Immortality On Borrowed Time
A sonnet on our fleeting life.116 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Mike Since 2007 eh? I don't know why I haven't run into your poetry before? You are very good with words...really. I liked this poem. Not quite clear on what your author's notes mean regards "Jean and Mike" but no big deal.
Bob
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Hi, Mike Since 2007 eh? I don't know why I haven't run into your poetry before? You are very good with words...really. I liked this poem. Not quite clear on what your author's notes mean regards "Jean and Mike" but no big deal.
Bob
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Always feel free to return and hunt and peck through my portfolio. Performance Problems-Jean and my is a biography that I am working on. I consider it working title, as the first part is a childhood-romantic comedy/tragity, but all important as it highlights so many aspects and advenutures that I had in life. I thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
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That goes both ways, Mike...Thanks Bob
Comment from discursivepoet
Great poem. Really like the concept. Like the ending where you seemed to desire leaving an impression behind, hopefully one that is satisfying, showing a life well spent.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Great poem. Really like the concept. Like the ending where you seemed to desire leaving an impression behind, hopefully one that is satisfying, showing a life well spent.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Thank you very much for your compliments and this review. It think in the end, that is the only thing that we leave behind. Mike
Comment from quashdog
We all hope to find meaning in life in general and our own life in particular. Your poem speaks for many a soul that seeks to be one with God and hopes that the life lived on this Earth is worthy of God's promise of a resurrection. Really nice, I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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We all hope to find meaning in life in general and our own life in particular. Your poem speaks for many a soul that seeks to be one with God and hopes that the life lived on this Earth is worthy of God's promise of a resurrection. Really nice, I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Mike ....
I have read and reviewed this as free-thought writing and, as such - coupled with your Notes at the end - it appears to be a fitting end to your biography.
There is just one small change to recommend ...
* You have - A few, fear cloaked, squander good use of time. I suggest - A few, fear-cloaked, squander ...
I wish you well with whatever you plan to do with your biography.
Love from ..... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Hullo Mike ....
I have read and reviewed this as free-thought writing and, as such - coupled with your Notes at the end - it appears to be a fitting end to your biography.
There is just one small change to recommend ...
* You have - A few, fear cloaked, squander good use of time. I suggest - A few, fear-cloaked, squander ...
I wish you well with whatever you plan to do with your biography.
Love from ..... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Thank you very much for your compliments, suggestion and this review. Mike
Comment from mermaids
"Carried to heaven upon eagle's wing" is a beautiful image that makes the reader feel good. You bring up some imporatnt points about life here. Excellent rhyme and flow of words here. No revisions needed.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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"Carried to heaven upon eagle's wing" is a beautiful image that makes the reader feel good. You bring up some imporatnt points about life here. Excellent rhyme and flow of words here. No revisions needed.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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I really appreciate this review and thank you for it and your compliments. Mike
Comment from Charles Dale
Beyond the realm of hope is healing, Life is but a vapor soon to dissipate into eon.
We came from the Father we go back into the Father.And in Him dwells many places. I hope He can use your fossils tracks for his Glory.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Beyond the realm of hope is healing, Life is but a vapor soon to dissipate into eon.
We came from the Father we go back into the Father.And in Him dwells many places. I hope He can use your fossils tracks for his Glory.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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I like this review and thank you for it. I think He is presently using my bones. Or, at least trying to. Mike
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Keep the faith
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Always!
Comment from Gracie619
Very impressive and quite the reminder for us all. This is incredibly well written and it makes me want to print it and hang it in my cubicle at work for those days I need to reread this. Great work!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Very impressive and quite the reminder for us all. This is incredibly well written and it makes me want to print it and hang it in my cubicle at work for those days I need to reread this. Great work!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Fell free to do so, as that is the best use of my words. I had several poems hung at work. Have a great week ahead! Mike
Comment from connied
I agree with your message and particularly like the last stanza
I hope my footprints fossilize in clay;
pleasing God... Found to be needed one day.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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I agree with your message and particularly like the last stanza
I hope my footprints fossilize in clay;
pleasing God... Found to be needed one day.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Thank you for sharing you favorite line and also for this very complimentative review. Mike
Comment from Pen&Ink
This is very well done, Mike. An interesting perspective on life's journey. I found the following verse to be most relevant to me...
Some people lose their life before their prime;
others, dedicate their lives for others.
A few, fear cloaked, squander good use of time;
a precious few live life without a bother.
Very interesting.
Ray
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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This is very well done, Mike. An interesting perspective on life's journey. I found the following verse to be most relevant to me...
Some people lose their life before their prime;
others, dedicate their lives for others.
A few, fear cloaked, squander good use of time;
a precious few live life without a bother.
Very interesting.
Ray
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Thank you very much for sharing your favorite lines, it's always nice to know what people get out of it. Thank you very much for reviewing the poem and for your compliments. Mike
Comment from shy1250
Sweet analogy--don't think those with 'sly sprint' are going to have any pleasant surprises, but what do I know? I love God, but understand? I wish... I found the 3d stanza a bit rough on the tongue: maybe "Sent aloft upon an eagle's wings/ footprints are of all import to them/as Heaven's gate does open, angels sing/though not of dashed sly sprints that leave a hem" Just a thought--a great read! Thanks for writing--later and God bless, shy
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Sweet analogy--don't think those with 'sly sprint' are going to have any pleasant surprises, but what do I know? I love God, but understand? I wish... I found the 3d stanza a bit rough on the tongue: maybe "Sent aloft upon an eagle's wings/ footprints are of all import to them/as Heaven's gate does open, angels sing/though not of dashed sly sprints that leave a hem" Just a thought--a great read! Thanks for writing--later and God bless, shy
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Thank you very much for this review and the compliments. I sort of wanted to challenge people's minds about how they think about "Sent Aloft Upon Eagle's Wings and Footprints," without being disrespectful, as I enjoy both. Enjoy the week ahead! Mike
