Daisies and Dragonflies
A young cowboy goes for a ride22 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
This is a charming little story that in spite of the limited use of word presents a story with a problem to solve, success and grand adventure and a nice conclusion with the little guy having a birthday present for his mom. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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This is a charming little story that in spite of the limited use of word presents a story with a problem to solve, success and grand adventure and a nice conclusion with the little guy having a birthday present for his mom. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Hi there! Thank you Beth! We had the word limit, I may continue this...we'll see. I am honored to have you review this for me! KEEP warm! ")
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This is an excellent piece of flash fiction. It is well written, well edited, and your opening paragraph captures the readers interest and continues through out
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This is an excellent piece of flash fiction. It is well written, well edited, and your opening paragraph captures the readers interest and continues through out
Comment Written 08-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Hi there! Thank you for reading and taking time to review too! I am so happy you liked this little story...
Comment from Dusty Traveler
Nice story. I do realize it is hard to keep to such a short word limit. The picture fit the story.
This story would fit well with younger children. Perhaps you could expand it a little for a children's book?
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Nice story. I do realize it is hard to keep to such a short word limit. The picture fit the story.
This story would fit well with younger children. Perhaps you could expand it a little for a children's book?
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Hi there! Oh please let me know why the lower rating? I will take your ideas seriously! ? Thank you for reading for me anyway!
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I guess because the story did not grab ME. It seemed a little too simple. Going back and reviewing my comments and your story, I upgraded it. I guess I was tired and not thinking critically.
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Hi Dusty! Thanks, but I just wondered. SO sorry if this wasn't what you enjoy...I do appreciate your input, I get tired too, it's hard to keep up at times. Seems time gets away from us. I appreciate your consideration Dusty. I really do. Susan
Comment from mumsyone
Cute story! Nothing more touching for a mother than to get a bouquet of flowers from a child's hand. I enjoyed reading your story.
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Cute story! Nothing more touching for a mother than to get a bouquet of flowers from a child's hand. I enjoyed reading your story.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Hi Mumsy! Thank you! I'm honored to have you read this and also to reveiw it for me. It's lovely to hear from you!
Comment from shariannegaylee
Well done, liked that the "littlest cowboy" was smart enough to coerce--better as coaxed--the horse with an apple to get the bridle on. Only thing is, if the cowboy's as little as in the great picture you found to go with, then I don't see him being able to bridle a horse yet. Maybe I'm wrong...Very cute story, nonetheless.
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Well done, liked that the "littlest cowboy" was smart enough to coerce--better as coaxed--the horse with an apple to get the bridle on. Only thing is, if the cowboy's as little as in the great picture you found to go with, then I don't see him being able to bridle a horse yet. Maybe I'm wrong...Very cute story, nonetheless.
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Comment Written 08-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Hi there, thanks! This was just the best picture I could find...he is little. But my son could do it when he was around four, so I don't know. I will see about changing coerced? I appreciate your input!
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
I seldom read the prose on this site, but I'm very impressed with this! Whoever you are, you're an excellent writer. In nothing flat, I was into this little character, and I love the touching happy ending. Best wishes, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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I seldom read the prose on this site, but I'm very impressed with this! Whoever you are, you're an excellent writer. In nothing flat, I was into this little character, and I love the touching happy ending. Best wishes, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 08-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Hi Jeanie! Thank you. I sure hope you will vote, there are LOTS of good entries! You don't have to enter the contest to vote? I am pretty sure...don't think people realize that. Thank you again Jeanie! ")
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I think you're right that some people do not realize that anyone on the site can vote. (I have already voted, and I voted for yours; I hope you win!) Best regards, Jeanie
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Why thank you dear heart! I am grateful and more than that, just happy you liked it so. I liked all the entries! All of them were so imaginative and fun to read! Bless you Jeanie. Hug for you...susan
Comment from R. J. Stewart
Great little story. I like the bond between the boy and horse. It reminded me of a time in the wild west, or Little House On The Parrie. You showed a true connection between man and animal, a bond formed over years between boy and horse, and an intelligence from the horse, an almost sentimental, psychic-bond between the characters. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Great little story. I like the bond between the boy and horse. It reminded me of a time in the wild west, or Little House On The Parrie. You showed a true connection between man and animal, a bond formed over years between boy and horse, and an intelligence from the horse, an almost sentimental, psychic-bond between the characters. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Hi Roberta! Thank you for an encouraging and kind review...I am pleased you liked this attempt...
Comment from marcii
What a delightful story you have told in so few words, really good.
The little cowboy was so determined to ride and get them flowers for his Mommy's birthday........sweet ending.
Good luck in the contest.
Marcii
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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What a delightful story you have told in so few words, really good.
The little cowboy was so determined to ride and get them flowers for his Mommy's birthday........sweet ending.
Good luck in the contest.
Marcii
Comment Written 08-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Hi Marcii! Thank you, hope you will vote! There are LOTS of great entries! I couldn't decide! Thanks for this great and kind review...I do appreciate! Susan
Comment from sweetwoodjax
awe, that is so cute, i really enjoyed reading this short flash fiction about the little cowboy and the old mare, i enjoyed reading it and wish you the best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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awe, that is so cute, i really enjoyed reading this short flash fiction about the little cowboy and the old mare, i enjoyed reading it and wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 08-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Hi there! Thank you! I hope you take time to vote, LOTS of good entries, I had a time deciding! ") Thanks Sweet!!
Comment from misscookie
I not only love the photo but love the story
I love how the horse made sure the little boy didn't get hurt. And there is message within this story..
Becareful what you do around your children because they will copy you.
this is a good write. how I miss this one.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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I not only love the photo but love the story
I love how the horse made sure the little boy didn't get hurt. And there is message within this story..
Becareful what you do around your children because they will copy you.
this is a good write. how I miss this one.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2011
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Oh thank you Cookie! SOOo glad you liked this...a fun and charming one to do...HUG!
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I liked it very much it wasn't scary if it was I don't think I could read it specially at night. I misspelled a word when I was going to correct it my computer jumped the word was being in another message i think. this time I knew the spelling was wrong ( smile )
