Immortality On Borrowed Time
A sonnet on our fleeting life.116 total reviews
Comment from missy98writer
Mike K2,
your poem is beautifully written and rich in imagery paint a vivid picture in the readers head. Excellent use of metaphors, great narrative and very good descriptive writing. I especially enjoyed the lines: "Some people lose their life before their prime; others, dedicate their lives for others. A few, fear cloaked, squander good use of time; a precious few live life without a bother." Thanks for sharing your thought pondering sonnet. You did an excellent job writing a Sonnet.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Mike K2,
your poem is beautifully written and rich in imagery paint a vivid picture in the readers head. Excellent use of metaphors, great narrative and very good descriptive writing. I especially enjoyed the lines: "Some people lose their life before their prime; others, dedicate their lives for others. A few, fear cloaked, squander good use of time; a precious few live life without a bother." Thanks for sharing your thought pondering sonnet. You did an excellent job writing a Sonnet.
Melissa.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Thank you for the review, the compliments and sharing your favorite verse with me. Mike
Comment from georgehandy
Hi Mike
Nice poem. hope to dash in sly sprint. nice line.
Bob Moog was a friend of mine, inventor of the Theremin. He lived here in Asheville, and collected my visual art.
I recall Woody Alan say, I want to be immortalized by not dying.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Hi Mike
Nice poem. hope to dash in sly sprint. nice line.
Bob Moog was a friend of mine, inventor of the Theremin. He lived here in Asheville, and collected my visual art.
I recall Woody Alan say, I want to be immortalized by not dying.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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I learned a lot about Moog though a fairly complete video about him. He invented the synthesizer, but got his start with the Theremin, which is what sent him into the world of electronics. The Theremin was invent by the person of the same name. A Russian scientist who immigrated to the US, became popular in his performances, then got kidnapped from NY and sent back to Russia where he developed the bug (listening device.) I thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
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Bob was a great man , and very much did, and still does influnece Asheville. Moog fest is big. and he is oppenig a new store front. He was once near my large sculpture studio.
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Cool! I had a friend that writes CD reviews for Progressive Magazine and he went to a moog fest and met and had lunch with his daughter. If I can refi my house, though not trained in music, I would pick up a digital pipe organ and a modular synth. They don't make them anymore and passed of the design, to synthesizers.com. They are a bit expensive and I would probably be the only owner in the regin. Everybody these days are going to computers and digital synthes, but with the desire to record poetry, I thing the old analog modular would much better fill my needs. Great chatting with you! Mike
Comment from PoesyPoet
He Mike, I haven't read your work in quite some time. Well done, my friend. Time starts moving us forward from the day we're born until He stops our clock. I like it. PP
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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He Mike, I haven't read your work in quite some time. Well done, my friend. Time starts moving us forward from the day we're born until He stops our clock. I like it. PP
Comment Written 21-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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I have mainly been working on my biography the last year and two months and have really slowed in my poetry. But it has been picked up in the quarterly, "Poems of the World." I am glad to see you are back, as I missed you as well! Thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Terry wrote
I like this ... it somewhat echoes what I tried to convey in my poem "'Scape and Scope of Life" ... the different choices and challenges that each of us face as we mark our way through life. Thank you - a different view on a similar them.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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I like this ... it somewhat echoes what I tried to convey in my poem "'Scape and Scope of Life" ... the different choices and challenges that each of us face as we mark our way through life. Thank you - a different view on a similar them.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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That's not only a very nice quality amonst poetic writers, but an honor that you shared that with me. I love that even with certain commonalities, poems and their imagery are as unique as finger prints. Thank you very much for this review, Mike.
