Blowin' In The Wind
On dandelion fluff and wings of dreams23 total reviews
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
Hey, Susan. Awesome work you have here. Yes, the misery of domestic violence and what it does to a child...sad but real. Very good.
Isaiah
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011
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Hey, Susan. Awesome work you have here. Yes, the misery of domestic violence and what it does to a child...sad but real. Very good.
Isaiah
Comment Written 13-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011
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Hi again! Thank you, I am spoiled...I appreciate this Isaiah...happy days to you!! Susan
Comment from Daylok
What a excellent piece of short work, Fighting parents always has an effrect on kids!! I like this work!! Well done!!-Daylok
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011
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What a excellent piece of short work, Fighting parents always has an effrect on kids!! I like this work!! Well done!!-Daylok
Comment Written 13-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2011
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Hi again Day! Bless you...I am spoiled and so appreciate your time for me! Thank you again!! Happy days and happy writing to yoU!! Susan
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Excellent work!! Youre so welcome-Daylok
Comment from Veekz
A book is always the perfect means of escaping, no matter where you seem to be :)
Lucky I signed up to get the notifications otherwise I would have continued to miss out on awesome, poignant pieces such as this one.
As per usual I'm right there with the main character as she climbs out her window and when she's dancing down the driveway :)
A sad yet beautifully written read.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2011
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A book is always the perfect means of escaping, no matter where you seem to be :)
Lucky I signed up to get the notifications otherwise I would have continued to miss out on awesome, poignant pieces such as this one.
As per usual I'm right there with the main character as she climbs out her window and when she's dancing down the driveway :)
A sad yet beautifully written read.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2011
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Hi again! I am happy to have you read for me! I was so sure we had signed up to be each other's fans? How odd, I may be going just nuts. Sit in the sun for me? I wish I could visit you until at least , oh , April?? LOL!! ") Susan
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
Oh I really enjoyed this one! A young girl escaping the fights of her parents (I've been there) I could almost smell the hay, and hear the tiny mewing of the sweet little kittens.. A sad tale, with a peaceful in-between. Just beautifully written. Just ADORE your simple short-stories with SO much to offer. Make a book of em! Betty
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Oh I really enjoyed this one! A young girl escaping the fights of her parents (I've been there) I could almost smell the hay, and hear the tiny mewing of the sweet little kittens.. A sad tale, with a peaceful in-between. Just beautifully written. Just ADORE your simple short-stories with SO much to offer. Make a book of em! Betty
Comment Written 11-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Hi Betty! What an encouraging review. I may do this someday? I just don't have much confidence really. I just love to please and your review has made me so happy. Bless your heart for reading this for me! Thank you again! HUG! Susan
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These are not empty words. You do have a flair and a great talent for putting this interesting short stories together. Not many can do this. Your writings never disappoint me. Betty
Comment from missy98writer
Susan,
your flash fiction story is very written and the imagery is great. In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. The poor little girl went into a fantasy world to drown out the screams of her father abusing her mother. What a wonderful written story about a girl escaping reality for fantasy. Abuse of any kind effects a child. Her mother should get out and take her with her because an abuser rarely changes their spots without help or acknowledging they are abusive. Keep up the excellent flash fiction writing.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2011
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Susan,
your flash fiction story is very written and the imagery is great. In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. The poor little girl went into a fantasy world to drown out the screams of her father abusing her mother. What a wonderful written story about a girl escaping reality for fantasy. Abuse of any kind effects a child. Her mother should get out and take her with her because an abuser rarely changes their spots without help or acknowledging they are abusive. Keep up the excellent flash fiction writing.
Melissa.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2011
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Hi Melissa! Thank you again! How right your observation is...I used to "hide" in the apple tree when mom and dad argued. I didn't like it and didn't want to see it. I would then get sick eating green apples while I read my books. I also took kittens up there and they would play and climb, one fell one day and I felt bad. It was okay, but I stopped taking them up the tree with me. ") thank you for this review my friend...xoxo. Susan
Comment from Judy Swanson
Susan, I love this one. It rings so true of the fantasy escape young girls might think of. Your words draw the reader in wonderfully...screams, thud, chaos, misery... escape. And then, just as quickly, the mood changes with words like sanctuary, lilting voice, soft and comforting.
The line "...breeze carried the fluff of the dandelions on its wings like a faerie's pony," is simply wonderful, and provides great imagery.
One question - the last paragraph is appropriately written in present tense, all except for the final word "grew." I'm wondering if it should be "grow." Just a thought.
Nicely done flash fiction, my friend.
Judy
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2011
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Susan, I love this one. It rings so true of the fantasy escape young girls might think of. Your words draw the reader in wonderfully...screams, thud, chaos, misery... escape. And then, just as quickly, the mood changes with words like sanctuary, lilting voice, soft and comforting.
The line "...breeze carried the fluff of the dandelions on its wings like a faerie's pony," is simply wonderful, and provides great imagery.
One question - the last paragraph is appropriately written in present tense, all except for the final word "grew." I'm wondering if it should be "grow." Just a thought.
Nicely done flash fiction, my friend.
Judy
Comment Written 11-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2011
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Oh dearest Judy. What a true honor. To have you think so of my work, is just the best feeling. I have such depression at times, and to have you here is a blessing. I will look too at the paragraph and see what I need to do also! Thank you!! What a great help! I love it. and YOU. Susan
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You are so welcome. Always a pleasure. Judy
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Yes, that's the way it works, if one is lucky. I remember sitting so still I would tremble; terrified to breathe because I might call attention to myself and "deserve" another beating.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2011
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Yes, that's the way it works, if one is lucky. I remember sitting so still I would tremble; terrified to breathe because I might call attention to myself and "deserve" another beating.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2011
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Hi Nancy! Oh I am so sorry. I got cut down and yelled at more. But things happen and I still try to just forgive. But it's there. I sure hope you are safe and happy now. HUGS!! Susan
Comment from Fireshadow
Susan, this is a beautiful, very well penned short story (flash fiction? - I don't know the difference ! LOL) . Loved the imagery you used and, especially, how you always incorporate animals and their healing, soothing powers in your stories, including the kittens in this one. Very well done, my dear friend.
Ama
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2011
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Susan, this is a beautiful, very well penned short story (flash fiction? - I don't know the difference ! LOL) . Loved the imagery you used and, especially, how you always incorporate animals and their healing, soothing powers in your stories, including the kittens in this one. Very well done, my dear friend.
Ama
Comment Written 11-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2011
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Dear Ama!! Thank you...No, this is just a short story? The fancy words disqualify it for flash. So I was told anyway. Flash is sort of "jarring" to me. But a challenge. I hope you are warm on this gray day...I am honored to have you as a fan and friend Ama...xoxo. Susan
Comment from Dave M
Susan,
Sometimes, there's no other way to cope. I enjoyed reading this post and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Susan,
Sometimes, there's no other way to cope. I enjoyed reading this post and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 10-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2011
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Hi Dave! Thank you very much!! This is a special one for me, and your review means a lot! Thank you again!! KEEP WARM??? Hope you aren't getting too much snow... ") Susan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Domestic violence is such a horror. I wish more could be done about it. It cycles and I doubt there's anyway we can put and end to it.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2011
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Domestic violence is such a horror. I wish more could be done about it. It cycles and I doubt there's anyway we can put and end to it.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2011
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Hi Barbara! Yes, and it seems to propagate within families? And varies in intensity. I think a lot of it is financial stress and societies demands in general? I don't know. But thank you for taking time to review for me! I hope your ears are not as cold as mine! Geez. ") Susan
