Snowman 1
A young boy loves the snow21 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Something needs to be done about the bullying. I won't allow even a hint of it in my classroom. Unfortunately, I have no control over the buses or walking to and from school. I wish I knew the answer.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Something needs to be done about the bullying. I won't allow even a hint of it in my classroom. Unfortunately, I have no control over the buses or walking to and from school. I wish I knew the answer.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Hi Barb! SO sorry for this late reply!! GOOD FOR YOU! It is hard, you can't be everywhere. But the teachers here were ask to keep an eye on things, and they all stand around out where the buses park, so there was really no excuse here. I don't know either. It's up to the parents to teach their kids not to do this and to punish them if they do. SOmehow? ") Good to hear from you young lady!! Luv, Susan
Comment from BethShelby
I enjoyed this story. You are right. So many kids are bullied and no one cares enough to help them. I remember riding a school bus with bigger kids. There are always bullies on school busses who love to pick on smaller kids. If they cry they are bullied all the more. I love the fact the snow comes to the defense of this helpless child.
devouring more children into its bowls (did you mean bowels ?
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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I enjoyed this story. You are right. So many kids are bullied and no one cares enough to help them. I remember riding a school bus with bigger kids. There are always bullies on school busses who love to pick on smaller kids. If they cry they are bullied all the more. I love the fact the snow comes to the defense of this helpless child.
devouring more children into its bowls (did you mean bowels ?
Comment Written 26-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Hi again Beth! THANK YOU! I fixed this too. And that is true! Sam was treated like that. And we went to the principal and it was actually worse then. I don't get it. Thank you for this kind review, and I hope you are keeping warm...:) Susan
Comment from Trybuck
Hi Susan,
A great story this for this time of year. Too many children are bullied around at school and at play. Every once-n-awhile someone will defend the one being bullied but not often enough... I know...
Well done with a few minor typos, Buck
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Hi Susan,
A great story this for this time of year. Too many children are bullied around at school and at play. Every once-n-awhile someone will defend the one being bullied but not often enough... I know...
Well done with a few minor typos, Buck
Comment Written 26-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Hi again! Thank you very much for reading this! ANd I will check it again for spags? I know too, my brother and I were bullied as was my son all thru school. ANd now, well, that's another story! Lord people are just awful at times. I am so sorry for this late reply, and thanks again!! Suse
Comment from misscookie
What a wonderful story you told about bullies
I love the movement and respect how you told the story this is something every parent and child should read then they too will know how the other child feels.
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What a wonderful story you told about bullies
I love the movement and respect how you told the story this is something every parent and child should read then they too will know how the other child feels.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Oh that's a great idea! Maybe some teachers would read this to their classes? That would be so neat! Thank you for a grand review and the idea too!! xoxo. Susan
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Try it, your very wecome. take care.
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I will ask Barbara Wilkey and Adewpearl? They are or were teachers? HUG! Susan
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Let me know how it turns out.
Comment from c_lucas
I found if you fought back, the bullies left you alone. This is very well written in a smooth flow of words, There is good imagery and descriptive scheme.
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I found if you fought back, the bullies left you alone. This is very well written in a smooth flow of words, There is good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Yes, you would think...but when the kids grow into mean adults and you try to fend them off, watch out! IT's game on! Long story there...Thank you my dear friend...I am so grateful for your kind and welcome reviews! Susan
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I spent years as a counseling. One of my favorite anedotes was about a woman who sewed her abuser's bedsheets together and took a broomstick to him.
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Remember Farrah Fawcett in "The Burning Bed"? And she was in another where she beat her rapist too. Wow.
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No. I didn't see that one.
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No. I didn't see that one.
