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Call Me When You Get There

a song to my father

25 total reviews 
Comment from Piggies Grandma
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This is a very lovely song/poem and story. I enjoyed reading it very much, Katiesherrill. It is cleverly written and very well thought out.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
    Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from waihekebach
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This is a wonderful song,poem, although sad.
You have written this with skill and it flows beautifully.
I love the emotional impact this has.
Fantastic poem Katie.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
    Thank you so much for your understanding review. I appreciate your time.
Comment from The Stranger
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well if this doesnt beat them all, a beautiul tale of undying love between a father and daughter that is sadly brought to a close as The Lord calls time on the father

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
    Thank you so much for your kind comments. Everything seemed to come full circle as i held my dying fathers hand. Blessings Katie
Comment from nancyjam
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This is such a touching poem - the love
between you and your dad shows in each verse.
I love the way you paralleled both of your
feelings and requests.
The rhymes are pleasing and the repetition
works well. I'm sorry for your loss. Nancy

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
    Nancy, Thank you. I appreciate your comments
Comment from Bellydanser
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This is so moving, Katiesherrill. I was in tears before I ever reached the last verse. It's hard to know how the meter falls without knowing the melody, but the words are strong.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
    Thank you, this one just seemed to say all that i was feeling as my father went to heaven. I wanted so badly to hear him say he got there ok.
Comment from Whisperofhearts
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It deserves the six unfortunately I don't have the six to give, this was incredible, and brought instant tears to my eyes, I am not a father but a mother, and know the bonds, love and worry never ceases when they leave home. as for my father growing up I just always expected him to be there for me, my father is still with the living, but I think I'll be calling him as soon as I get home. I'm sorry for your loss. This was beautiful.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
    Thank you so much for your kind words. My fathers death came so fast that I wanted him to give me a qucik "ring" and let me know he arrived safely. I am glad that this struck a cord with you.
Comment from WilliamDeen
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baby's is/// remove is or remove 's

lets/// let's

sit's/// sits

What a beautiful song. First Daddy sits waiting for the call to come that his baby girl is okay. Then his Daughter sits in his chair waiting for the call to come that her Daddy is okay.... but I'm afraid there are no phones in heaven.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
    Thank you for the keen eye. I will fix those mistakes. I appreciate your comments too. How right you are, there are no phones in heaven.
Comment from Judith Ann
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This is a wonderful poem/song. The message is profound and touching and fills the heart with many emotions. I love how you made such a story out of this piece of work. This is very well done. Too bad this isn't a contest because you have a winner here.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
    Thanks for rubbing it in. LOL yes I think this one is much better than the one i entered.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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This is a lovely song and a wonderful tribute to your father. Parents can seem like a bother when young, but are missed when they are no longer there! I am sorry about the loss of your father~ Debbie

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
    Debbie, thank you so much for your understanding review.
Comment from abbasjoy
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I have tears in my eyes as I write this review. The song brings out such emotion . The lyrics are simple but truly it touches your heart and you can clearly see the father waiting for the call from his daughter. I would love to hear this sung.
The message is also quite profound. I am a Christian and my dad died when I was only 6 years old, before I knew the Lord.I sometimes wonder if he is in heaven with the Lord.
Great job!!!
Joan

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
    Joan, I am also so sorry for your loss. I sat by my fathers side as he was dying and wished so much that he could just let me know he arrived safely. I am glad this touched your heart.
reply by abbasjoy on 06-Oct-2011
    Thank you for your condolences.

    Joan