My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "Headaches"a collection of my poetry
18 total reviews
Comment from Sarah Bearer
i really liked that. did you know that my best friend is scribble jess! she was my friend at school. i'm in yr 5 now. so is she. she really likes your work an so do i
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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i really liked that. did you know that my best friend is scribble jess! she was my friend at school. i'm in yr 5 now. so is she. she really likes your work an so do i
Comment Written 11-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Thank you so much for time in reading and the generous review. I appreciate BOTH! ~patty~
Comment from moyramouse
I like the first verse, good description of the severity of the pain and loved the 'barometric pressure going crazy' line. I understand that you are referring to catching a cold in the first line of your third verse, but the line doesn't link it back as well as it could. Perhaps you could rephrase that line so the verse can stand on its own = 'these winter snows bring bring blocked up noses'
Some inspired descriptions of the pain in your last verse 'The devil's foothold on my soul' was marvellous and your final line ' he puts a cold compress to my brow' was just beautiful. x moyramouse
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2011
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I like the first verse, good description of the severity of the pain and loved the 'barometric pressure going crazy' line. I understand that you are referring to catching a cold in the first line of your third verse, but the line doesn't link it back as well as it could. Perhaps you could rephrase that line so the verse can stand on its own = 'these winter snows bring bring blocked up noses'
Some inspired descriptions of the pain in your last verse 'The devil's foothold on my soul' was marvellous and your final line ' he puts a cold compress to my brow' was just beautiful. x moyramouse
Comment Written 26-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2011
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Thank you so much for reading and your thoughtful review. ~patty~
Comment from sierra scribbler
I think your title says it all. Any one that suffers from headache, especially migraines, like I do, will actually enjoy the poem very much.
Here is to a headache free day.
Nicely done.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2011
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I think your title says it all. Any one that suffers from headache, especially migraines, like I do, will actually enjoy the poem very much.
Here is to a headache free day.
Nicely done.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2011
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Thank you so much for reading and your thoughtful review. ~patty~
Comment from adewpearl
Patty, You convey the pain of this type of headache most effectively
I love the alliterative image of God's putting a cold compress to your brow. Brooke
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2011
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Patty, You convey the pain of this type of headache most effectively
I love the alliterative image of God's putting a cold compress to your brow. Brooke
Comment Written 25-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2011
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Thank you so much for reading and the generous review, Brooke. I am feeling much better now that the storm is passing over - thank God! ~patty~
Comment from MizKat
Patty - I can relate to headaches as I get them quite often. In fact, I'm fighting one now. I think what you wrote is interesting. I hope your headache will leave you soon and stay away for a long time. Kat
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Patty - I can relate to headaches as I get them quite often. In fact, I'm fighting one now. I think what you wrote is interesting. I hope your headache will leave you soon and stay away for a long time. Kat
Comment Written 25-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Thank you, Kat. The headache eased up once the barometer leveled out. A good thing! I have class tonight and all day tomorrow and cannot afford to not be 100%! ~patty~
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Praise God your headache is better. I hope it's gone by tonight and all tomorrow when you have class. Kat
Comment from sweetsilversong
Patty you describe this terrible feeling so well.
Through your words I can imagine this awful time.
Very well written, excellent description.
Best wishes.
SSS
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Patty you describe this terrible feeling so well.
Through your words I can imagine this awful time.
Very well written, excellent description.
Best wishes.
SSS
Comment Written 25-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Thank you for reading and your well wishes. Now that the weather is stabilizing, I'm actually feeling almost human again :) ~patty~
Comment from the blue pixel
I'm not sure what you would call this Patty. I don't think it fits the bill of either free or verse and certainly not prose peotry but I am a migraine sufferer and the occasional tnesion headache so I really felt your pain. I think this may have been more successful as a form if you had written it as a piece of prose or perhaps a an essay and I can certainy remember wishing death would end my migraines which i can have for up to 6 or even 8 days in a row. Awful. xx Carol
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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I'm not sure what you would call this Patty. I don't think it fits the bill of either free or verse and certainly not prose peotry but I am a migraine sufferer and the occasional tnesion headache so I really felt your pain. I think this may have been more successful as a form if you had written it as a piece of prose or perhaps a an essay and I can certainy remember wishing death would end my migraines which i can have for up to 6 or even 8 days in a row. Awful. xx Carol
Comment Written 25-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Thank you for reading and your thoughtful comments. Your well wishes help - I just would LOVE it if we could WISH it away! ~patty~
Comment from happy to be here
very good descriptive piece. you almost blame your little dog which makes me laugh a bit as I know how you love animals. I like your ending!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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very good descriptive piece. you almost blame your little dog which makes me laugh a bit as I know how you love animals. I like your ending!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Thank you for reading and your thoughtful comments. Your well wishes help - I just would LOVE it if we could WISH it away! ~patty~
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hi Patty,
This is an excellent poem and many, many people will relate to it. A couple of my kids have terrible headaches from time to time and you description of what a bad headache feels like helps me to understand more fully what a fierce headache feels like. I especially enjoyed your last stanza where you bring hope for the future into the picture... in Heaven there will be no pain. Thank goodness for that!
Well done. Thanks for sharing. Hugs, W ^-^
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Hi Patty,
This is an excellent poem and many, many people will relate to it. A couple of my kids have terrible headaches from time to time and you description of what a bad headache feels like helps me to understand more fully what a fierce headache feels like. I especially enjoyed your last stanza where you bring hope for the future into the picture... in Heaven there will be no pain. Thank goodness for that!
Well done. Thanks for sharing. Hugs, W ^-^
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Thank you for reading and your thoughtful comments. Your well wishes help - I just would LOVE it if we could WISH it away! ~patty~
Comment from Mara del Mar
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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It maybe not have the rhyme or the proper way - that I like it like this - but it is very communicative images and continuous flows, also transmits the feeling of despair from headache that have you that time. Well done!
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Thank you for reading and your thoughtful comments. Your well wishes help - I just would LOVE it if we could WISH it away! ~patty~
