Mayflowers and Mud Puddles
A little boy loves his mom27 total reviews
Comment from bowls
This is a really sweet story. I love the character of Christopher (our son's name) and his beautiful personality. The image of that umbrella is delightful. Yes, this story does bring e joy. It brings memories of simpler days when there was total pleasure in the splash of a puddle or the wagging of a dog's tail. Thanks for sharing. Two little corrections: IT'S NEW OWNER should be ITS and DOORNAIL'S should be DOORNAILS.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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This is a really sweet story. I love the character of Christopher (our son's name) and his beautiful personality. The image of that umbrella is delightful. Yes, this story does bring e joy. It brings memories of simpler days when there was total pleasure in the splash of a puddle or the wagging of a dog's tail. Thanks for sharing. Two little corrections: IT'S NEW OWNER should be ITS and DOORNAIL'S should be DOORNAILS.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Hi Fausto! That's neat that your son is Christopher...a favorite name. And I did fix the spags too, what a nice helper you are! Thank you!! I am just thrilled that you liked this...wow. ") Susan
Comment from Trybuck
Well done with this one. Another little story to enjoy reading.
waiting for it's new owner -- apostrophe not needed here - the apostrophe s on it, is the same as saying it is, so if it is doesn't sound right , don't use the apostrophe s.
and he adruptly stopped - abruptly
dead as doornail's -- doornails here are not showing possession, they're just plural
I hope I gave you at least part of what you were looking for, and was helpful.
If I was confusing, just forget everything I said and keep on writing, Buck
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Well done with this one. Another little story to enjoy reading.
waiting for it's new owner -- apostrophe not needed here - the apostrophe s on it, is the same as saying it is, so if it is doesn't sound right , don't use the apostrophe s.
and he adruptly stopped - abruptly
dead as doornail's -- doornails here are not showing possession, they're just plural
I hope I gave you at least part of what you were looking for, and was helpful.
If I was confusing, just forget everything I said and keep on writing, Buck
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Oh thank you!! I will fix these! I just knew I was wrong again...darn it. ") You weren't confusing, I appreciate this help! I really did try to edit it correctly! But, oh...at least you liked this and enjoyed it. Blessings Buck!! Susan
Comment from Jnetgame
What a cute story, Susan. Very different from some of the other pieces of yours I have written. I did find one minor typo:Christopher's yellow boot came close, and he adruptly (abruptly)stopped. Little kids do lose interest in things quickly, don't they.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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What a cute story, Susan. Very different from some of the other pieces of yours I have written. I did find one minor typo:Christopher's yellow boot came close, and he adruptly (abruptly)stopped. Little kids do lose interest in things quickly, don't they.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Hi there! Thank you! I tried to be a bit more upbeat for once.? I am grateful for this help too! I fixed the spaggie. It's real nice to know you liked this. ") Susan
Comment from juliaSjames
Charming, delightful story. Christopher could well become the hero of many similar tales. You posted this as fantasy, but I think it's more a children's story.
I really enjoyed reading.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Charming, delightful story. Christopher could well become the hero of many similar tales. You posted this as fantasy, but I think it's more a children's story.
I really enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Oh, okay, I may change it then? I wasn't sure...thank you very much Julia. I am so glad you liked this...if you smiled just a little, it's what I aimed for. ") Thank you again Julia...Susan
Just loved how you drew us into that magical world of make-believe that was so familiar to us as children.
peace and blessings, julia
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Thank you again...it's all worthwhile then... ") S.
Comment from harleyangelbrat
This is such a sweet story. It is so expressive and descriptive which makes for a wonderful read. I really enjoyed reading this very much. It is an excellent read, God bless you!
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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This is such a sweet story. It is so expressive and descriptive which makes for a wonderful read. I really enjoyed reading this very much. It is an excellent read, God bless you!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Hi Marilyn! Thank you so much! I am thrilled that you enjoyed this. It was meant to make you smile? Blessings to you too, and SO good to hear from you. I hope you are happy and well!! xoxo. Susan
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You're very welcome, Susan. It's good to see you again, too. I hope you have a blessed day. Marilyn
Comment from amada
This is such a lovely story. I liked following Christopher's steps in that rainy and windy day. You paint a lovely picture of a little boy and a young man as well.
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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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This is such a lovely story. I liked following Christopher's steps in that rainy and windy day. You paint a lovely picture of a little boy and a young man as well.
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Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Hi Amada! Thank you, very much! I am so glad you enjoyed this just for fun tale. I just have spring fever, so this was to help me be patient until it gets here...thank you again...hugs! Susan
Comment from The Stranger
this is well prportioned, has good flow to it, the imagery is excellent and it comes together as a very good presentation for the reader to enjoy
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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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this is well prportioned, has good flow to it, the imagery is excellent and it comes together as a very good presentation for the reader to enjoy
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Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Hi there! Thank you for another kind and welcome review Stranger! Your comments are very encouraging and I really appreciate hearing from you! Susan
