Ice Skating
Ampeletum15 total reviews
Comment from 11:17
Wow, an ampeletum seems so difficult, yet you pulled it off so well! I love the imagery in your writing! This makes me wish I could ice skate!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Wow, an ampeletum seems so difficult, yet you pulled it off so well! I love the imagery in your writing! This makes me wish I could ice skate!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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I used to roller skate and play roller hockey as did my son. It was great quality time and interest to spend with him! Debbie
Comment from S.Yocom
I like your depiction of the graceful skater, dejohnsrld. However, I felt that I had to give you a four because your rhyme scheme does not follow the rules for the ampeletum in stanzas 2 and 3. You still have plenty of time to rework it for the contest. Good luck.
Sally
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I like your depiction of the graceful skater, dejohnsrld. However, I felt that I had to give you a four because your rhyme scheme does not follow the rules for the ampeletum in stanzas 2 and 3. You still have plenty of time to rework it for the contest. Good luck.
Sally
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Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I will relook at those stanzas. Debbie
Comment from vtsfic
What a beautiful poem! I love how you incorporate action throughout the piece, causing us to see in our minds, the skater and his/her impact on surroundings. This poem has a lot of rhythm and imagery to it. Nicely done.
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What a beautiful poem! I love how you incorporate action throughout the piece, causing us to see in our minds, the skater and his/her impact on surroundings. This poem has a lot of rhythm and imagery to it. Nicely done.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I just love to watch skating! Debbie
Comment from adewpearl
skates stroke ice with success - wonderful alliteration and consonance
Wonderful descriptive detail - I have been a huge fan of figure skating since a little kid watching it on wide world of sports and you really recreate the atmosphere so well, Deb.
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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skates stroke ice with success - wonderful alliteration and consonance
Wonderful descriptive detail - I have been a huge fan of figure skating since a little kid watching it on wide world of sports and you really recreate the atmosphere so well, Deb.
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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To me watching ice skating is better than Christmas! Thank you for the kind review Brooke. Debbie
Comment from Jnetgame
This is a very nice poem about ice skating. I'm not a skater myself, but from what I know of the sport you have described it well. Thands for sharing this.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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This is a very nice poem about ice skating. I'm not a skater myself, but from what I know of the sport you have described it well. Thands for sharing this.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Thank you for the kind review! Debbie
Comment from sasil
Good "moral of the story" in this poetic style. Lots of vivid imagery and universal truth. I liked the rhymed lines and words you chose, switching up a bit the old adage "practice makes perfect".
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Good "moral of the story" in this poetic style. Lots of vivid imagery and universal truth. I liked the rhymed lines and words you chose, switching up a bit the old adage "practice makes perfect".
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Thank you for the kind review! Debbie
Comment from Artasylum
being born and reared in warm climates i have never had the pleasure of flying like the wind over an icy surface... lucky you... your, diana
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being born and reared in warm climates i have never had the pleasure of flying like the wind over an icy surface... lucky you... your, diana
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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It is one of the most graceful and entertaining things to do here in snow country.! Debbie
Comment from bowls
Now, you make this look so easy. I tried writing one - for weeks - and finally just tossed it in the garbage. Your poem has the smoothness of a sheet of ice. The alternating rhyme suggests the alternating feet of the skater gliding across the ice surface. Your imagery creates a lovely, graceful picture. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Now, you make this look so easy. I tried writing one - for weeks - and finally just tossed it in the garbage. Your poem has the smoothness of a sheet of ice. The alternating rhyme suggests the alternating feet of the skater gliding across the ice surface. Your imagery creates a lovely, graceful picture. Nicely done.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Thank you for the very kind review! Debbie
Comment from Paula Andrea Pyle
Indeed, does not the perfecting of the grace, form, exactude and proportionate balance require so many years of unimagingiable practice?
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Indeed, does not the perfecting of the grace, form, exactude and proportionate balance require so many years of unimagingiable practice?
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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It certainly does. It takes so much dedication for the child but also the whole family. Thank you for your review! Debbie
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indeed.
Comment from Ann Smith
This is a beautiful poem about an elegant sport. I can see the skaters through the details and images you portray. Thank you for the info about the form. There are no wasted words. ann
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This is a beautiful poem about an elegant sport. I can see the skaters through the details and images you portray. Thank you for the info about the form. There are no wasted words. ann
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Thank you so much for the 6 stars. I watched skating last night and then penned this poem. It was difficult as poetry limits the words that can be used.I am thinking about a non-fiction to allow more of the details to be told. Thanks again! Debbie
