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A Good Day For Jumping

a song to my father

17 total reviews 
Comment from Just2Write
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This is such a nice tribute poem/song for your dad. I'm sure he was thrilled with it. I am so sorry to hear about his struggle with cancer - It is such a devastating disease. One can really hear to the love pouring out in this poem. Rose.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2011


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2011
    Rose, thank you so much for your kind words and review. I am just so thankful that I was able to sing this to him befoe he died.
Comment from richard7
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In recognition of your Father and his adventurous ways and thrill of life you wrote a really neat song!
The rhyme and flow of the lyrics and meter has a good tune to pick up on and the chorus is catching.
Strength to you and your Dad.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2011


reply by the author on 19-Feb-2011
    thank you so much for your kind review. Blessings, Katie
Comment from Magics02
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You can show us the video and I would love to hear you sing this. This is endearing to me this wonderful writing here and my thoughts and prayers go out to you and your father.

Gods' Blessings always
Magics

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2011


reply by the author on 18-Feb-2011
    Thank you so much. I appreciate your very kind words.
reply by Magics02 on 19-Feb-2011
    You are so very welcome friend Katie
Comment from swosugrad09
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What a beautiful song! I'm sure your father is so proud of you and loves this heart felt write. I am sorry to hear about his condition, please know that your family is in my prayers.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2011


reply by the author on 17-Feb-2011
    Thank you so much for the kind review and prayers. It was a blessing to be able to play and sing it for him. He remembered the story well. Thanks again, Katie
Comment from adewpearl
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My view of dad changed - Dad, since it is used as his name in this context
he loved God, corp - corps
I like the repetition of Semper Fi Marine
Your chorus is most effective
The flow of your poem/lyrics is steady and the rhyming is strong in this poignant tribute to your dad :-) Good luck in the contest :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2011


reply by the author on 17-Feb-2011
    Brooke, thank you. I will make those changes right away. We think my dad has about 24 hours left. I will then sing this at his memorial service. I appreciate your review very much. Blessings, Katie
reply by adewpearl on 17-Feb-2011
    I am so sorry to hear your dad is this close to the end - I will keep you and your family in my thoughts and prayers.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2011
    Thank you. I appreciate the prayers.
Comment from Adri7enne
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Good one. Before I read your notes, I was thinking it would make good song lyrics, with the repeating lines. I remember the months of my father's illness as some of the saddest days in my life. It's a hard idea to accept, the fact that life can go one without Dad. I wish you courage, katie. Time does dull the pain and leads to acceptance. But it's a hard period of growth.
Good luck in the Poem of the Month contest. Congratulations for having your poem chosen for the contest. That's a great honour in itself.
Good job!

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2011


reply by the author on 17-Feb-2011
    Thank you so much. We think he only has 24 hours left so this nomination is amazing. My mom has a nomination too for, "Welcome home". Her poem was for my father too. We are amazed that we were both nominated. Thank you for the review. Blessings, Katie
Comment from percival86jack
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Very touching... very sad... very uplifting! It's all of those things!

So soar on wings like eagles to
God's arms they're open wide
It's a good day for jumping
C'mon let's take a ride

Brings a lump to my throat... love and warm wishes, Jack xxxxxxxxxx

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011
    Thank you so much. I read this to my dad before I sang it to him and cried my way through. Lol. I appreciate your kind review. My dad told me the other day that he may died that day and was looking at me to see if it was ok. I just responded with, so its a good day for jumping huh? He just smiled getting the message. Blessings friend, Katie
Comment from RADIO
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Really enjoyed this and what a wonderful
tribute to your Dad, the Semper Fi Marine.
Surely it's a powerful force in ones life.
I enlisted at 17. Recently one of my sons
turned and , "Thanks for serving Marine."
Gret, great, poem and God be with your dad
and whole family. I'm in treatment myself
but Jesus holds my hand. Semper Fi forever.
Radio

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011
    Radio, my prayers are with you. Thank you for your service! My dad found out too late for treatment, but I am so blessed that he also know Christ. I am not ready to lose him, but God is taking care of the details. I'm glad I was able to write and sing this for him. It's a country piece and his toe was tapping :) Thank you so much for your words and understanding review. Blessings, Katie
Comment from PoesyPoet
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I'm glad in this most difficult time, your dad has the love a wonderful daughter. This for sharing him with the forum. I will pray for your family.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011
    Thank you for your comments. blessings, katie
Comment from Judith Ann
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This is a beautiful poem/song. It tells a great story of a wonderful time in the life of a young girl and her father. Knowing the story makes it all the more impressive. Your author's notes are a good accompaniment to the poem. I particularly like the final stanza. Well done.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011
    Thanks mom, this was hard to post. I didn't want someone to rip it to shreds since it is so personal.