Immortality On Borrowed Time
A sonnet on our fleeting life.116 total reviews
Comment from Jewell McChesney
I thoroughly enjoyed your unique perspective on life and its ending and the footprints we leave.
I especially like the way you created a finale to sum it all up.
great work!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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I thoroughly enjoyed your unique perspective on life and its ending and the footprints we leave.
I especially like the way you created a finale to sum it all up.
great work!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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I got the biggest kick out of this review. I like the word unique as often I had to walk alone, learn and adapt. While this creates a certain disdain and harshness to one's life; it also developes a much greater respect and appreciation of that life. Something worthwhile to share with others. Thank you very much for this complimentive review. Mike
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
This is interesting.
I like it.
Good title.
You are making me ponder. I like that.
Yes, we all live our lives in one of the ways you mention.
I like your last 2 lines and your first stanza the best.
Kathryn
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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This is interesting.
I like it.
Good title.
You are making me ponder. I like that.
Yes, we all live our lives in one of the ways you mention.
I like your last 2 lines and your first stanza the best.
Kathryn
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Thank you for reading, sharing you assessment with me and for this review. Mike
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Mike, you're welcome.
Kathryn
Comment from daysofdeath1
this is quite the poem. i love poems that deal with the fleeting ephemeral time restrictions humans are placed with, and yet are promised an everlasting life of happiness, to counteract the absolute sadness that would come without.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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this is quite the poem. i love poems that deal with the fleeting ephemeral time restrictions humans are placed with, and yet are promised an everlasting life of happiness, to counteract the absolute sadness that would come without.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Thank you for this review and your very flattering compliment. I really appreciate it, Mike
Comment from SkyBluePink
This was a fantastic read my friend!
You really brought your thoughts alive and they jumped right off of the page!
I like that!
I could identify with so much of what you wrote here.
Thank you for sharing this with us!
Keep Writing!
:)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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This was a fantastic read my friend!
You really brought your thoughts alive and they jumped right off of the page!
I like that!
I could identify with so much of what you wrote here.
Thank you for sharing this with us!
Keep Writing!
:)
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Thank you for reading this, as well the compliments and this review. I really appreciate the encouragement. Mike
Comment from ErikAHarris
Nice bit there. No real hiccups anywhere. Nicely stated point, we all wish to leave a mark in a way, one that will please if no one else ourselves. Good job.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Nice bit there. No real hiccups anywhere. Nicely stated point, we all wish to leave a mark in a way, one that will please if no one else ourselves. Good job.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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This review reminds me of the saying, "You can't take your wealth with you," and a retort, "But you can leave a wealth of yourself behind." Thank you very much for reading, reviewing this and the compliments, Mike
Comment from JW
This is a wonderful poem. And it really leaves the reader a lot to think about - How do they want to enter Heaven's gates. As for me, I would be happy to just get inside.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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This is a wonderful poem. And it really leaves the reader a lot to think about - How do they want to enter Heaven's gates. As for me, I would be happy to just get inside.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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I have the worst feeling that when it comes our time, we all will feel very naked. It was due the the Anestesia from dental surgery that when I woke up, a seated old guy in a chair asked me, "So tell me, how do you feel about your life." I could only think of all of the worst things and winced. He laughed and told me that I impressed, "important people," and should hesitate to live my life as I see fit. Then he disappeared and the elderly assistant had to body slam me back into the dental chair. I have the funniest feeling that those in heaven understand us more then we think they will. Yet that fear I am wrong keeps me scared enough to try not to screw up. Still do on occasion. LOL
I enjoyed this complimentative review and thank you for it. Mike
Comment from cheery blossom
You say a lot in this short piece and you are right, we are living in perilous time. Soon, I believe, the Lord will come ad put an end to the wickedness that is happening
all around us this day. Like you, I hope (pray) that My footprints will acceptable and I believe it is true that the only way that they will be is if I keep myself covered with the blood of Christ, God bless you. Cheery.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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You say a lot in this short piece and you are right, we are living in perilous time. Soon, I believe, the Lord will come ad put an end to the wickedness that is happening
all around us this day. Like you, I hope (pray) that My footprints will acceptable and I believe it is true that the only way that they will be is if I keep myself covered with the blood of Christ, God bless you. Cheery.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Considered my prayer completed. Hopefully this poem will be a reminder to people that reminds one not to be part of the perilous times themselves. I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from InHisownwrite
A very heavy thought...
That you take us to....
Very creatively..
Some do waste their time here as you say...
Some put it to good use...
A worried few, hope to dash in sly sprint...
Love the last two lines as well...
Bryan
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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A very heavy thought...
That you take us to....
Very creatively..
Some do waste their time here as you say...
Some put it to good use...
A worried few, hope to dash in sly sprint...
Love the last two lines as well...
Bryan
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Thank you for reviewing my poem and sharing with me what you enjoy about it. Mike
Comment from Alan K Pease
From your writing I don't think you need to be too cautious about posting your work. My addiction is also procrastination. I am extremely satisfied about my own writing till the last hour before posting when I go into a panic. Your poem has good flow, easy read and a lot of imagination well stated in rhyme.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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From your writing I don't think you need to be too cautious about posting your work. My addiction is also procrastination. I am extremely satisfied about my own writing till the last hour before posting when I go into a panic. Your poem has good flow, easy read and a lot of imagination well stated in rhyme.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. It's strange, I don't panic and love the reviewing process. Mike
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Mike, You write eloquently and poetically. I like your message but more importantly needed to hear it. Concrete delivery of something that needed to be said. Well done. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Hi Mike, You write eloquently and poetically. I like your message but more importantly needed to hear it. Concrete delivery of something that needed to be said. Well done. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Hugs, thank you so much for reviewing this. Your compliment is rare indeed! Mike
