The Glass Cat Eye
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Madame Reece Meets Dr. Connelly"Talking to the dead has its consequences
38 total reviews
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi Amahra. I'm just getting started with this series and you have me hooked on it! You have great characters and dialogue. Your story is apparently weaving in several themes, so I will wait for the next chapter to bring about a little more clarity. Making me want to read more is a good thing! This is creative and I, of course, love the supernatural angle. Best wishes, Bev
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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Hi Amahra. I'm just getting started with this series and you have me hooked on it! You have great characters and dialogue. Your story is apparently weaving in several themes, so I will wait for the next chapter to bring about a little more clarity. Making me want to read more is a good thing! This is creative and I, of course, love the supernatural angle. Best wishes, Bev
Comment Written 29-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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Oh thank you. I hope you were able to read Chapter one. Otherwise, it may be a bit confusing. But I'm glad you're aboard. Hope you're not disappointed. Blessings.
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I will check out Chapter one for sure!
Comment from Deorre Leonard
Yes making part 1 in blue helped lead to part 2. This was beautifully written. Great storyline, the characters were so real. Good read.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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Yes making part 1 in blue helped lead to part 2. This was beautifully written. Great storyline, the characters were so real. Good read.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from dinoscribe
Although I'm new to the story what I have read I enjoyed.
I question for you, why didn't you make chapters. I thought I'd ask simply because it would make it easier for people to go further into or back into the story. It is a very good and engaging read. I like the dialogue, it's very natural. :)
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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Although I'm new to the story what I have read I enjoyed.
I question for you, why didn't you make chapters. I thought I'd ask simply because it would make it easier for people to go further into or back into the story. It is a very good and engaging read. I like the dialogue, it's very natural. :)
Comment Written 29-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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Because it's a short story, I wasn't sure if it needed chapters. The only reason I have it as partI and partII is so I don't over burden my readers to read the entire story. It would be too long for one posting. But tell me what you think.
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I mkyself would have put it into chaters. Your story might be short, it's not that short, and it's a very good read. To encourage some of the reviewers (like me, 'cos I'm lazy) having the chapter bar makes it easier for them to skip back and forth rather than changing screen all the time. But that is just my opinion. It's not a burden to the readers to have the chapters to hand if the story is good, and you story is very good. :)
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Hey, I didn't know I could do that. Can you tell me how. I would love to do that for my readers.
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Try going to the edit it page and try to edit each title as a chapter. That should work, although you will have to title each one in the description box (dont use the same wording or you'll end up losing the lot). If you have trouble with this, go to 'contact us' and ask Tom. He is very helpful and will have an answer for you as soon as possible. Hope this helps.
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Thank you so much.
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Your welcome. :)
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Ok, I made the chapters. Thank you so much. I'm not really that new, but I'm still kind of fuzzy about how and what I can do on this site. Thank you so much for setting me straight on the bood chapters. Wow
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Glad it worked for you. Looking forward to your next post. it doesn't matter how new folk are, this complicated technology stuff still fuddles my brain too. :)
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I just put three up, but haven't promoted it yet. But has soon as you can earn something from it, please give it a read and tell me what you think.
Comment from animatqua
This is the first time I encountered the story, so I can only speak to my impression of this chapter.
Over all, I think this is both attention getting and attention holding. The writing flows well, and the characters do a good job of bringing the storyline forward.
That said, I did find a couple of problems.
First, the introduction is quite graphic, and probably should have a violence warning.
Second, `And' implies a connection, and should not start a sentence. There are several sentences beginning with `And' throughout.
Third, you have a tendency to assume the reader is familair with the story and the characters. I have no idea which chapter this is, so that might be a legitimate assumption.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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This is the first time I encountered the story, so I can only speak to my impression of this chapter.
Over all, I think this is both attention getting and attention holding. The writing flows well, and the characters do a good job of bringing the storyline forward.
That said, I did find a couple of problems.
First, the introduction is quite graphic, and probably should have a violence warning.
Second, `And' implies a connection, and should not start a sentence. There are several sentences beginning with `And' throughout.
Third, you have a tendency to assume the reader is familair with the story and the characters. I have no idea which chapter this is, so that might be a legitimate assumption.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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No. You can start a sentence with And. You have to stay up to date with English. I have big as day: Part II. Part one is in my portfolio. I'll check the graphic, but no one else had a problem.
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I apologize for not having a violence warning. I also apologize for not making my story chapters instead of Part I and Part II. You were only trying to help and I snapped. I wasn't having a good day; but that's no excuse.
Comment from fictionwriter
Although I've given this five stars there are a couple of things that pull me out of the story, one is the repetition of names, sometimes on every line. Go back through and see where you can use a pronoun instead and still have the reader understand who it is. Second, the hahahahah, is very annoying, Just say that the doctor laughed, the reader gets what that if. Other than that, interesting story.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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Although I've given this five stars there are a couple of things that pull me out of the story, one is the repetition of names, sometimes on every line. Go back through and see where you can use a pronoun instead and still have the reader understand who it is. Second, the hahahahah, is very annoying, Just say that the doctor laughed, the reader gets what that if. Other than that, interesting story.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Scornwell
I thought this was well written, I didn't find any mistakes. Your characters come across well and the dialog seemed realistic and consistent with the characters.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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I thought this was well written, I didn't find any mistakes. Your characters come across well and the dialog seemed realistic and consistent with the characters.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your comment.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
An impressive piece of
descriptive writing,
setting the scene and the
characters for the reader.
It is such a pleasure to review
work so well presented, which
makes it easy to read and understand.
Margaret
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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An impressive piece of
descriptive writing,
setting the scene and the
characters for the reader.
It is such a pleasure to review
work so well presented, which
makes it easy to read and understand.
Margaret
Comment Written 29-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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Thank you Margaret. Glad you liked it. Hope you will like PartIII.
Comment from JW
In seeing that I had not read Part I, the background info you provide was of great benefit.
Your chapter is well-written and and easy read. It was also written very realistically. No doubt, this is a excellent addition to your story7.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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In seeing that I had not read Part I, the background info you provide was of great benefit.
Your chapter is well-written and and easy read. It was also written very realistically. No doubt, this is a excellent addition to your story7.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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Thank you Jonathon. PartI is in the portfolio if you care to catch up. And PartIII and IV is already written; I'll be posting them soon.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Well written. You reveal little while holding us in suspense for the next part of the story. The laughter is creepy. There so much more going on here than I understand. I need to go back and re-read part I. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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Well written. You reveal little while holding us in suspense for the next part of the story. The laughter is creepy. There so much more going on here than I understand. I need to go back and re-read part I. :) Nancy
Comment Written 29-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2011
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His laughter is not a funny laughter, but sarcastic. He knows demons are liers. But thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from quashdog
Psychics do good?! Ha! I'm with Doc. Every psychic I've ever heard always talk about generalities and never anything specific, so I am a skeptic as to their true powers.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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Psychics do good?! Ha! I'm with Doc. Every psychic I've ever heard always talk about generalities and never anything specific, so I am a skeptic as to their true powers.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.
