Mt. St. Marriage
a satire on wives and the institution of marriage23 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
Sadly, there are many similar situations throughout the world. Many wives are forced to comply due to standards set before them. But most, knowing they are the stronger entity, sacrifice themselves for what they've been programmed to believe is the good of their family. Family is togetherness and unity, not control. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Sadly, there are many similar situations throughout the world. Many wives are forced to comply due to standards set before them. But most, knowing they are the stronger entity, sacrifice themselves for what they've been programmed to believe is the good of their family. Family is togetherness and unity, not control. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much! I agree that marriage should be about unity and a partnership rather than one person ruling over another.
Comment from papa55mike
Well, I think my wife is happy, but maybe I should ask her. We've been together 47 years, and yes, it's been a struggle, but we still love each other, tremendously. I see the reason for your story, though. There are too many loveless marriages. What a wonderfully written piece. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Well, I think my wife is happy, but maybe I should ask her. We've been together 47 years, and yes, it's been a struggle, but we still love each other, tremendously. I see the reason for your story, though. There are too many loveless marriages. What a wonderfully written piece. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 05-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Thank you for your review! I'm sure your wife is very happy. Congratulations on 47 years! That is awesome!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You are so right here, women do almost anything to keep the family from falling apart and allow all sorts of transgressions in order to keep the unit together. This is the dedication of a Mother as she sacrifices her own life for the sake of the family. Those who break away and stick up for themselves often fall victim to much criticism. A poignant post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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You are so right here, women do almost anything to keep the family from falling apart and allow all sorts of transgressions in order to keep the unit together. This is the dedication of a Mother as she sacrifices her own life for the sake of the family. Those who break away and stick up for themselves often fall victim to much criticism. A poignant post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much! Yes, this is still all too common. I've never written satire before. I'm so glad my message came through.
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
I had to check you out after you gave me two sweet reviews. You are amazing girl. I only had time to read one and so glad I picked this one for now. WAY TO GO, and you are amazing. I don't know if anything has changed since this wonderful post, but where were you all the times I could have used a friend? LOL
Hey, I will be married fifty years in May, so life hasn't always been a bed of roses.
This was fun and serious and you don't have to go far to find someone to relate.
I noticed that your birthday is coming up this month. I don't know if you saw any of my tribute poems I do for reviewer friends, but as far as I am concerned you already are one. So if you are interested in one, let me know and we will talk.
Thanks for the awesome read! And welcome back! Love, Debi
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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I had to check you out after you gave me two sweet reviews. You are amazing girl. I only had time to read one and so glad I picked this one for now. WAY TO GO, and you are amazing. I don't know if anything has changed since this wonderful post, but where were you all the times I could have used a friend? LOL
Hey, I will be married fifty years in May, so life hasn't always been a bed of roses.
This was fun and serious and you don't have to go far to find someone to relate.
I noticed that your birthday is coming up this month. I don't know if you saw any of my tribute poems I do for reviewer friends, but as far as I am concerned you already are one. So if you are interested in one, let me know and we will talk.
Thanks for the awesome read! And welcome back! Love, Debi
Comment Written 05-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging words. Wow! Fifty years married is rare to find these days. I wrote this satire in the midst of feeling miserable and trapped in an unhappy marriage. The guilt I felt at not being happy and wanting out was deep and painful.
Sure, a tribute poem sounds like fun! Thank you so very much! I appreciate it.
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That is awesome. And I just want to clarify what I meant on your review should have been a but instead of a so, where I said life hasn't always been a bed of roses. I just noticed how that sounded.
Anyway, would you mind if I asked you your name. If feels weird calling you 11:17, even tho if you choose not to tell me, I will be ok. Next could you send me a little information about yourself. Only as much as you would like to share. And with you seeming to be pretty new, it would be a great way to get more people to know you...
Thanks again and I did love your story. I hope you are happy now!
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Thank you! My name is Deanna. I'll tell you a little bit about myself. I hope this is helpful. I have a little senior chihuahua named BB that I rescued in 2020. She has been so good for me. We go lots of places together. She's my little best friend and a big part of my life. I have two grown daughters that I love and I'm very close to. The year 2019 was difficult for me because at the end of the year my mom passed away and my husband left me. So, 2020 was a year of grieving and personal growth. After my husband left me, I swore off romantic love. I wouldn't listen to love songs or watch romance movies. I just didn't believe in it anymore. Finally, I healed and felt happy and whole again. I was so happy being single. Really great friends helped me through it all. I met a man in 2023 and have, to my surprise, fallen in love again. He's very good to me. He's strong, kind, gentle, compassionate and intelligent. I am a middle school reading teacher. I've taught for 26 years. I love the kids and hope to make a positive impact on their lives. I am also a belly dance performer and have performed at parties, festivals, restaurants, and Vaudeville style theater shows. I love the way I feel when expressing myself to music. It is very soulful. It's feels great to bring joy to people through dance. I'm very spiritual and believe in signs, symbols, and dreams will come from the Universe. Many times I have received a sign at just the right time.
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Hi Deanna, thank you so much and I appreciate your awesome material. I hope you didn't give me anything you didn't want to share. Yours will be a double welcome/birthday poem
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I'm okay with everything I shared with you. The only thing I left out is that horses have always been a big part of my life. Sadly, I had to sell my beloved horses when I got divorced. I still dream about them from time to time.