Comment from WRITER1
You sum life up pretty well, I enjoyed reading and living life through all that you said. It is true we hit and miss life all the time.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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You sum life up pretty well, I enjoyed reading and living life through all that you said. It is true we hit and miss life all the time.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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LOL, so true as at least with mine, I think I have things figured out and it as if I strike a humorous chord with God, where he grabs me by the nap of my neck and demands, "You do... Think again." Thank you very much for this flattering review. Mike
Comment from mumsyone
Our time on earth is fleeting, for sure; pity those who are squandering time, waiting for the "right time" to make the decision to turn to God. Your sonnet holds a great deal of truth. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Our time on earth is fleeting, for sure; pity those who are squandering time, waiting for the "right time" to make the decision to turn to God. Your sonnet holds a great deal of truth. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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I do as well people who don't make good use of the friends that enter their lives. I enjoyed this review and thank you for it and the compliments. Mike
Comment from Gary D. Hardy
One form of poetry I don't seem to be able to do as yet. But love the style. This a very well written one full of truth. Stated in poetic fashion. Loved the abab rhyme. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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One form of poetry I don't seem to be able to do as yet. But love the style. This a very well written one full of truth. Stated in poetic fashion. Loved the abab rhyme. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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This sonnet took about thirty hours and it was like Poe's, "A Dream Within a Dream." U have a good book on poetry basics and explored the various aspects of the forms within the sonnet form... Then double checked things with what is on the internet. I do have a strange feeling that the place where I penned it helped. The funny thing is, most of the people in the poetry discussion group don't write poems very much, and they saw a person mouthing, counting, grimicing, then scribbling. I loved this review and thank you for it and the compliments. MIke
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You are very welcome!
Comment from penelope
Good title and a thought-provoking poem, Mike. Yes, the lucky ones carry on without a bother, without doing any deep philosophising on life and its meaning or their part in the whole play. I love this: "A worried few, hope to dash in sly sprint..." It gives the poem a humorous touch. Yes, I too hope I please HIM because I don't want to go to that unspeakable place. He, he. Penelope
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Good title and a thought-provoking poem, Mike. Yes, the lucky ones carry on without a bother, without doing any deep philosophising on life and its meaning or their part in the whole play. I love this: "A worried few, hope to dash in sly sprint..." It gives the poem a humorous touch. Yes, I too hope I please HIM because I don't want to go to that unspeakable place. He, he. Penelope
Comment Written 21-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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I am glad you shared that with me, that line is a combination of thoughts as some knowingly approach death with fear and apprehension. With my life, I wondered if I make it past the pearly gates, but hope to see a clue from the face of St. Peter. Hopefully I could get close enough to those gates so I can do a wind sprint past them... And remain there because I impressed them with sheer gall and balls. LOL
Thank you very much for this review. Mike
Comment from pickthorn
Beautiful poem reminding us of the brevity of life and the need to purify our souls so we may be "carried to Heaven upon eagle's wing."
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Beautiful poem reminding us of the brevity of life and the need to purify our souls so we may be "carried to Heaven upon eagle's wing."
Comment Written 21-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Great review! I have a funny story about that as my grandmother passed and realized outside of the umpha band, she really didn't give us details like which dress. With her slowly chilling body in still in the bed, we opened the draw and found a note, "This is my mother's hankerchief, I want it buried with me." The wonder which dress and opened the closet to find a note on the one she wanted; and another drawer with the following, "I demand that this poem be read at my wake!" It was, "Upon Eagle's wings."
Since then it has sort of become a standard at funeral services, to the point of irritation, yet if it isn't heard, it is missed. I sort of wanted to pay homage to such a mighty piece, but give it a slight poke of wit. I loved this review and thank you for it and the compliment. Mike
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Your very welcome
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Thank you for your detailed response to my review. I found it very interesting. Pick
Comment from Writeaway...
An in thralling piece Mike, your writing is fresh and orginal and I cannot suggest anything for improvment. You show much promise as a writer, an excellent job, keep writing!! :)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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An in thralling piece Mike, your writing is fresh and orginal and I cannot suggest anything for improvment. You show much promise as a writer, an excellent job, keep writing!! :)
Comment Written 21-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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I do exactly that in so many ways, and rest assured that I can guarentee that I miff the hell out of my local newspaper, yet they sometimes publish my letters. Even a simple friendship post is a writing project for me. I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