Comment from The Stranger
happy christmas my friend, lovely to see you once more sharing your thoughtfully constructed work once more, heres to a great 2011 for everybody here on fanstory
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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happy christmas my friend, lovely to see you once more sharing your thoughtfully constructed work once more, heres to a great 2011 for everybody here on fanstory
Comment Written 26-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Hi again! I am happy you enjoyed this? It means a lot to me as my son was treated this way for years...thank you again !! Susan
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Susan, this is an interesting story of a bullied boy getting help from Frosty the Snowman. I bet the experiences of your son at school prompted you to write this story. As usual, this is well written with a good plot and flow. A little magic is permitted at Christmas time ... :)
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2010
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Hi, Susan, this is an interesting story of a bullied boy getting help from Frosty the Snowman. I bet the experiences of your son at school prompted you to write this story. As usual, this is well written with a good plot and flow. A little magic is permitted at Christmas time ... :)
Comment Written 26-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2010
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Hey! You did read it! THANK YOU! Yes, it did. And he used to really love Frosty too! I thank you very much Belinda! What a joy to have you like this one! ") HUG! Susan
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Sorry I sometimes miss your posts. Not enough time to browse lately ... :)
Comment from Magic Wand
Five stars for Frosty! The Bullying Issue is so timely today, with more and more people willing to take it on and help the bullied children fend for themselves by teaching by playing and empowerment exercises. There will sadly, always be bullies, but if more and more people walk away from them, instead of enabling them (as in the friends who accompany them), maybe they will find other ways to make themselves feel important.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Five stars for Frosty! The Bullying Issue is so timely today, with more and more people willing to take it on and help the bullied children fend for themselves by teaching by playing and empowerment exercises. There will sadly, always be bullies, but if more and more people walk away from them, instead of enabling them (as in the friends who accompany them), maybe they will find other ways to make themselves feel important.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Hi there! Wow, thank you for such an enthusiastic review! SO nice of you. If you know of a teacher who would like to read this to their class , please feel free to share it? I am happy you enjoyed this! You have it exactly right too...mean people like the fear and power they create. Susan
Comment from Dave M
Susan,
This is an excellent Christmas story about a little boy whom nobody much liked. I enjoyed this post and found a couple of nits:
"With that, Mrs. McElroy clutched her sons [son's] chubby cheeks and kissed his furrowed brow."
"...seemingly devouring more children into it's bowls [its bowels],..."
We've had a rare event for North Georgia, a white Christmas. Something like four inches of snow, and about half of it remains.
Dave
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Susan,
This is an excellent Christmas story about a little boy whom nobody much liked. I enjoyed this post and found a couple of nits:
"With that, Mrs. McElroy clutched her sons [son's] chubby cheeks and kissed his furrowed brow."
"...seemingly devouring more children into it's bowls [its bowels],..."
We've had a rare event for North Georgia, a white Christmas. Something like four inches of snow, and about half of it remains.
Dave
Comment Written 25-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Hi Dave! Thanks, I fixed the spags! Great review and so encouraging ... I am happy to hear your thoughts and I wish you a Happy New year too!! Susan
Comment from adewpearl
clutched her son's chubby cheeks - add apostrophe for possessive
first math, then English class - capitalize English
Isn't it sad that some kids become the unpopular ones and for such stupid reasons, like having ears that stick out or a rounded head. I like the rather magical ending to your story and the dialogue, quite realistic, throughout. Good character development and you get inside this little boy's thoughts well, Susan. Merry Christmas :-) Brooke
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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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clutched her son's chubby cheeks - add apostrophe for possessive
first math, then English class - capitalize English
Isn't it sad that some kids become the unpopular ones and for such stupid reasons, like having ears that stick out or a rounded head. I like the rather magical ending to your story and the dialogue, quite realistic, throughout. Good character development and you get inside this little boy's thoughts well, Susan. Merry Christmas :-) Brooke
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Comment Written 25-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Hi Brooke! SO sorry for this late reply! I fixed these and sure appreciate your time to help again! SOMEDAY I want to get WORD, so I can do better hopefully. If you know a teacher who would like to read this to their class, please feel free to print this and share it. Miss Cookie thought of it and I don't mind. Happy New Year Brooke! Susan
