lessons on the way!
Comment from nancyjam
Very,very funny. I truly enjoyed it.
cleverly rhymed and good strong meter.
I love the historical(or should I say hysterical)
examples given to prove your point.
this was really entertaining.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Very,very funny. I truly enjoyed it.
cleverly rhymed and good strong meter.
I love the historical(or should I say hysterical)
examples given to prove your point.
this was really entertaining.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thanks for the review - more hysterical historical lessons on the way!
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Just to say I may borrow your words for a title - I am thinking of a series and "Hysterical Historicals" sounds good to me. What say you?
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Go right ahead - sounds like a great series. Nancy
