Nessie's Night
A fantasy Visit to Loch Ness17 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Helvi2 Your rhyming pattern is well done.
I love the tales of the monsters of the sea
But your sea monster Old Nessie was so real and yes a real pleasure to read your entry.
Gert
Hello Helvi2 Your rhyming pattern is well done.
I love the tales of the monsters of the sea
But your sea monster Old Nessie was so real and yes a real pleasure to read your entry.
Gert
Comment Written 20-Jan-2011
Comment from Judian James
Bravo on all of it. The illustration is magical and your words are wondrous. This would make a marvelous children's book, N!!
"My feet flew to the poop deck fast
To get an awesome peek
My curiosity was strong
For what I sought to seek" I loved it all, but this verse was so cleverly wrought. Yes, Bravo again!
Bravo on all of it. The illustration is magical and your words are wondrous. This would make a marvelous children's book, N!!
"My feet flew to the poop deck fast
To get an awesome peek
My curiosity was strong
For what I sought to seek" I loved it all, but this verse was so cleverly wrought. Yes, Bravo again!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2011
Comment from the blue pixel
I don't think that there is any doubt whsoever about who is the monster. Humankind, or Nessie. The quatrain form of poetry along with your perfect rhyme and perfect metre, was the right format in which to tell your delifhtful little story. Long my nessie reign and I believe, that she always will, just as long as we have imagaination.s The Blue Pixel
I don't think that there is any doubt whsoever about who is the monster. Humankind, or Nessie. The quatrain form of poetry along with your perfect rhyme and perfect metre, was the right format in which to tell your delifhtful little story. Long my nessie reign and I believe, that she always will, just as long as we have imagaination.s The Blue Pixel
Comment Written 19-Jan-2011
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hi sweet Nancy.
This is an incredible little poem about Nessy. Long have folks became intimate with her, and it appears you have found fer favorite things.
Surrounded by her so called friends
She'd make a dive or two
Then jumped beyond the stars themselves
To crash in whoop-de-do
I love the whoop-de-do
Bear
Hi sweet Nancy.
This is an incredible little poem about Nessy. Long have folks became intimate with her, and it appears you have found fer favorite things.
Surrounded by her so called friends
She'd make a dive or two
Then jumped beyond the stars themselves
To crash in whoop-de-do
I love the whoop-de-do
Bear
Comment Written 19-Jan-2011
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this poem about the Loch Ness monster, i enjoyed reading it and liked your ending asking if she or man was the monster, i wish you the best of luck in the contest
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this poem about the Loch Ness monster, i enjoyed reading it and liked your ending asking if she or man was the monster, i wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Helvi. How are you doing? Nice poem you have here. Do you really believe in Nessie, by the way? Some do.
I liked the construction of your poem. Especially this stanza:
"Upon a night when stars were bright
This monster of the deep
Breached the sea from depths below
And woke me from my sleep"
Has a little flavor of poems like "The Night Before Christmas" to it.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
Hi, Helvi. How are you doing? Nice poem you have here. Do you really believe in Nessie, by the way? Some do.
I liked the construction of your poem. Especially this stanza:
"Upon a night when stars were bright
This monster of the deep
Breached the sea from depths below
And woke me from my sleep"
Has a little flavor of poems like "The Night Before Christmas" to it.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
Hi Bob,
It's always nice to hear from you. Today was not a bad day at all, wish they all could be that way.
My mind is totally open to the possibility that Nessie could exist. There are so many things in the world we are still discovering.
I'm glad you enjoyed my Nessie poem. You're such a great writer it really is an honor getting a great review from you. Thank you so much!
Hugs and Smiles,
Helvi
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XXX000 Bob
Comment from l.raven
This is very nicely written.I enjoyed the story.It has a good flow to it. And good rhythm and rhyme.And the picture is perfect.I have read a lot on the Lock Ness monster.I don't know if it's true or not.But it doesn't hurt to believe.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
This is very nicely written.I enjoyed the story.It has a good flow to it. And good rhythm and rhyme.And the picture is perfect.I have read a lot on the Lock Ness monster.I don't know if it's true or not.But it doesn't hurt to believe.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Hi I.raven, Glad you enjoyed the story. I don't know if the Loch Ness Monster exists either, but my mind is open to the possibility. Thank you for the wonderful review. :o) Helvi
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Helvi
I really enjoyed your fantasy poem visit to Loch Ness. I should think kids especially would love this story. Good luck in the contest.
My favorite lines,
"A dragon rose before my eyes
with dolphins by her side"
One line that I would work on some more,
"and those green scales of awe"
A great read, and I hope you do well in the voting booths.
Kimbob
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
Hi Helvi
I really enjoyed your fantasy poem visit to Loch Ness. I should think kids especially would love this story. Good luck in the contest.
My favorite lines,
"A dragon rose before my eyes
with dolphins by her side"
One line that I would work on some more,
"and those green scales of awe"
A great read, and I hope you do well in the voting booths.
Kimbob
Comment Written 17-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Thanks Kimbob, I'm so glad you enjoyed this. I love to write things that brighten the spirit, I'll see if I can come up with something better for that line. Thanks for pointing out places you think I need to work on. Your advice is appreciated. Hugs and Smiles, Helvi
Comment from JennieClare
Great artwork and story in a poem about the famous Loch Ness Monster 'Nessie'. The poem has great meter and unforced rhyme. yes - who is the monster! All the best in the contest. JennieClare
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
Great artwork and story in a poem about the famous Loch Ness Monster 'Nessie'. The poem has great meter and unforced rhyme. yes - who is the monster! All the best in the contest. JennieClare
Comment Written 17-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Thank you Jennie, This poem was a lot of fun to write. I saw the figure of Nessie in a garden shop. She was made of moss and succulent plants. She was the catalyst for creating the picture and the story. It's amazing where your muse can take you. I really appreciate your review and am thrilled you enjoyed my poetic jaunt with Nessie. Hugs and Smiles, Helvi
Comment from adewpearl
a dragon with dolphins by her side - what a wonderfully glorious visual this conjures up in my imagination, Helvi :-)
Rings of fire, like hoops where they do loop-de-loops - another great visual and what a fun rhyme
I just love Nessie, the frisky dragon
This is a fantastic story poem with steady cadence and strong abcb rhyming - it sounds great read aloud as a good story poem should - wonderful!!! :-)
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
a dragon with dolphins by her side - what a wonderfully glorious visual this conjures up in my imagination, Helvi :-)
Rings of fire, like hoops where they do loop-de-loops - another great visual and what a fun rhyme
I just love Nessie, the frisky dragon
This is a fantastic story poem with steady cadence and strong abcb rhyming - it sounds great read aloud as a good story poem should - wonderful!!! :-)
Comment Written 17-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Thanks my friend! Compliments from you are highly cherished. I'm so glad you enjoyed this and am honored by your kind remarks. Thank you so much for the wonderful review. Smiles and Hugs, Helvi