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Ok, and I meant to tell you how happy I am that you found happiness again. And also, is it a secret about what 11:17 stands for. Hopefully a happy time?
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Well, 11:17 appeared to me in a dream with a black cat. The black cats eyes were a glowing 11 and laying open in front of it's paws was a book with a large glowing number 17 on the pages. Then, I started to see 11:17 all around me. It is still a mystery to me at what it exactly means. The dream was not the average dream. It was what I call a "Big Dream" that carries a message. I still see 11:17 frequently.
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This is awesome. Do I have your permission to touch on this in your poem?
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Oh, yes. I was raised a Southern Baptist, though we weren't in church constantly. However, looking back, I have always been spiritual. As I got older, I embraced this.
Comment from bowls
I think you have captured it very well in this piece. Yes, that nasty little man is saying it all. I like the whole volcano concept. It's really appropriate. If you had simply written out your thoughts on the subject it wouldn't have been nearly as effective. The imagery here really adds to the effect. Great satire.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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I think you have captured it very well in this piece. Yes, that nasty little man is saying it all. I like the whole volcano concept. It's really appropriate. If you had simply written out your thoughts on the subject it wouldn't have been nearly as effective. The imagery here really adds to the effect. Great satire.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Thank you so much. I am so glad that you enjoyed my writing! Your review just made my day!
Comment from Magics02
A clever satire on marriage and your author notes hit it on a nail.
Guilt and self-deprecation keep many women in bad situations.
Yes and oh so true is that and only when women can finally stand up and leave a bad relationship or marriage will one be able to revive the heart and soul and love again.
You did a great job here with a wild twist:)
Blessings
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2011
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A clever satire on marriage and your author notes hit it on a nail.
Guilt and self-deprecation keep many women in bad situations.
Yes and oh so true is that and only when women can finally stand up and leave a bad relationship or marriage will one be able to revive the heart and soul and love again.
You did a great job here with a wild twist:)
Blessings
Comment Written 29-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2011
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I'm so glad you enjoyed my writing and that you took the time to read my author note. Thank you so much for your review!
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You are so very welcome writer
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You are so very welcome writer
Comment from Rama Rao
It's a good rant. I am sure you will get many hurrahs from the women here.As a male, I would like to say what about the man who slogs at his workplace, day in and day out, suffering insufferable bosses and facing all problems just to keep the home fires burning. Poor fellow, he also deserves a word of praise, occasionally. I'd ask them to join these ladies in jumping into the volcano of marriage.
Why not abolish the marriage thing altogether? It will be the end of troubles for everyone.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2011
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It's a good rant. I am sure you will get many hurrahs from the women here.As a male, I would like to say what about the man who slogs at his workplace, day in and day out, suffering insufferable bosses and facing all problems just to keep the home fires burning. Poor fellow, he also deserves a word of praise, occasionally. I'd ask them to join these ladies in jumping into the volcano of marriage.
Why not abolish the marriage thing altogether? It will be the end of troubles for everyone.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2011
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Thank you, Ramarao. Yes, of course, you do have a point about the male who works like crazy to keep the home going. Perhaps, there should a place in line for the husband feeling oppressed by his societal role. I appreciate your review! Thanks!
Comment from joelh605
Not bad; I'd add a comma after "wives" in line 1 ("all you wives" is the kind of thing you bracket fore and aft, but here the aft comma fell into the briny).
As I read your notes this is actually more of an essay, fictionalized into dialog. As fiction it isn't quite there because the speaker remains one-dimensional. He stays portly, etc. and refuses to evolve [ word chosen for effect ]. But as an essay, it makes its point clearly. Bravo.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2011
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Not bad; I'd add a comma after "wives" in line 1 ("all you wives" is the kind of thing you bracket fore and aft, but here the aft comma fell into the briny).
As I read your notes this is actually more of an essay, fictionalized into dialog. As fiction it isn't quite there because the speaker remains one-dimensional. He stays portly, etc. and refuses to evolve [ word chosen for effect ]. But as an essay, it makes its point clearly. Bravo.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2011
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I appreciate your advice and your critique of my writing. I do sometimes have trouble in categorizing my work. Thank you for your review!
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[grin] It's fiction as you said; but you and I and the churchmouse know that, in its heart, it's an ESSAY (but don't tell the parson)
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Thanks, LOL!!
Comment from Nanashirley
I liked the story and the irony. It is sad that truth can be so hurting. The meaning is deep and I enjoyed the read. I only have one thing can you shorten or divide you paragraphs making it easier to read.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2011
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I liked the story and the irony. It is sad that truth can be so hurting. The meaning is deep and I enjoyed the read. I only have one thing can you shorten or divide you paragraphs making it easier to read.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2011
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Thank you so much for your review. Yes, I really should divide this up better. It would make it much more reader friendly. Thank you for the advice!
Comment from KathyH
Very well done, nice tongue in cheek approach to what really happens to some women, a few whom I know personally. The dialogue of the speaker is clever. I really enjoyed this one.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2011
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Very well done, nice tongue in cheek approach to what really happens to some women, a few whom I know personally. The dialogue of the speaker is clever. I really enjoyed this one.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2011
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Thanks so much for your review. I am glad that you enjoyed it! While I was frustrated and "up to here" when I wrote it, it was fun to write.
