Rose-Colored Glasses
Helen Keller is admired for her achievements26 total reviews
Comment from Veekz
I think this is a great contest entry, very unique and individual :) I used to live next door to a blind girl called Jess, who is still a very good friends to this day, and she amazed me then and still does to this day. She has a computer all set up, she travels to Ausi to met up with her b/f by herself every few months, she's a trained and very talented masseuse... the list goes on! I think you've captured it well with your last line:
"I only walked three days in their shoes, but I know that they are the ones to whom the rose-colored glasses belong. Because they do not limit themselves, they exude courage and ambition to move forward and attain their goals. "
Absolutely agree with that! :):)
Good luck in the contest :)
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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I think this is a great contest entry, very unique and individual :) I used to live next door to a blind girl called Jess, who is still a very good friends to this day, and she amazed me then and still does to this day. She has a computer all set up, she travels to Ausi to met up with her b/f by herself every few months, she's a trained and very talented masseuse... the list goes on! I think you've captured it well with your last line:
"I only walked three days in their shoes, but I know that they are the ones to whom the rose-colored glasses belong. Because they do not limit themselves, they exude courage and ambition to move forward and attain their goals. "
Absolutely agree with that! :):)
Good luck in the contest :)
Comment Written 17-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Thanks for the great review and kind comments. I didn't do well in the contest, but there were many tough contenders.
Comment from The Stranger
well I was engrossed from the first to the last line, an interesting story which lends itself to the good standard in which it has been presented
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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well I was engrossed from the first to the last line, an interesting story which lends itself to the good standard in which it has been presented
Comment Written 17-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Thank you, Stranger. I appreciate your stars and comments.
Comment from warbler
This is a wonderful story that I enjoyed reading. I once owned a sun lamp and I too discarded it. I was impressed with all of the lessons learned. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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This is a wonderful story that I enjoyed reading. I once owned a sun lamp and I too discarded it. I was impressed with all of the lessons learned. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Thanks for the review.
Comment from bluerose675
Hi,
I really enjoyed reading this and admire the determination you had for those few days. Most people would've used it as an excuse not to do anything. Good on you!!! I love the Helen Keller story too - one of my favourites. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers,
Norma :)
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Hi,
I really enjoyed reading this and admire the determination you had for those few days. Most people would've used it as an excuse not to do anything. Good on you!!! I love the Helen Keller story too - one of my favourites. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers,
Norma :)
Comment Written 17-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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Thank you.
Comment from marcii
Yes the blind do very well as do many people with various types of disabilities.
You learnt from this accident and that is the main thing.
Good luck in the contest.
Marcii
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
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Yes the blind do very well as do many people with various types of disabilities.
You learnt from this accident and that is the main thing.
Good luck in the contest.
Marcii
Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from shariannegaylee
Helen Keller would be proud of what you've learned. I hope you won't mind learning a bit more in order to polish your work to a sheen. These are the few things needing a "fix": "Rose-colored" needs a hyphen throughout the story, so does "sun-kissed" and "three-day" as these are all two separate words functioning as ONE adjective; and I feel you should change the verb tense of your last paragraph from past "I was so humbled" to present "I am so humbled" tense throughout it, because don't you still feel that way about the blind and what they go through daily? A very good story with a very good lesson learned!
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
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Helen Keller would be proud of what you've learned. I hope you won't mind learning a bit more in order to polish your work to a sheen. These are the few things needing a "fix": "Rose-colored" needs a hyphen throughout the story, so does "sun-kissed" and "three-day" as these are all two separate words functioning as ONE adjective; and I feel you should change the verb tense of your last paragraph from past "I was so humbled" to present "I am so humbled" tense throughout it, because don't you still feel that way about the blind and what they go through daily? A very good story with a very good lesson learned!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
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Thank you for explaining the "why" of using the present tense of the last paragraph. I have so often mixed tenses and been corrected. This tip came up before, but with no explanation.
Comment from sasil
I admire your careful crafting of this detailed experience with temporary blindness. Glad you ditched the lamp and kept to several routines to serve as a reminder.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
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I admire your careful crafting of this detailed experience with temporary blindness. Glad you ditched the lamp and kept to several routines to serve as a reminder.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
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Thanks for the review and comment.
Comment from ImJLAD
Interesting story here.
You've adapted very well to not having sight. Very quick as it sounds like it.
Good reflection on what it would be like to have no vision.
Thank you for sharing your story and best of luck.
SPAG - Last sentence: not limit themselves,they exuded courage (themselves, they)
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
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Interesting story here.
You've adapted very well to not having sight. Very quick as it sounds like it.
Good reflection on what it would be like to have no vision.
Thank you for sharing your story and best of luck.
SPAG - Last sentence: not limit themselves,they exuded courage (themselves, they)
Comment Written 16-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
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Thanks for the tip and review.
Comment from Fireshadow
This is a terrific entry for the Dealing With Disability writing prompt contest, and it may also be a strong contender in the competition. Those who have visual impairments or blindness seldom wallow in self pity. They just find other ways to achieve their dreams. Good luck in the contest, my friend.
Ama
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2011
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This is a terrific entry for the Dealing With Disability writing prompt contest, and it may also be a strong contender in the competition. Those who have visual impairments or blindness seldom wallow in self pity. They just find other ways to achieve their dreams. Good luck in the contest, my friend.
Ama
Comment Written 15-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2011
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Thank you for the kind remarks and review.
Comment from adewpearl
This is an interesting look at disabilities from the point of view who had a "three day grace period." When I was a young mother, I got a glimpse of what it is like to be wheel-chair bound when I would try to maneuver a stroller through doors and other public places not built to accommodate such kinds of mobility. You use this experience well to reflect on the challenges of disabilities. Brooke
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2011
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This is an interesting look at disabilities from the point of view who had a "three day grace period." When I was a young mother, I got a glimpse of what it is like to be wheel-chair bound when I would try to maneuver a stroller through doors and other public places not built to accommodate such kinds of mobility. You use this experience well to reflect on the challenges of disabilities. Brooke
Comment Written 15-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your comments and the review.
