Mayflowers and Mud Puddles
A little boy loves his mom27 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is enchanting (an old fashioned
word, I know, but there's no other
word for it) I simply loved it, and
apart from two minor things to check,
it is so well told and presented, I
feel it's deserving of a six. You
are a real natural at these stories,
and should put them together in a
book for children.
machine[,] that would - comma not needed before that
Christopher(')s yellow
It also brought to mind the most beautiful umbrella I had from my first husband for my 19th birthday, which I took with me when visiting an Aunt & Uncle in Newcastle. We all went to a club to dance - and I hooked my umbrella on the washbasin in the ladies room and came out without it, and never saw it again - I actually cried, as I'd only had it two days... and after all, I was only 19.
Margaret
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2011
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This is enchanting (an old fashioned
word, I know, but there's no other
word for it) I simply loved it, and
apart from two minor things to check,
it is so well told and presented, I
feel it's deserving of a six. You
are a real natural at these stories,
and should put them together in a
book for children.
machine[,] that would - comma not needed before that
Christopher(')s yellow
It also brought to mind the most beautiful umbrella I had from my first husband for my 19th birthday, which I took with me when visiting an Aunt & Uncle in Newcastle. We all went to a club to dance - and I hooked my umbrella on the washbasin in the ladies room and came out without it, and never saw it again - I actually cried, as I'd only had it two days... and after all, I was only 19.
Margaret
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2011
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Hi again Margaret! I must thank you again for this lovely review...what a joy to have you like something I write! Maybe you will get another nice umbrella someday?? HUG!! Susan
Comment from Shelson
I am sure you wrote this about me! It's so like my personality as a child it's frightening. I thought you presented this ery well. I will happily read more of your work inthe future.
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I am sure you wrote this about me! It's so like my personality as a child it's frightening. I thought you presented this ery well. I will happily read more of your work inthe future.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2011
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Hi there! That is so neat! Wow...I had to fix some problems, I hope you will read this again? My son is a softie...a good thing, to me. I do thank you so much!! Susan
Comment from anne1204
A beautifully written story of childhood and the secrets thoughts of a child. You did a wonderful job of getting into the mind of a child and relaying his thoughts. I loved this one. Anne
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A beautifully written story of childhood and the secrets thoughts of a child. You did a wonderful job of getting into the mind of a child and relaying his thoughts. I loved this one. Anne
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2011
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Hi Anne!! Thank you so much again!! I am always thrilled to see you like something I do!! What a great fan you are...xoxo. Susan
Comment from sugardog
Hey, Susan!! How are you?? Been a while for me here... I loved this sweet little story. Christopher was a delight to follow on his journey with his umbrella and I enjoyed his imagination. I love the simple pleasures of life through a child's eyes... Nice work. Happy New Year and i hope you are well. Let's hope I remember how to write and can post soon :) Take care friend, Dana
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2011
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Hey, Susan!! How are you?? Been a while for me here... I loved this sweet little story. Christopher was a delight to follow on his journey with his umbrella and I enjoyed his imagination. I love the simple pleasures of life through a child's eyes... Nice work. Happy New Year and i hope you are well. Let's hope I remember how to write and can post soon :) Take care friend, Dana
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2011
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Hi Dana! SO sorry for this late reply...I thank you so much...always. And you will do fine, get back to it young lady! I miss your work and you! ") Luv you! Suse
Comment from BethShelby
This would be a good children's story. The little boy in the picture looks so happy. That is an age where children find pleasure in simple thing and when their imaginations can take them on wonderful journeys. Thanks for sharing and helping me remember when my own children and even I was in that happy innocent age.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2011
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This would be a good children's story. The little boy in the picture looks so happy. That is an age where children find pleasure in simple thing and when their imaginations can take them on wonderful journeys. Thanks for sharing and helping me remember when my own children and even I was in that happy innocent age.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2011
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Hi again Beth! I know, and I loved it when Sam was that age...a real joy. I was always sad...my son was always happy, always. I am so glad you have good memories. Did you see that I wanted the umbrella to sort of be the "main" character? It may be a bit jumbled? ANyway, thank you again! Susan
Comment from bobwhite
This is a delightful story and refreshing to be able to return to the innocence and joy a child finds in his day. I could picture Christopher seeing the frog and all his little thoughts as he carried on. I enjoyed your writing very much and appreciate your soul behind it.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2011
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This is a delightful story and refreshing to be able to return to the innocence and joy a child finds in his day. I could picture Christopher seeing the frog and all his little thoughts as he carried on. I enjoyed your writing very much and appreciate your soul behind it.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2011
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Hi Bob! What a really great review...I am thrilled that you got into this and understood it so. THANK YOU! Great to hear your input!! ") Susan
Comment from misscookie
Love the artwork It goes very well with your write.
I love the movement and the story so cute.
oh to be young again.
this a good write.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2011
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Love the artwork It goes very well with your write.
I love the movement and the story so cute.
oh to be young again.
this a good write.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2011
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Hi Cookie, thank you for being here. Yes, now, when I go thru a mud puddle, it's an aggravation. Little kids think it's neat! ") This is a bit like dancing, well...sort of? ") Susan
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That's okay.
Comment from c_lucas
The exciting lmagnative life of a child brightens a child's day. This reminded me of a juvenile Walter Mitty. Very well written and held my interests.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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The exciting lmagnative life of a child brightens a child's day. This reminded me of a juvenile Walter Mitty. Very well written and held my interests.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Hi Charlie! Was Walter Mitty a baseball player? That name is so familiar. Maybe I'm thinking of Walter Matthau? Oh, I'm so confused. OH, and I found the book! I am going to order it next payday if I can...thank you again C!! Susan
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Walter Mitty is a character created by James Thurber. He was a daydreamer who escaped in his daydreams.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Susan, you have written a beautiful story here about the little boy with the rainbow umbrella. If you wanted to I think you could also turn it into a story for children to read. It flows along very well.
Giddy
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Susan, you have written a beautiful story here about the little boy with the rainbow umbrella. If you wanted to I think you could also turn it into a story for children to read. It flows along very well.
Giddy
Comment Written 04-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Hi Giddy! Thanks, I will consider that? I found my little umbrella that mom had given me...so. Such memories...SOOO long ago. I am super happy you enjoyed this...I love my umbrella. I need to preserve it somehow...but it does have a broken handle. Oh well. ") Susan
Comment from Dave M
Susan,
Apostrophes? I didn't see any out of place. I enjoyed this read and have a couple of other suggestions:
"The rains of spring soaked the winter away and it was on a gray April morning that Christopher first used the umbrella his mother had given him for his seventh birthday." This sentence is very long and contains, IMHO, too many words. I'd write, "The rains of spring soaked the winter away. On a gray April morning Christopher first used the umbrella his mother had given him for his seventh birthday."
"I almost got you, Mr.. (an extra dot should come out) Toad, I'm sorry."
Dave
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Susan,
Apostrophes? I didn't see any out of place. I enjoyed this read and have a couple of other suggestions:
"The rains of spring soaked the winter away and it was on a gray April morning that Christopher first used the umbrella his mother had given him for his seventh birthday." This sentence is very long and contains, IMHO, too many words. I'd write, "The rains of spring soaked the winter away. On a gray April morning Christopher first used the umbrella his mother had given him for his seventh birthday."
"I almost got you, Mr.. (an extra dot should come out) Toad, I'm sorry."
Dave
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Hi Dave! Thank you! For some reason my keys are jumping twice...my pc is old, and may need cleaned or just replaced. I do wipe it down, but can never get between these keys. ?? Thank you for another kind and very welcome review!! Susan
